2nd favorite paring

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YAY!!
NOW I WANT MORE ZECORA!!!

569174 dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png

DAT PIC

i wanna get fixed to

best story! need more

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Anthro.... I'm out.

But due to my code of honor I have to hit the like button for it being well written.

Humans are CaptainKirks, I can dig it.

BAHAHAHAHA
dear god i was freaking out in the first chapter
but god that was a good one

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Awwww YEA!

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Why the hell is every Zecora fic centered around her flank and herbal aphrodisiacs?
Loved it regardless.

You might want to update the summary. Not only is the Human tag missing, but you mentioned that the story was rated Teen...

569236WHAT THE HECK ARE YOU DOING HERE BOSS?!!!!
I off to tell LUNA!!*runs*

Domesticating These Human Boys, Falling At My Hooves Like Little Toys.

Note the addition of 'little', sounds a bit better that way I think.

Anyway. Just how hard is laughing too hard? Cause I laughed up a storm reading this, I think my heart might have stopped once.

ALRIGHTY THEN!

this was quite epic if I may so myself.

Eh. Zecora isnt to my taste. More Twi.

But good story anyway, even though I woulda rather had Twi instead.

Well well. Looks like we've found the Equestria of Princess Molestia.

Ok, sooooo it appears that getting "fixed" has a different meaning in Equestria than on Earth... still not sure if I would submit to such a "domesticating" procedure, but it is preferable to the alternative. It has been a while since I've read one of your stories, and I once again must praise you one your sense of pacing and comedic timing; I am especially impressed that you finished this story less than 24 hours after you were asking for requests.

569633 oh no you dont!
*runs after you*

So... Does Twi have feelings for Scamper or not? Im a little confused.

OMG didn't see that coming from Twilight

Good story!

569852OH YES I AM!!
RD HELP ME!!
you didnt claim me! so you dont get my help!
CRAP!
*hijacks a bike and goes even faster*

569900 how about we not do this on someone else's story

569903SURE!
on skype it should be fiii-nnooooo
no no nooo...
I gues on my page!*runs towards user page!*

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Ehhh...
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It's a good thing Twilight decided to not be an asshole again like in the first chapter, Or i would of disliked it,

“I was told I didn’t have a choice coming here,” you reply, a cold chill going over your face.

Well, crap. Imagine if he wasn't okay with this. That'd be kind of rape.

“Anyways, now that you’ve been all properly domesticated to pony life,” Twilight says, putting her suit back on properly, “please head on back to Pinkie’s place. She needs you with those latest orders.”

Bleh.
This story left a bad taste in my mouth, but not because of the quality, but because of the idea. Not that this is a bad thing, mind you. This is a creative idea, and it was expertly written (even if I did skip over the clop like I do with all other stories.). It's kind of interesting, actually. I'd actually like to see it expanded a bit.

Wow, so many comments!

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I do want to make a point about the tone. I do know that there is a creepy kind of undertone, that the ponies will 'fix' the humans whether they like it or not, but I'm trying more for farce and satire than anything with... implications. Also, Twilight is kind of jerk-ish in the first chapter for the reasons revealed in the last chapter, right as the story ends. Wouldn't you act kind of the same way in Twilight's situation?

You just wrote Zecora Porn in ryhme. How does that make you feel?

Because to be quite honest this makes me soooooo happy.

I'd make a longer comment, but I'm on my iPod watching a Korean Horror movie.

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I thought you said that you browse fimfiction with your handy-dandy new laptop?

Anyways... glad that you liked it! This was super fun to do, except for the rhymes. Those were a gigantic pain in the rear.

Zecora is so f---ing sexy.

Wait a minute! If pony magic doesn't work on humans, how did the 'make giant' spell do anything?

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As I said in the clopfic directory, I should have made it clear that magic doesn't work on humans, period, and that what Sweetie did with her weird helmet thingy was a total freak accident that surprised the hay out of Twilight + everypony else. I guess I skipped tge much detail on that.

What I imaged what what happened with the P-90X thing (I didn't write this because I wanted to get to the sex faster) is that the spell per se didn't work, but that it created some unholy form of electromagnetic energy / radiation / strange matter / something like that as a residue then it worked which did make " "you" transform temporarily (like in the Marvel superhero transform sense, guy is bitten by an alien and becomes a meta-human). And then Twilight cured "you" scientifically, w/o magic.

570991 Because she no longer has one

if you know what i mean

i enjoyed the story good job my friend

Wonder what getting "fixed" means? Get to Zecora's place.
What I think...
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Epic Win.

I interesting balance and blend of clop, romance, humor and oddness.

good

570209 Not only that, the anon was dragged to a place against his will and getting bitched at by Twi for something that wasn't his fault; he gets drugged, making his personality do a 180, and accept his new pony name like some kind of sub-creature, like a pet or something. Twilight is a bit of a slut in this one, too.

It's like these humans keep getting shitted on repeatedly. He was so happy, and we know that this world has love poisons in it, the CMC did something to Anon that he didn't want, and basically Twilight dragged this guy to get raped by a Zebra against his will ( cause she's "overworked"), and no one ever said what "fixing" is to the human.

How does this domesticate a human again? "If you behave, we'll fuck you" is what I'm getting here, which doesn't make sense to me. We never know what the human did to make Twi so angry, and wouldn't Twi figure out that some of the humans will only do crap precisely to piss her off just to have sex? Why didn't anyone tell anon this, and why is Twi doing this on her own?

The anon is treated like a dog instead of an individual, even by his "friends" (except Pinkie. She likes everything). It's like he's a second-class citizen. There was no reason for Twi to behave like that. Anon didn't deserve it, and he was drugged and forced to receive something he thought was a surgical procedure that was never explained to him, and Twi's attitude was completely unreasonable.

He had no choice in the matter, was drugged beforehand, and his personality did a complete turnaround afterward. It's like he was brainwashed, and nothing the author says makes any sense.

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Pretty much a rape story, IMO. I'd add the tag "dark" to this for that.

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Well, I just disagree. I could argue about it some more, but I feel like in this point we'll just have to agree to disagree. Sorry that you didn't like the story.

599368 I kind of liked it; I just felt sorry for anon. Stuff keeps happening to him, and there's this serious undertone that the humans are not considered equal in these fics.

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Well, I didn't really get that at all from writing this and the other stories in which the "fixing" thing plays a role. I pretty much disagree with everything. I could talk about the plot points in this story again, but I've already argued those things and at this point it's nothing better than tail-chasing.

I do hope you read my other fics such as my last one, most of them don't go with an angle like the "fixing" angle.

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Thanks for taking my criticism well, btw. On that note, the story is well-written in terms of grammar, flow, and comprehension.

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The criticism points out things that I should have made more clear. That most ponies like humans (except Twi being all frustrated by them), that the potion was a penis-enlargement potion and not a brainwashing thing, that Twi's plans to get good behavior from some humans by promising sex doesn't work so well (but she's so set in her ways that she doesn't know what to do), and that the "you" really felt happy and cheerful about Equestria before visiting Zecora. And other stuff. I referred to all of those things, but I guess I was too opaque.

I guess I'm glad that you 'sort of liked it'. That's something.

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Aha. Okay. Well, that puts a different light on things. Thank you for clarifying that, thus my opinion changes. Now its back to being a silly clopfic.

570808 hey try a trixie or one of the princesses "fixing" story. i mean i wonder how they are handaling this?

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