• Member Since 6th May, 2017
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SoarinDash-lover


"Don't ever mistake my silence for ignorance, my calmness for acceptance, or my kindness for weakness." Hello as you can tell I am a huge shipper of Soarindash and I love randome284 and Calm Wind

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There's not a lot here to gauge an actual opinion on. It kinda comes and goes so quickly that you even have much time to register what happened. The writing is kinda amateur but certainly not bad or horrendous, so that's a bonus.

Hm... I'll see where this goes, the premise you advertised in the description sounds pretty interesting and I'm curious to see how you go about presenting it. :twistnerd:


Basic terms: You have my interest.

8149502 Thank you. I'll try and work on that. Like I said this is my first time ever writing a story like this. Thanks for the advice :pinkiehappy:

Comment posted by ChloeDash2004 deleted May 24th, 2017

I wuvv it!:heart::yay:
yes, I'm the type of person to fangirl about a story that has 1 chapter, don't blame me

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Tahnks!! Im so sorry about the second chapter not being up. I can barley comment on my phone. As soon as we get internet I'll post an update and the second chapter. Thanks for the comment and your pateince!:pinkiehappy::rainbowdetermined2:

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I know it'll be worth the wait!
I hope your internet will be fixed soon, not just for a new chapter, but just for well... You know.... Everything else too

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Thank you!:twilightsmile: I should be getting it soon. I hope the next chapter won't be a dissapointment! :pinkiehappy:

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Thanks:pinkiesmile: As soon as I get internet, next chapter will be up, PINKIE PROMISE:pinkiehappy:

IM FUCKING SCREAMING HOLY SHIT THAT WAS GOOD IM IN TeARS

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Thank you! It's my first time writing! Hope I don't disappoint :pinkiesmile:

This is pretty good
I have a few criticisms regarding some spelling errors, but that's mostly it

Good luck by the way, it seems you have a drawn out plan for this story, which I can't say the same for some of my current projects :P

Dash's eyes widened when she saw Soarin's dick for the first time

you telling me they have been married for a year and not fucked until now ? :rainbowhuh:

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Sorry :twilightblush: I wanted to write her first time. It does seem a bit weird that they haven't had sex before and have been married for over a year.

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ya no problem i just thought it was weird
every thing else was good just that one little thing popped out at me

Awesome! I can’t wait to read more :pinkiehappy:

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Thanks. Next chapter will be up today or tomorrow :heart::scootangel:

"You're in heat, aren't you?" Soarin spoke softly to her and began rubbing her bruised side gently. He began to rub her wing were he had hit it and she winced a little from the pain. He pulled back and immediately regretted doing that. What an idiot. First I hit her with my wing, ask her a very uncomfortable question, and hurt again trying to help. Some husband I am. Soarin thought

Wait what do ya mean by her in the heat?

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When is it gonna be up-it has been a long time :fluttershysad:

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I'm so sorry. I haven't had enough time to work on it like i had hoped. I'll post a blog within the next hour or so and explain things

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Good guess. I was trying to make it as obvious as possible. Chapter 5 will be a little bit. I have to ask someone if I can use some of their characters and their setup of something. As soon as I get permission Chapter 5 will be published. :twilightsmile:

Well that was hot, goddamit didnt know Sparin had 10 inches(thats actually bigger than my ex's 7 inch but whatever)

One problem i have with this chapter:

I saw her puking up blood.

Should not have this kind of response.

"I don't know much about pregnancy and elements, but I do know Dash is going to be fine, she just needs someone to look after her during pregnancy. She has a pretty good husband for that job."

The proper response is:

Holy crap dude take her to a doctor (this sentiment but not in these words)

It is fine to have your main characters to be a bit clueless in a situation. I think rapid fire would have been better if used reign Soarin in and beat some sense into them. Two paragraphs above you mentioned that rapid fire cared about his team mates, this is the perfect opportunity for him to get Soarin to promise to take Dash to get some medical attention.

Don't take my criticism to hard, I enjoy your story just this one part irked me a bit. I look forward to reading more of your story.

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Thank you for pointing that out to me. So I fixed it and put this in its place. (The little part at the end was to make sure Rapid Fire was still trying to cheer him up.)

"Well honestly the best thing to do is get her to the doctors ASPA. I don’t know much about pregnancy but I do know that’s not supposed to happen. Besides if anyone can help her it’s you, she’s to stubborn to listen to anyone else."

If you see anything else wrong please tell me. :heart::twilightsmile::pinkiesmile:

Oh no you evil evil person:rainbowlaugh:
I loved it:heart::heart:

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Even if I have to write a 5 word story you guys will know today, Pinkie promise :pinkiehappy::heart:

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Wasn't planing on breaking it anyway. Now I have more of a reason to hurry up. :rainbowlaugh:😂

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Told you. Hope it was good enough for such a short chapter I rushed through. :pinkiehappy::heart:

Good job... Never break a pinkie promise ',:):pinkiehappy:
I loved it:heart:

i hope those last couple of lines arnt for shadowing rainbows demise

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Sorry. Life hasn't been very kind lately. I'll do a blog that explains everything after I post this. Soo sorry about not updating. :pinkiesad2:

rainbolt and rapid fire those sound more like names for spells then names for Pegasus

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Rainbolt is the OC of Soarin_RainbowDash and Rapid Fire is a Wonder Bolt in Calm Wind's stories.

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fair enough and how nice of you to include the oc's of your friends

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well i just recetly joined the website last august so...

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