Two army men are sent into a world of violence and killing by the hands of a man who took over Equestria and puppeted Luna... Will they be able to save Equestria from doom?
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We must dare, and dare again, and go on daring.
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i would like to thank my readers for giving this a like thank you!
aslo the smae rules apply here. you get blocked if you give bad critisem!
thank you for understanding!
this is a safe space!!!!!!
NO HATE PLEASE
This is the best story I've ever read.
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thank you for saying kind words to me. this is why i like it here on fimfiction and not other sites that try to make fun of me
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these are the type of things i like to see
VOTE HILARY
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THIS IS A SAFE SPACE YOU WILL NOT BE ALLOWED TO POST TRUMP OR HUITLER BECAUSE OF MY PTSD
The idea of the story is really nice, but I really think you need an editor. Other than bad spelling/grammar, I like the story idea.
5/10
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more trolls
*Sigh*
You know deleting comments only shows your inability to grow from criticism?
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if they are not ging to give me ACTUAL CRITIEM then they can go away
7315958 As harsh as it may seem, there is truth in their words, my man. Even your responses are less than adequate.
You should take the negative criticism and work towards improving, forgo this safe space idea and let the comments flow.
the user name MythrilMoth is tryed to harrass me. it nice to see people giving me NICE comments but people like this will not be here
sorry!
STOP REPOSTING WHAT MythrilMoth SAID. HE IS A TROLL
NOTHING MORE
THANK YOU!
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if you want to edit for me please sned me a pm so i can send you my newest story!
7315983 How mature. "I don't like what they said, DELETE!"
You could do well if you read some of the comments. Try it?
7315988 What about the other 10 train wrecks in your story section?
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no
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As I once wrote in a news article, "Criticism is an author's single greatest resource, for it allows him to see his own work in perspectives that he never thought existed."
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i only try to block the haters and look at the futur. now if you think the stroy is THAT BAD tell me 5 reasones why
7315995 Disliking and deleting peoples comments doesn't take away from their truthfulness.
I am not an edit, and I don't claim to be, but I know story and yours needs help. All 10 of them. If you are willing to hear and consider criticism, I can help you.
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yes
7315996 That's true across all jobs. Criticism is invaluable.
And news article? Hats off to you sir for your media work.
7315999 Only 5? That's too small. Your story has all the hallmarks of top 10 nono's
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then tell me because i think you have not read the story
7316007 You will let me help you?
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yes
Right umm as a professor from the School For New Writers it is my sacred duty to umm ask is English not your first language and if English IS your first language can you umm get an editor? So far this story is all over the place, the plot is cliche as hell but that's fine. my main problem comes from the grammar and language used.
This is supposed to be prophesy
Russians should be capitalized, Savy if it's a name is fine but you need an apostrophe before the "s", cristal should be Crystal since it's a name, and Since not sinse.
That's only some of the mistakes, their are alot and I suggest you get a prereader and an editor to look at your work before posting it, I'm not insulting you and I think you could become a good if not great writer if you put in the work.
Here are some resources that you can use to improve your writing.
Looking For Editors
(For an Editor)
School for New Writers
(For friendly Tips, remember that only professors can post their own threads but you can comment in any thread that's open)
The Shameless Self-Promotion Bureau
(For shameless self promotion)
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We'll get to your story in a moment, first I want to address this comment deleting, because much like Chicago Ted said, we grow from criticism and any good author must be able to see it and accept it, not accept what is said, but that it has been said about your work.
This is my first step, will you accept criticism on this?
7316014 also you should never censor someone's comments because they disagree with you, that discourages criticism and makes people weary to read more of your work.
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i will but can you send it through pm because people on this story are hating me for nothing
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i dont get it. you only say the problem is ONE spelling mistake and a missing '???
that is no reason to hate a story
7316027 Nope, the criticism for the time being will be in the comments. The reason is because you can delete comments and it will be publicly apparent. A PM can be ignored and deleted in silence.
Plus, this way other authors and story techs can chime in.
Now, will you accept criticism so you can grow as an author?
7316031 three things
1: I never said I hated the story.
2: It has more than ONE spelling mistake, if you put it in Microsoft word you'd see a ton of them, the grammar isn't that good either and both of those can be fixed with an editor.
3: People are "hating you" because you delete their comments because they "Hurt your feelings" if someone disagrees with an opinion you shouldn't silence them with censorship you should either debate them or just ignore them.
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if i let you will you look at my new story?
7316039 RRRight >.>
This must be the other half of the trouble. Do you not see the issue with this story?
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agian with the harassment MythrilMoth.
7316045 This man knows whats up give him a coat!
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7316049 He's not harrassing you he's pointing out that there is a difference between Hate and Criticism
7316049 I'm not harassing you. I'm trying to show you how self-destructive your behavior here is. Writers who delete comments wholesale because "you were all mean to me" get a BAD REPUTATION on this website.
Whatever advice your friend is giving you about "trolls" and "8chan" and whatever, I promise you, he isn't helping you. He's making things worse. Nobody here is bullying you. Nobody here is being mean to you. They're trying to make you understand that if you want to post stories on FiMF, you need to be willing to accept criticism. They're trying to make you understand that deleting comments you don't like isn't acceptable.
This is the last comment I'm posting, because I have better things to do with my afternoon than argue with a brick wall, but I hope, this one time, something I have said will stick and you will think long and hard about what it is you hope to gain by posting stories here.