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Penmore
"If you only write when you're inspired you'll be a fairly decent poet, but you'll never be a novelist."
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Liked it!
Only pointer I could raise is that Aria kind of gives the same confession dialogue twice, first to AJ and then to Adagio; so it doesn't have as much impact the second time. Perhaps you could rephrase some of the words she says to Adagio, like 'picked up on things' instead of 'saw the signs' again?
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I'll work on it. Thanks for the advice and glad you liked it.
This is pretty good you should continue it.
The most important question I have after this story.
Did AJ ever get her drink?
Great work.