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I did things, once.


Note: This story is currently undergoing rewrites. A blog will be posted later describing some of these changes.

As I wake up, my head aches and my throat burns. Where am I? How did I get here?

Blurry memories of pain and suffering fade in and out as I try to identify my surroundings. There is a vague familiarity to the place but I don't know why.

I begin to ask myself many things. What am I doing here? Where is "here"? Why can't I remember anything? Why can I not even remember my name?

All the same, I can only manage to recall but a few precious memories. Something is very wrong with this place. And my friends—friends whose names I do not even remember—are in terrible danger. Something very bad has happened to this place and everypony in it. My body becomes cold and I am denied every other thought except for one:

I must escape.

An adaptation of Amnesia: The Dark Descent in the world of MLP:FiM. Formerly titled "Amnesia: The Equine's Shadow"; name was changed, but is not final. Rewrites are in-progress.

Reading by CrazedRambling (very outdated): I / II / III / IV / V / VI

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 53 )

I think (having played the game myself) that this is a really well-written and interesting pony version. :pinkiehappy: Keep up the good work!

Game was awesome. Story is awesome. Keep it up!

The amazing thing about this story is that I can completely visualize the castle, and I'm actually getting a bit nervous. That may have something to do with the fact that I'm reading this in almost complete darkness with the page on the dark setting, and at four-thirty in the morning during a thunderstorm, but still, it's really well written. This is one of the first Amnesia crossovers I might actually follow.

I wonder what would happen if someone made a crossover with Penumbra :derpyderp1:, time to read this :pinkiehappy:.

Wow. Just... Wow.:rainbowderp: Tracked so hard.

MOAR!!!!!! You nailed this, can't wait for the gatherers! :pinkiecrazy:

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Thanks a ton. :pinkiehappy:


Funny, I actually wrote this story at almost 4 AM. For some reason, it's not as scary when writing it. (Well, at least not unless you have ominous ambient music playing in the background...) Thanks for the comment!


As a matter of fact, a pony-version of Penumbra is one of the first items on my list as soon as this story is finished and out of the way. It might be tricky to do, but then again, how much easier is it to write an Amnesia/MLP crossover? You'll have to wait and see what I have in mind, though. :pinkiecrazy:

936493 Oh no, Penumbra :fluttercry:! I just remembered, I only played the sequel to penumbra and the starting of Requiem. Now I need to get a computer with sound and beat the Penumbra series :pinkiecrazy:.

I love the eery atmosphere of Amnesia to begin with, seeing it brought to life in literature is even more entertaining. Of course, throwing in our favorite colorful ponies just makes the whole package more outstanding. Question for the author though; would you mind if I did a reading of this to put up on YouTube?


I wouldn't mind at all, go right ahead! :pinkiehappy:

Lol a new chapter, so much reading I have to do today :derpyderp2:.

First I was like :pinkiehappy: at seeing that the fic updated. Then I was like :rainbowhuh:. Then I was like :unsuresweetie:. Then I was like :fluttershbad:. Then I was like :rainbowderp:. Then I was like:derpyderp2::derpyderp1:. This was amazing.

Who in hay is this freak? There's only two people that I remember talking like that, and that's the old man and Alois. I really hope it's not the latter...

Although it may not be him, considering he was from Amnesia: Justine. Either way, just as good as the first two. Still on the edge of my seat.

Oh man, wouldn't it be terrible if her friends were the monsters hunting her down? :pinkiecrazy: Heck, there's already a video showing three of them as Amnesia monsters.

Once again, putting off a story way after everyone else has read it pays off in the "No cliffhanger :D" department.

Knew it! And I think I also called it sort of in chapter 1 or 2... On with the story!

Well the note did say that the elevator was broken... I'm honestly surprised she didn't remember that. But aside from that, it's still really good.

Great job writer. :pinkiesmile: Reading this story is just like playing the game all over again. I got so immersed that i really wanted to slap some since into twi and tell her to stop making small talk with the monster and Vamoose! If twi wants to survive this ordeal with monsters, she going to have to do these three things.

