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Well you're certainly improving in your writing, it start out a little dull at first, but it is more consistent story wise and I hope it get better at it goes along. the only real issue that I see is the part of the love poison which make it sound like it was AJ that had done it to him and not Apple Bloom. the ice cream seen could have been fore worked on to make it more interesting meet up but it still work. the admissions feel awkward but it work anyway. Keep up the good work.
8063728 Thanks man!