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Wiz Ahmad


Stopped writing, but still reading now and then.

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After Songbird Serenade's concert, Twilight Sparkle attempts to give Tempest Shadow a fresh start on life, but Tempest is anxious and stubborn, insisting that there'll be nopony that she can relate to heart-to-heart, the frightened townsfolk of Canterlot only adding to her attitude.

While attempting to restart the Mirror for a teleportation presentation, Twilight Sparkle causes a serious malfunction. Tempest tries to use her horn to blow a fuse and terminate the portal's magical power supply, but ends up overclocking the portal, which becomes overpowered and pulls them all in. Moments later they fall through storm clouds, eventually hitting hard pavement. Dazed, the group of friends finds themselves on the run-down streets of downtown Toronto, where they face even greater troubles - and a group of friendly faces.

WARNING: This story contains:
- Discussion about drugs
- Violence and some blood
- Cursing, though no vulgarity

P.S.: This story takes place after the events at the end of the MLP Movie. My Little Pony as a TV show and a franchise does not exist on Earth in this story, so no human knows of the characters' names or existence.

Chapters (41)
Comments ( 127 )

Wow! Great Storyline! Loved it! <3 Keep up the great work! c:

You have my attention. If there will be human x pony romance...this'll be my new favorite story. Tracking, and +1 like.

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Slang term for Toronto or the CN Tower. Popularized by rapper Drake during the release of his hit 2016 album "Views", which was also called "Views from the 6".
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This story is great, but do you think you could make the chapters longer?

‘Somepony said the chapters should be longer’
Yeah that some pony was me last chapter, but so far this story is very well planned!

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Working on #5 as I type this!

i hope you study hard b/c school may suck but you need it take form me and i'm in college

This story gives me the impression that you've never been to our beautiful Terra...

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Yup! Gotta work hard.
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Not sure what you mean by "terra". If earth, then yeah, the little ponies have no knowledge of earth. I deliberately made it that way to make the story more exciting later on :raritywink:

“Twilight Sparkle, Rainbow Dash, Pinkie Pie, Applejack, Rarity, and Fluttershy. Tempest Shadow and Skystar.” I called each one out on cue, and they each raised a hoof (or hand).
Just saying, you forgot spike

Please sir can I have some more?

‘I replied in a lustrous voice, though my Caribbean accent made it sound more like a mischievous kid.’ Caribbean accent? Does that mean ( I can’t believe I’m about to ask this and I don’t mean to make accusations or anything ) Xavier is African American?

This story just hurt my mind. Trigger happy cop in Ontario ? Really ? Maybe in Detroit or New York but Ontario lol yeah right.

Comment posted by Wiz Ahmad deleted Dec 8th, 2017

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IK. I pulled a rare exception for this story. There are always a few bad apples within the police force regardless of country. I warn you though this story may seem to portray the government in a rather negative perspective down the line, given that Tempest will be legally taken to account for her actions. Respect a brotha's opinion plz and thanks for reading

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No worries. Yes Xavier is afro-american. Here's a decent example of what he'd look like:
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Thx, also, this example of what he’d look like is awesome!

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I don’t have a problem with that, you just write what comes to mind.

OK I was into the story utill the main human character. He just figured what a hippogriff was not to mention accurately guessed all their names, provide an explanation to all of them of where and how? They never even asked even if he thinks aliens it doesn't mean he would be composed enough to provide an explanation like if he was a mind reader. There is a lot of things to take into consideration when making a story and most of that seem to be missed in this chapter. Come on

Dont really understand how he would say "Pearl is out of the oyster now". No one says that. Yes yes you saw the movie but come on things to think about when making a story and if it flows properly

Comment posted by Wiz Ahmad deleted Dec 10th, 2017

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Good criticism. I will admit I kinda rushed this part of the story, and will consider rewriting it. I just got a lot on my plate at the moment.

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"No one says that"

Just because no one says that phrase, doesn't mean it can't be said. Don't like it? Too bad. Go read somepony else's fic.

You sure that car is big enough to hold you, 7 ponies, a dragon and a Hippogriff princess?

“I answer all your questions. Right here, right now. So, what’s it going to be?”

Should be “I’ll answer all your questions.”

Also, when Tempest was explaining her story to the people around her, she mentioned ‘he’ which I can only presume was Storm King. If possible, have it shortly explain who ‘he’ (Storm King) was as she tells her story.

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Thanks for the note on that dialogue line. I did want to give more detail on the Storm King, but given who he is the humans would dismiss it as a fairytale of sorts. In addition, Tempest also had limited time to talk, and in such situations you often leave out excessive detail.

hell yeah dood, Toronto! HERE WE COME!!

I like the new cover art you made, very nice!:raritywink:

Man, I wish some cops could just think first before acting.

I read the description and I laugh my ass off!:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

Are you going to write more chapters or are you taking a break?

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Hey there Cap'n! Thanks for asking. Final exams are just around the corner and I've also fallen ill currently, so yeah, on a break. I'll try to work on it periodically starting next month when I can get a proper schedule sorted out.

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Well good luck on those exams, also I hope you get well soon!

Still loving the story dude! Keep up the good work!:twilightsmile:

I think I know... Somehow the ones from Equestria finally got in touch with the guys on Earth in that Auto shop. Am I right?

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I think you're missing the Pinkie Power.

Still loving the story dude, keep up the good work!:raritywink:

So when will you be posting chapter 14?

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As soon as I get a new computer and become comfortable with the (currently) uncomfortable world of programming. Trying to learn cloud databasing for iOS apps atm

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