1: Flip them the hoove
2. Run
3: And Fast!

Woah! A Fluttershy Suitor? This is getting good! :pinkiehappy:

979340 You kind of forget stuff like that when your being chased by your friend and have no fucking idea of why they are your friend or where you are besides knowing your name.

I get that, but this is Twilight we're talking about. You know: able to read seven chalkboards at once, plus working at least three telscopes.

I'll admit, getting chased by your friend would make you forget a few things, but knowing her, she'd have kept it in the back of her mind the whole time.

1003278 She at a flower pedal that made her forget everything so she dose not know that she can do that.

I'm just willing to leave it at this. I'll believe she's still somewhat like her old self, if lacking a few key memories that would change herself, and you can believe she lost everything. Love and tolerate, right?


Oooooh, Rainbow Dash is next to hunt Twilight. Dis gon b good!
Don't tell me Vinyl Scratch was the one that died, the friend Octavia mentioned. That would make me sad :(

NO!!! HE GOT FLUTTERSHY!!!!!:fluttercry: AND PINKIE!!!!:pinkiecrazy: AND THE REST!!!! :raritydespair: :rainbowderp: :applejackconfused:

Well, thanks for clearing that point up. Now I know she just misread the note.

Unfortunately, I knew the Ardyh was the Kaernk right away. I guess that's what comes from having both seen many playthroughs and getting through the game (eventually).

I really doubt Vinyl would have been at the gala. She doesn't seem like the type to attend formal parties like that. I honestly think it was one of the other musicians in the quartet.

"ash-black coloured mane and tail"
*fanboy squeal*

Though something tells me that she might not make it...

I must say, I was rather hesitant to fav this simply because it is so dark. However, It is well written so I'll give it credit.

Well, this is interesting.

I just hope 'Tavi doesn't die. Keep going!

Oh man... looks like it's been a while since an update but I'd love to read more of this!
I also feel kinda stupid, not having realized until this last chapter that "Aleck Zander" is just a variant of Alexander. I guess these are the perils of those who read silently.

2225126 "Alack Zander"... Given a bit more forethought, I'd have come up with a much cooler (and more original) name. Well, too late for that now. :raritydespair:

...Ah, which reminds me. I'm working on getting Chapter 8 published right as we speak; I literally noticed your comment right as I'm typing it up... Some coincidence... At least you (or everyone else following this story) needn't wait that long. I predict that, after proofreading, it'll be ready by the end of this week. :pinkiehappy:

2225439 Really!? That's awesome! Can't wait to read the next chapter then.

Well, I haven't seen a scary game crossover in ages, let alone one that's made it to feature. The last one I read was called 'Silent Ponyville' and the entire thing was just one big scary clusterfuck. I've played the game Amnesia, and I must say that this caught my eye when I saw it. Anyways, I am going to give you a more formal review, for the sake of being nice. You can expect it quite sometime later as I've got to get stuff finsihsed today. Who knows, you may impress me enough to get me to mention this in a blog post of mine.

Dude, don't sweat it!
Every chapter is a good chapter.
Usually I don't read unfinished stories, but curiosity got better of me this time. I spent all night reading this stuff and it was totally worth it!
So, best of luck to you!

((Sorry for the late replies, but I was without internet access for the previous two weeks, I'm afraid. Stupid backwoods "vacation". :ajbemused:))

2531503 Thank you! :twilightsheepish: It really means a lot to hear that my writings are being received so well. I'll try to keep on top of my updates from here on out!

2526180 ...Although it has been a couple of weeks, I would still very much appreciate a review, if you're still interested in that. It would certainly be a bit more constructive than the simple "cool story bro" or "nice chapter yo" comment. If not, well, I won't trouble you with it. Still, I'm glad the story caught your eye regardless, and I'll be sure to keep at it. :twilightsmile:

2619909 No actually, I forgot about it myself. :twilightsheepish: Sorry, sometimes I lose track.

2619915 Oh, I see... That's okay, I'm rather prone to that kind of thing as well. :facehoof:

2619922 I'm having to re-read it. Forgot what I read. :rainbowlaugh: Irony? :rainbowderp:

Perhaps it is just me, but I hate it when the first the chapter copies off the beginning of the game. I mean, it's not a rip-off, but I think my problem is when the cross over isn't set up to be it's own thing. Don't get me wrong, you kind of did that later on, and it gave such a different feel compared to the game. The game was a puzzle with a terrifying story line. I imagined that this would be something that was just plain terrifying. I really wasn't that far off guess.

