Time Warriors
Veitnam… One of the worst places in the world that I know. It’s been almost 2 years sinse I was drafted into this shit, and I’ve lost countless freinds to this conflict. The Russians are coming out of the trees every night trying hunt more of us down, but I and my friend manage to kill a lot of them before they kill more then 6 of us.
“What you thinking about man?” my best freind asks, who name is Scott. He has brown eyes and a dark chin with blue hair that he dyed because he has PTSD from firing his gun.
“I was just thinking about home…” I say with a tear running down my eye. “I want to see the end of the world war to get back to my mom and dad so I can have christmass there like I did when I was a child.”
Scott started to cry so hard. “I hope to be there with you, man.”
I was about to say something to make us hug when we heard the alarm bells aringing very close to eardrums.
“THE RUSSIANS ARE HEAR” THE sargant yelled from across the map of the camp!
*BANG BANG*
*BANZAI!” The enemy scream as they charge at us. I manage to kill five of them very quickly with my lucky AK47 that I stole off a dead Russain a few days ago, but my freind Scott was then shot in the arm and he looked in very bad way.
I lean next to him with tears splashing onto his eyes. “We need to get out of here Sam (My name) or they will kill the rest of u-”
The next thing I remember is becoming very hot and then very cold, like a medical heat and cold pad… It was all black and grey and for a split second, when I thought I was finally dead, I was in pure bliss.
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2 days later
I wake up on a table with my arms and legs strapped down with a doctor looking down at me from a standing position over me. He is writing something down, but I don’t know what.
“It looks like this man and his Freind were the only ones to make it out of the camp raid 2 days ago.”
I silently breath a sigh of releaf as I know my freind is ok and not dead from the Russains. But then I know that the rest of the camp was killed and I start to get sad thoughts of them getting tortured by the evil that is the Russians.
The doctor looks down at me. “You have been selected to go on a mission to stop the war of Vietnam. Using this device you are strapped to that we used to use only to observe the past with little drones that we try not to be detected with, we will send you back into the time circle and have you kill the Russian leader.”
I spit at him. “And what if I don’t?”
He wips the stip. “You have no choce. You must find the enemy and kill the queen that control all the Russains.”
“Okay,” I say, “I’m ready to save America…”
With a nod the doctor turns to a lever beside him and pulls it downwards. Suddenly I feel very wobbly and start to see the room around me fade away…
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EQUESTRIA
Apple Jack was having a good time trying to harvest all of her apples from this years harvest but was having a hard time with one of the trees!
“Give me a hand with this, BigMac!” she asked Bigmac with a smile!
They both spent 2 minutes trying to get the apples to fall down but they would not come down. Suddenlly, when they were about to give up, the tree started to move very fast and the apples fell down even quicker, like rain.
“Is this a earthqake?” asked apple
“I don’t know!” yelled BigMac as a big whooshing sound started to fill the air.
A big flash of light blinded them. *BOOOOOM*
Me and Scott stepped out of the time portal that was just made for us. We did not know where we were, but we knew our mission: To hunt down the enemy that control the Russians to stop Veietnam.
We see two horses in front of us and we smiled as we here very hungary.
Scott took aim at the big, red one as I took aim at the orange one. They both yelled very loud as we did this and I started to think that they were smart animals, unlike the Russains. I put down my gun and looked to scott.
“They look smart maybe we should not kill them”
Scott smiled: “We need to kill the enemy, and we have no clue who the enemy is…”
With a nod we opened fired and killed the two horses on the spot. The bullet casings flew everywhere as the bullets themselves ripped the horses apart limb by limb…
I knew what we did that day was bad, but how should I have known? We were just trying to do our jobs… I hope you, the reader, will understand that I would not have killed the poor animals if they just told us that they did not work with the Russains from the start....
Why didn’t they tell us?!
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The farm was left burning behind us as we left with bags of apples over our shoulders. We ended all their lives to make sure the Russains didn’t get word that we were here trying to stop their future plans.
I pulled out a map and showed it to scott. “I found this map inside that little horses room.”
“Did you kill it?”
I did not want to kill the little horse becuase it was crying and was too cute, so I left it to hide under the bed. Maybe it got out in the fire.
“Yes,” I say glummly.
“Good!”
“This map tell us where a big city is, maybe the king of the Russains, the Tsar, is there. If we kill him, we can stop Veitnam from ever happening!”
We both nod. That was our missan now. To go to the city and stop the Tasar.
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Twilight and her friends were summoned to Canterlot to speak with the Princess inside her massive castle. They took a portal there to save time as per the Princesses instructions.
Though, in the back of her mind, she was wondering where AppleJack was. She should have gotten the message and been there with them…
“Where do you think she went off to?” Asked Rainbow Dash “It is not like her to be away.”
“She will be fine, Darling” Said Rarity with a unsure smile.
Twilight is reinsured by her friends when suddenly the big double doors they were standing in front of open very fast and there stand the two Princess of Equestria. Princess Luna and Princess Celestia.
Everyone bows and the Princess tell them to come inside the throne room.
“We have a problem…” Luna starts. “Two “Time Warriors” as we like to call them have penetrated our time line and are attacking ponies.”
“That’s awful!” Fluttershy says!
“We know, and I’m sorry to tell you something…” They both stop and look back at the 5 freinds.
“AppleJack and her brother were both killed by them.” The room breaks down crying and sobbing. Both the Princesses keep it together because they must be strong for the land.
“We need you to find them, and kill them.” The Princesses smile as they hand the five freinds spears. “If they are let to be aloowed to live they will kill all of us and only you I can trust with this important matter…”
“You can ocount on us, Princess!” says Twilight as her and her freinds leave the room. But in the back of her head again, she is getting bad thoughts, like in some way, somehow, the Princesses weren’t telling the truth about the time warriors....
