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xStellar_Bubbles


A derp trying to make sense of reality.

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On the day of a momentous holiday such as Hearth's Warming, citizens all over Equestria celebrate their nation's founding, and thus get gifts for this joyous occasion. However, there are those, with a certain little filly named Diamond Tiara, who forget about others who don't have the privilege of getting what you wish for in one day.

So, her father, Filthy Rich, comes to a resolution of requesting a simple task right before the holiday starts: to have Diamond earn her presents instead, by doing at least one selfless act for others. What Diamond Tiara doesn't know is that perhaps another foal, or three, may be able to help her along the way as well.

Note: Takes place before Crusaders of the Lost Mark.

EDIT 12/27/15: In the popular stories section! :pinkiehappy:

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Comments ( 16 )

You did excellent work with this story. Diamond Tiara was pretty much what she was before.I liked it, and not just because you wrote it.:rainbowwild:

6770498 Yay! :yay: Any other thoughts? Were the OC's well developed? Was Filthy Rich's behavior believable? Was the pacing alright? :twilightsheepish:

6770502 It paced well, the ending was quick, but seemed alright. The OCs were believable, as well as Diamond and her father. You get the Sentinel Stamp of Approval.:rainbowwild:

You see, if DT had little moments like this in the show, her becoming a better filly in one episode wouldn't have seen so... Rushed.
Still, top story. Well worthy of a like.

Interesting. Diamond Tiara showing compassion for her fellow pony. I like this. Have a like.

6770785 I'm glad you had a good read. :yay:

Great story!

Nice story. Here's a trophy for both you and Diamond for both of your great deeds. :pinkiehappy:

In a mansion constructed in her dwelling of Ponyville, such as that with a blue roof, a marble porch, and with an additional balcony had the father of Diamond, who goes by the name of Filthy Rich, peacefully lounging near a fireplace in his home. The flames burn brightly, illuminating the surrounding area with the occasional cracking, as he sits on a large velvet chair with a newspaper in his hooves, all the while having a lone cup of tea on a side table to accompany him.

I don't get it! Where are the punctuational? In every sense of writing, there needs to be punctuation. xStellar Bubbles, why is this paragraph lacking conjunction? There are no small sentence. There are two paragraph large body with no punctuation and WAY too many nouns. Read the paragraph again and see for yourself.

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