You used a lot of '...' throughout the story. It's not good to do that, although it does help set up certain parts of it. It isn't the proper use of the pause in many places. Use it in thoughts and dialogue.

I love the psychology and the thoughts of the character. It's absolutely mind boggling that you captured the emotion of fear so well. It's impressive sir. You also captured the setting and the atmosphere of everything being so scary. I am truly impressed by the level of description, and now I see why this made it to feature. It's written so well, and it really pulls in the reader. If i didn't have Top Gear on right now, I might be able to concentrate a little more on this story. I know I want to read more, and I will. Just this review is based off your first chapter so far, and besides a few dislikes of certain cross-over elements (You can't help it, and neither can I), this is really good. i am trying to be as constructive as I can, but hey sometimes people write things right the first time, and there isn't a lot you can help with. As a review writer I hate not having hings to complain about :rainbowlaugh:. Oh well, if you want an even fuller review later on, I can do that, as for now I hope this will suffice. Gets me inspired to rewrite my own cross-over, something I needed to do anyways. Anyways, if you need my help for anything, just send me a message. I'm a pretty friendly guy, at least I fucking think so, ya pony loving freak of a guy who sits and writes good stories. Ic an't say much, I do the same thing...

Final Verdict: Scary, good, and I need a darker room to play Amnesia. I'm not scared enough.

2620034 Ah, yes... I'm slightly... obsessed... with those ellipses... sometimes... I might have to... lay off on those... and stuff. But seriously now, thanks a ton for the review. I'm actually rather surprised; this is my first ever bit of writing that involves horror and mystery as a main theme, and yet people (you included) tell me that I seem to pull off this stuff expertly. Well, I suppose it's been a while since my last ego stroke, so... AHEM, moving on.

The issues with the crossover base notwithstanding (I'm fully aware of such problems, but I guess I'll have to live with 'em), I know that the story isn't perfect; in fact, while I re-read through it the other day (I have a habit of rereading the previous chaps I've written, mostly to make sure the story stays consistent as I'm writing it) I caught quite a few errors that I somehow missed over. You'll probably know them when you see them. Since at the moment I'm unable to devote much time for reediting, I'll have to put QA edits on the backburner for now...

Again, thanks for taking the time to review what I have, and I appreciate all your honest words. You said... first chapter, right? The story is still incomplete at 8 chapters, but I'm roughly at the halfway point in writing by now. Maybe 15 or 14 chaps in total is what I initially planned, anyway. A "fuller" review might be nice to have, but I won't trouble you with it right now; at the moment, I think this gives me a pretty good idea of my progress. Once again, I thank you, good sir. :twilightsmile:

(PS: I'll keep that offer of assistance thing in mind. :raritywink:)

2624298 Yeah no story is perfect It would be impressive to see, but most of the time there are always things that would make it better. As for doing the entire review, maybe later when I allow myself some good reading time. As for now, I might go and rewrite my small 'scary' crossover featuring Twilight and Companion Cube (sorry, shameless self promotion... sort of). I feel like I could have maybe added some more after reading your chapter two, but instead I found inspiration. :rainbowwild:


:heart: With all the art out there, and mods and fan videos i believe i have FINALLY found the original source of this concept and I loved every word. I dont play Amnesia but the Amnesia / Pony crossover has been a fascinating journey, and there are some passages that even made me jumpy :derpyderp2: !! I look forward to the next installment if you plan on making one, it would be a shame to let this go when the inspired fan base behind it is so big... not to mention your text is well written. Excellent show!

*Pokes story*

It's dead, Jim.

4186143 Its certainly looking so :fluttercry:

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