Sunset Shimmer is my dream girl.
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I think there should be a second chapter to the story. It chould add a little suspense (example: him almost losing or her giving more of a challenge than he thought) or it could reviel a little character development (example:RD having a secret romantic side or maybe having there be an issue in the herd with there being so many lovers that requires hwlp from twilight, like times where they cant share sexy moments or they Fight for some reason.)
Nice work
Hehehe I kind of want this to evolve into a full length HiE series, but just having the clop stories is fun enough loving this series by the way
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Agreed, this just felt way too short compaired to the others, it nneds a bit more substance.
So i guessing the next mare to join his herd is Pinkie Pie followed by a return to Equestria defeat Discord and finally Twilight joins his herd
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I think each of these story-splits could do with extra chapters.
As a polite request to the author, I think it'd be a great idea to flesh out these chapters. You're doing nicely. :D
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Now your talking.
Heres a song 4 yah.
https://m.The plot just got 20% more interesting.
Most excellent.
Wasn’t expecting rainbow dash to pop in like that.