Daring Do needs Rainbow's help uncovering a lead to a treasure she's been searching for since she first put on her pith helmet. The Crystal Sphere of Khumn. But when Daring finds Rainbow in Ponyville, she sees a lot of things around her house that are...almost familiar to her. Then, once they find the sphere, Daring is restless with strange dreams. But can the answer be more than she expected? And will it lead them to uncover something about their heritage that neither of them believed possible?
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Chapters (14)
what will you do next
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probably show them bonding, it's an important point that helps to progress the story
The premise has me intrigued, I've always wondered why Daring Do and Rainbow Dash look so similar ever since Daring Do was confirmed to be real.
will Rainbow's parents be in the story?
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probably, but not until the two figure out the main mystery. I will include them because they matter in this plot.
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So was I, which is why I came up with this, I just haven't shared it until now
9971371 Can't wait for them to explain the connection between Daring Do and Rainbow Dash, whatever it turns out to be.
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You'll have to wait a little while, a bit more has to happen before they start questioning things. But it's still hinted at through the story.
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Considering the title they kind of need to be, as one must assume Dareing's father isn't her biological dad Rainbow's dad is. I am curious if it's a case of infidelity or sperm donation. If it's the latter was it anonamous or a case of helping a friend?
More!!!
Ravenhoof? Really? Daring Do: Ravenhoof. Indiana Jones: Ravenwood.
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Don't look at me, it's in the official Daring Do books you can buy (I don't know where they're being sold now but I found my set at Barnes and Noble-word of warning, they only have three books in the set, so don't get too excited)
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Huh. Subtle reference is canon and subtle.
Looking forward to more. Keep it up
Another one to add to my Tracking list. Keep up the good work.
This is good, but be careful with the pacing. The scenes in this chapter are pretty much just dialogue and you telling us that something happens. It feels like we’re being whipped from one thing to another.
Maybe try to pad out each scene a little more with thoughts and feelings from the characters; it might help to slow down the scene enough. Also, see if you can make the transitions between events smoother, instead of just suddenly “I’m tired and going to bed.”
Okay, unless Daring was adopted she and Rainbow Dash can't be sisters.
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Be patient and all will be revealed
...Haven't even read it, dunno if I should, but, judging solely from the title and descriptions, I'd guess the two's fathers are either related or the same guy...
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I tried to fix it, but I want to ask you one thing: in real life, is any normal, friendly conversation like RD's and Daring's ever very smooth? Most people, when communicating informally, won't try to smoothly transition into another subject. They'll say whatever they need to in order to get their point across. I'm trying to make this seem natural, not smooth.
I do appreciate your suggestions, really, I do. But in the end how I choose to write the story is up to me.
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By transitions, I was referring to the things they don’t say. Instead of just suddenly having Daring say, “I’m tired and going to bed,” have her come to the conclusion that she’s tired. Something happens that makes her realize she’s tired. You wouldn’t just interrupt a conversation to go to bed would you? You would look at the time, or yawn, or something else would happen to make you come to the conclusion that it’s time for bed.
Also, I’m fully aware that you can write this story however you choose. The pacing just felt off to me, so I thought I’d give some suggestions to maybe help you improve.
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Oh. See, that makes more sense. Yes, I will change that. But be aware that Daring has been seen to have had an uncomfortable night in the first chapter. I was hoping that the fact she hasn't had a good night's sleep in a while would imply to the reader that she was very tired.
Daring seemed interested in going back on an adventure pretty suddenly.
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Well I've noticed that if a story has some chapters that are less than a thousand words they tend to not have that much filler. I should know. I'm the kind of writer with that problem.
9994793 Still, she just suddenly got back on the idea of going on an adventure. Didn't seem like there was any real prompting.
Um Dash knows the cakes so Daring's claimed parentage should not be confusing
this is a nice story
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I said Daring was confused. And at least the Cakes stated that they had relations to Pegasi and Unicorns, while Daring has no idea if her parents are related to any Pegasi
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ah
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thank you!
Oh you tease
So wait when do they realise that they're sisters?
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The adventure has to happen first for them to bond. Then all will become clear.
Does Rainbow forget what happened when Twilight tried to steal the entire Pearl of Transformation from Silverstream's niece? I doubt even someone like Silverstream would just fork over her necklace to the first one to ask.
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Well, it's not that she forgot, it's just that she knows that Silverstream has had more time to trust them than Queen Novo. So she might give in a little easier.
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She is a teacher and is like Pinkie
You've got yourself a new follower
You probably should unless your OC has appeared in previous works.
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It has not. Would you go story or blog?
Holy crap this story's freaking awesome! Definitely tracking and following!
Why does Fleetfoot have a lisp?
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I use her lisp because I try to remain show canon. Some people don't like it but I don't mean it as an insult. It's just how I choose to portray her.
Question before reading: How does this relate to the season 9 finale, or is that ignored here?
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It has no relation to the finale whatsoever as Daring did not make an appearance there.
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Oh, okay, thanks!
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Story
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Thanks
... oh God, Daring Do had amnesia, didn’t she? Either that or subconscious mental suppression of her childhood memories. That’s why the dreams are coming up AFTER she touched the Sphere, it healed whatever repressed the memories and now their popping back up in the form of dreams.
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Actually I didn't think of that...but good idea!
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...well that’s a first
Don’t think I’ve ever made a shot in the dirt on what’s gonna happen in the fix and get the author to respond to it, let alone say it’s a good idea. Thanks!