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I wouldn't do that if I were you. Let their bigotry show as proof of their idiocy, but without that comment, you've no proof that they were being hateful.
That, and FIMFic hates comment deleters.
Hmm, might I guess this was inspired by this? Seems a pretty hefty much like it...
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Duly noted. Description to be changed shortly.
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Ah, you got me!
EDIT: Now that I think about it, I should credit them for the idea.
Lel, a potential comment deleter is trying to look good. How adorable!
Not bad. I can definitely see the influence of Corporal Punishment in this. I didn't notice any grammatical or spelling errors. I definitely enjoyed the fact that Coconut had a thing for balls (I may or may not have a thing for that myself). As someone who thinks a stallion should smell like a stallion, I definitely liked the references to colt musk and the scents of sex. The double penetration was a nice addition a swell.
I also snerked at the surprise ending. Molestia likes watching some stallion-on-stallion action? I can totally picture that.
There were a few places that I felt like the story could benefit from some synonym usage, or even a bit of purple prose to pretty up the descriptive text. For example, you use the word 'cock' 13 times throughout the story, sometimes multiple times in the same paragraph; changing some of those out for other terms (member, shaft, junk, dick, stallionhood, turgid and veiny meatpole [heh]) would add some variety while still getting your point across.
With all that said, I enjoyed it (and so did certain parts of my anatomy). Overall I'd give you a 6.5/10, which is a pretty solid rating for story that's purely clop.
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To be brutally honest, I was painfully aware of the overuse of "cock," but I wrote this in a fit of horny rage and that's my favorite word for it. I was planning to edit it later anyway, but glad you picked up on that.
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I posted Lunar Domination, went to sleep, and when I woke up the following morning I had two messages waiting for me in my inbox.
i.imgur.com/JTJq5d8.png
That is nothing short of absolutely HILARIOUS.
I put two warnings on my story. One being triggers, and the other being that purposefully hateful comments would get deleted. That's about it really.
okay, not my favorite at first, but the ending made it absolutely awesome XD
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There. After a month, I finally changed it. Geez, took me long enough.
I am Celestia in this situation.
And I am okay with, and I am not okay with it.
Jk, of course I'm a little sick fuck.
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Kokona.