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In a world where Rainbow Dash witnessed an epic magical duel as a filly, the day before the Summer Sun Celebration was supposed to be just a boring delivery. It turned out Ponyville had something more in store for Rainbow Dash than she would ever have guessed.


Marked 'Complete' but I'm not sure yet if I want to do anything more with this. The story should work reasonably well as a one-off chapter, but if I decide there's more to be written, I'll probably come back to it.

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Sweet, slice of life Raridash fluff. That ending with nightmare moon felt a bit pointless. I think it would have been better to have it end earlier with the implications of the crisis instead. If you gonna have a one-shot end on a cliffhanger you should at least have a epilogue of some sort that shows the future view of their status quo.


I can understand where you're coming from with that. I guess I was personally just very fond of that joke right at the end, and felt I needed to continue on to see it through. Although I don't see it as that much of a cliffhanger on the end, since it's more of a 'prequel' to the future from the finale. We sort of know where that future leads.

Thanks for the feedback though, I always like hearing from people!

Yes, but that's my point though. The joke was obvious before they went in. The joke didn't need to pointed out and because it was, it felt like a 'I have told you a joke and I have also explained the joke in case you missed it' dumbdown. Any humor pertaining got completely nullified by proxy.

That ending... not so good, it kind of ruined the story for me.

Well done Rarity Dash pairings are hard to come by. I certainly wouldn't mind seeing more.

It was a great story but like Pink Rocket said, it would probably be a bit better if it was continued. It's an alternate universe so it would be nice to know what's different in this universe. To me it wasn't really clear as to where the rest of the main 6 were in this story, it would be cool to see how Twilight, AJ, Pinkie, and Fluttershy met Rainbow Dash. Just my thoughts, I know this was made a while ago but like I said, it would be really cool to see the story continue. It has potential.

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