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Azure129


Fic writer/reader. Humor, romance, drama. You can read stories by me about other fandoms at my ff.net account :) And please support me on patreon! https://www.patreon.com/user?u=319852&u=319852&ty=h

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This story is a sequel to Donut Nights


*Set during or after season 5*


It's the Hearthswarming Eve after that last fateful Hearts and Hooves Day night when Princess Luna visited Canterlot's best donut shop for a snack and discovered a special connection with the baker Donut Joe. Yet, despite months of visits (and flirting), their relationship still continues not to progress beyond the friendly to the amorous (though both ponies secretly wish it would!).

Finally though, just as it seems the couple is making some progress, who should walk into the donut shop but...

...Princess Celestia, of all ponies!

Yes, Princess Celestia enters, and she has an urgent (Discord-related) request of her sister. The situation quickly escalates into a princess fight, passionate confrontations, and shenanigans galore! :trollestia:


Beautiful cover art used with permission from lovelyneckbeard


Beautiful ending art done for this story by Stepanda


Sequel:
Donut Nights 3: Nightmare Night Canoodling

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Hmmm...

A magic mirror that let's Discord see friends and people at anytime, and it's a gift... Bride of Discord much? :yay:

A treaty telling Discord that his Chaosville is now accepted as part of the government and him being able to work with government now... This has been a very "Interesting Night" of reading awesome fanfics. :rainbowkiss:

I hope there's more! I absolutely adore these nice stories. Will there be a 3rd one?!?!? Have a Merry Christmas, and have a fantastic Hearthswarming. Goodnight! :heart:

aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaarghhhh
soooo much cuteness haha
i loved it :D
gosh i just really wanted Tia and Discord to kiss for real in the end xDDD
buuuuuuuut still very cute ^^

WoW:rainbowhuh:...I was pleasently surprised that, even if only for a very short time, Joe was actually upset with Luna. And as for celestia being just a teensy tiny bit upset with discord, it helped to keep me intrested.
Don't get me wrong I absolutely adore your stories, but...sometimes (even in a story that is tagged COMEDY/ROMANCE) a little bit of trouble between two characters is a welcome change, and helps make certain situations more intresting. I was glad you did that, I don't remember you doing that in a light-hearted story before. Like I said I was pleasently surprised:rainbowkiss:

Please, do it again sometime:raritystarry:

OH! Also, I loved it:heart:

"The Magezines"...Oh my god, Luna was so unbelievably cute:heart:

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Thanks, I’m so happy you liked it! :twilightsmile: And yeah, I figure if Joe just had an infatuation with Luna or hadn’t spent a lot of time with her yet, he might have let something like the dream thing slide. But at this point they have a close relationship and he has genuine feelings for her, and I wanted to show that even if he might get a little nervous about making sure to please Celestia, with Luna he’s willing to be honest about his feelings. And I also figured her technically spying on his private dreams about her would push pretty much anypony over the edge lol. The same thing with Celestia—by now I figure she and Discord would be close enough that they could have a fight as friends, and that his kiss would push her over the edge.

It’s okay, I understand entirely. Actually, with MCNE, what’s going to happen now as we get into the gala and the aftermath is that the closer Discord and Celestia get, the greater chance there’s going to be for disagreement, and they’ll have to work through that (especially as things move into a romantic area). KCCO has some of that conflict, but I usually don’t have enough space in the one shot stories to let it develop completely. But maybe I’ll try writing one one day about the two of them just having a fight, just to see where it would go.:raritywink:

And yes, Luna is most adorable princess when she tries her best to be modern! :heart:

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Thanks, I’m happy you liked all the fluff!:scootangel:

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XD I’ve actually never read Bride of Discord, though I think I watched a clip of part of the audio drama version once. I just thought the mirror could work as sort of a mini Equestria Girls portal type thing. And yes, Discord now has his own nation-state thingy—let the political shenanigans begin!

I haven’t decided about a third one of these yet, but we’ll see. I’m glad you enjoyed this installment though. Happy New Year!:twilightsmile:

I really enjoy your stories, in fact you are among one of the only writers on Fimfiction that consistently writes good Dislestia content. However, most of your stories suffer from a writing flaw I like to refer to as "Walls of Text". Your paragraphs tend to ramble, and this sometimes makes the character's interactions seem a bit awkward (Not the good awkward, like from a storytelling standpoint. More the forced awkward). If you could maybe try to simplify your dialogue and descriptions, your delivery would improve a bit.
Also, don't use exclamation points outside of dialogue. For example:

And then he leaned in and planted a full kiss right on Celestia’s unsuspecting lips!

It comes off a bit sloppy.

Other than that, I absolutely love your writing. Keep up the wonderful romcom action.:heart:

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Thanks, I’m glad you’ve found my stories enjoyable. :twilightsmile: I understand—streamlining is an issue I’ve worked on for quite a while and that I’m still trying to improve. ^^ To an extent though, my style’s a little extra descriptive and lingering on details because that’s how the style of my strongest writing influences is. I’m doing my best though to find a good balance, and the fan fiction writing thankfully gives me a lot of opportunity to practice improving.

As for the exclamation point, I understand what you mean and normally I wouldn’t put one into narration, but in this case I added it for the sake of giving the moment some more urgency and to express more how jarring the action was.

Thanks for the review and the notes!

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