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Queen Chrysalis looks at her cristal ball and laughs “HAHAHA! I have all of you now!”
A pony drone come over to her and asks what her grand plan is. “Simple!” she says with a grand laugh again! “I have mind controlled the Princesses and sent the main 6- I mean 5, HAHA, at the time warriors! I’ll kill two birds with one stone! Then my plans of taking over the Human world with mind crontoled humans will come into fruition!”
They both laugh very loudly, but little do they know… They aventure of the time warriors has just begun…
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Wow- YOUR BEST WORK YET!!!
First down-vote is mine.
Hey, can you give me credit for the cover art? Please and thank you.
woof
bby take it easy on me
two stories so soon?
2hawt4meh
7975827 You just seem to hate anything that isn't yours.
7975903
because he will never make anything worth while so he bashes other good storys
Can we have, like, three sequels, a spin off, and a plushie for this story in the near future?
7975952
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Am I allowed to give criticism or nah?
7975824 Mortar.
Admittedly, this story could benefit a bit from better editing... but I still think it was an interesting start nonetheless.
It took me a second to realize that the cover art literally says "copyrighted image" plastered over a screenshot of a Call of Duty map.
I mean, I've seen much worse cover art. But that is just lazy. (I mean, I'm not one to talk, since one of my stories features a screenshot image, but I literally have no money to give to an artist to commission an image, and I want to afford a actual cover image one day, just when I get the money)
As for the story itself? It's just bland, cookie-cutter and somehow worse than The Call, the previous story that is similar to this. However I think a ton of mistakes you've made with that story are repeated here.
7976128 I can make you some cover art!!!
I like pie.
I'm like
Holding my sides from laughing
That never actually happens
This is too much
7976290 I can hold your sides for you
7976128
Your surprised, this is windlife
7976367
Forgive me, I'm easy to surprise. Although the only story I've actually read from this guy was The Call, it was…something.
You really need to do some research.
7976600 DONT TELL HIM HOW TO WRITE HIS STORY
7976600
you are a fool. sorry to tell you
7976636 No, he's right. I'm no history buff, but I can at the very least tell you that 'Banzai' is a Japanese cry (originating in the Pacific War according to Wikipedia, fun fact), and would not be yelled by Russian soldiers. And again, not an expert, but I'm fairly certain Japan wasn't involved in Vietnam.
It's also rather rude to call someone a fool without proper provocation, but eh, do what you want.
Of course, you're probably going to delete this comment anyway, so really I don't know why I put this much effort into it.
Oh well, too late now.
Actually, while I'm at it, I'm just going to point out that there's no way for us to know if we like your story or not before reading it, so telling us not to read it if we don't is kinda unhelpful.
Also, 'safe-space'? You do realize you're on the internet, right? On a public website? I honestly can't think of a less 'safe' space.
Oh, and you're missing a period after 'safe-space'. Just noticed that.
Anyway, good day to you, ma'am.
(That any better?)
7976636 "You are a fool" Delete your negative comment! You are going against Windlife's wishes!
7976710 I major in world history and I can confirm that you are wrong.
7976736 Having fun there, pal? 'Cause I am!
Oh, and before anyone accuses anyone of anything, my deleted comment below this was my doing.
7976635 What? I didn't insult him in any way. I just noted that he got a lot of historical facts wrong.
7976710
the russains were in veitnam as a proxy nation. please learn what they teach in school. and yes, tyhis is a safespace becuase I'm a woman that needs it from opressive men like you becuase apparently you just wnat to put me down for being one!
7976761
7976775 YOU CANT TELL THE WRITER HES WRONG. That's like telling a philosopher that what he believes isn't true!!!!
7976710
Your mother's bed is a safe space.
And by "safe", I mean sex.
And by "space", I mean vagina.
7976784 That comparison makes literally no sense. Philosophy doesn't have set details, history does. If I got a fact wrong in a story, I would want someone to tell me. That's one of the reasons we have a comment section.
7976777 Did he even know you were a woman? He called you a man. He didn't insult you in any way.
7976777 Note that I never said anything about the Russians not being in Vietnam. I only said that they would not be saying 'Banzai'. It was the Japanese that I said weren't involved.
I'm also now seriously wondering whether or not you're being serious. Well, more so.
Just to cover my bases:
A) I didn't know you were a woman. I am
about to edithave edited my comment accordingly.B) You don't know my gender, so... yeah, not even going to touch that.
D) I was actually trying to help, not to offend. I apologize if I have offended you. It was not my intention.
7976835 Obviously you're a white male.
7976793 That's a naughty word!!
7976798 STOP
7976798
you are wrong. if history was made to suit you and just you then that means that ww2 was won by the bad people... see how i can switch all up?
7976929 I...literally never said anything remotely like that.
i know a lot of people are against you, and i won't read it because it's not my style of fic, but i am here to so go ahead, write what you want and say fuck of to the haters.
haters only have a reason to hate if your shoving it down their throats
7977243
as the man above you just said. you are a hater and you will not be listened to.
Excuse me I think you need to hear the word of our lord and savior, Adolf Hitler.
safe spaces should not exist. and everything should critiqued. so stop deleting comment's
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7976777 we are not trying to oppress you we are just trying to say what in the story is bad!!!!!
it does not matter if you are a man or a woman on the internet everyone get's told there flaws and if you don't like hearing that then leave the fucking internet or grow some thicker skin and stop whining like a little child
7977501 please keep youre comments to yourself!!
thank you!!!
7977940 http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=White%20Knight number 3 down. that's you