An interesting group is using a natural phenomenon to their advantage in order to seek out new complex like in other universes... And one certain member ends up in a place he knows all to well.
From the mind of : Dr_Squipadelio
Editor : Sir_Phobia
Publisher: Me
My friend Dr_S. asked for help in a story he randomly came up with. He thinks it might be a hit but from the luck HE has I told him'Good luck, you need it'. He asked for help I complied, see where this is going. In my opinion since we are ALL inexperienced I say
'this will not end well'
Date said : Friday, January 16, 2015
Rated T for swearing, and possible references to anime that may contain blood and/or death.
Chapters (14)
The good thing about being in the Illuminati is that you can tell everyone that you are in the Illuminati and no one will believe you...
You shut up Mr_H. Don't listen to him this will be a great story. And Sir_Phobia... I don't even know how to respond to that...
This looks great so far. Keep it up. Also
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finished this story and at lest for me this story is meh. not bad but good ether. its alright way to kill some time and that's bout it. ill see if your sequel is the same, better or worse....eventually. till then i wish you luck in your endeavors.
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illuminatee confirmed.
Is the nano band gonna get fixed?
What's with all the unneeded extra spaces between words?
I'm assuming the writing gets better as time goes on. It's not bad, but it's not great either. I love the premise, though!
The story has an interesting premise that I've seen before but the writing quality could use work (seen more than a few errors here and there) and the use of colored dialogue is both distracting and unnecessary.
Gotta say, that 'jump' thing is new.
A good read so far with some minor discrepancies. Them being Celestia coming alone at the sudden behest of a strange creature without suspicion in her mind, and her rebuttal speech to Twilight, which was more like an older sister that got annoyed instead of a calm and gentle mother figure.
As soon as I read the 1st paragraph, I knew they were in heat
If you can't alter anything then what's the point?