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Holocron


Gaze within the Holocron and see what stories it has to tell.

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I don't have the link for the original image. If someone has it, please send me a link.

Comment posted by Holocron deleted Aug 1st, 2016

Damn, you really make Elaina (Button's mom) into one hot MILF in this story. Hope maybe we can learn more about "Misty" sexcapades.

Can Misty handle a dragon?

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We talking Spike, or those bigger Dragons?

Dang man this mate can take it! And I was shocked when I read it was buttons mother! Omg!

7446305 Spike has more packages than any dragon.

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I can believe it

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Glad you enjoyed it, and it was a pleasant story to write.

7448547 you're welcome! Keep up stories like this I love em!

I'm not going to give this a rating, but I'd find a way to transition to a flashback without having the whole thing in italics. Heck, I don't think it even needs it. If you transfer the beginning to where things start to heat up, the story would flow smoothly. I was getting annoyed just looking at all the words in italics when it wasn't necessary.

That's my take though. Take it as you will.

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Actually...thank you for that input. I figured the italic font wouldn't be necessary, but have had experience in previous work where the lack of italic to make the separation obvious led to confusion. it was an extra precaution. So thank you for your comment :twilightsmile:

7480340 No problem! Glad to help a fellow writer. :)

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