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Princess Celestia isn't ready to swap with her counterpart. However, with Sunset gone and the weight of her actions only growing heavier, she knows she'll have to go through with her decisions sooner or later. Even if it means sacrificing her role as a Princess of Equestria, and her ability to ever go there again.
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I really like this story
the writing is pretty smooth and the plot doesn't seem contrived after you get over what exactly is happening
sunset shimmer raising the sun was really shocking and out of place (also ,if your going to make her that op have her lowering the sun cuz she's sunset)
I would end the intro poem thing at "I taught her wrong." we know what happened with sunset, so those last two lines seem tacked to continue the story that we already know.
I would also make the long description a bit longer adding just a few more details
Also, I don't think it really needs the au tag (but I may be wrong about that) because this could have actually happened.
And I might tack on a little poem thing on the end and talk about forgetting magic and flight and what it was like to be a pony. Of course that would kinda ruin the whole faithful mirror thing, so you could sorta just foreshadow it and talk about it.
This story is complete?
5519915 Eyup.
Water is my eye
Most faithful mirror
Fearless on my breath
Teardrop on the fire
Of a confession
Fearless on my breath
Most faithful mirror
Fearless on my breath
That was...
AMAZING
You, fab cat, are. A. Genius!!
Damn.
Just, Damn.
Her cutie mark is the sun and she seeks/deals with power the way twilight seeks/deals with knowledge.
Her raising the sun would not be out of character.
Your saying in the group this story lack likes I just added one.....
That was quite wonderful, albeit sad