Aurora Steel
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- Member Since 30th Jan, 2014
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Aurora Steel
I draw stuff and write stuff, nuff said
Aurora Steel
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If by most people you mean everyone, then yes.
Not to sound too harsh but you are bringing this upon yourself with a shitty sounding alicorn OC
5111499 her name is Princess Spectrum Destiny, she lives in a mountain near cloudsdale and she has only just made herself known to the public because she has been grieving about her parents for 10 years since the night they were cruely taken away from her
She has a title, time in history and a backstory you know
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5111499 Why are being mean? I know your trying to be honest,but people are brutal
5112909 Spectrum that's only one person while he says everyone that's kinda stupid if you look at it for a secound
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I mean, come on. That was just plain rude...
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i do NOT appreciate you being mean to my friend being mean gets you no where trust me i have have had my share of hate comments but that was actually about the story you are just insulting her and you know what your name is really REALLY shitty too i mean come one hatty_hattington that is just retarded how do you feel about that ha and i mean that i think you name is rediscussed and for one think spectrum destonys name is amazing don't be mean to her i would be suprised if she blocks you
i have one thing to say to you
and this.... is not acceptable
that was just plane our mean, rude, and just unacceptable i am with calm winds when he said that was just rude so go take you wining and complaining off of fimfiction and don't be an ass and maby others will be kind to you insted
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i agree with you calm that guy is an ass
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i love this story it is very good
5111499 This Song for you PLOT - HOLE
"She has a title, time in history and a backstory." When
is she making an appearance in the story?
5120496 I meant what tme in the history line she is, if that makes sense
She is like the solar sisters, crystal princess, twilight and rainbow dash, immortal she is just older than cadence by about 4 or 3 years give or take
5120451 Hey, hey, calm down. I already apologised on Destiny's user page
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Sorry comments like that really ruffles my feathers. One of my favorite author on fan fiction pull out because of comment like that. 
So once again soory for going off like that.
5120676 next update coming soon?
5121754 yeah
school is starting next week but I'm on fimfic at school most of the time so i will be getting a new chapter out soon
wait you gonna be on it?!
Forgive me if I bring up old wounds, that not the intention here. I'm in agreeance that you shouldn't put an OC Alicorn in the story, not because its a bad idea, but because of how difficult it is to do right. Alicorns have the inherent nature of being Mary Sue esk and thus are difficult for new writers to wield. Alicorn OC's work best when you have well defined lore and rigid rules for them and an interesting character to back them up. Writing a good Alicorn OC is higher then your level of writing write now.
Your story has a fantastic idea, what happens when you have an Alicorn go through the process of losing someone they love... and then yours has a happy ending in which Soarin does become an Alicorn. However, your writing is meh and your dramatic Loyal Dash scene really wasn't that interesting. It was too dramatic, too over the top and not enough set up. We don't feel anything for Dash dying because we have no thought process of anyone, have no real connection with this Dash that you've created and you have a bad guy for the sole purpose of plot device to make things happen.
Plot devices are fine, but not the ultimate most powerful of all evil dragons. (To be fair, the Trixie Comment was hilarious though). What I would work on before you get into any kind of the weirdness that is called Alicorn OC's, is simple stories where we get to understand the characters and what they're thinking, what their hopes and dreams are and really get to know who they are. You've thrown us into a climax just to get Dash to ascend. If the ascension isn't the point of your story, (and its not according to your summery) it should not be this dramatic and it shouldn't be this early in the story either. So give us some lead up, let us know who these characters are. We do we care about these characters, why is it even important that Dash was THE ULTIMATE LOYAL? So what, its another ascension, whoop-de-doo, seen and read a bunch of these.
That's the kind of feelings I get from this. So make us Care about your Dash, maker her interesting, is she the show Dash? Who is Soarin anyways, everypony seems to envision Soarin differently, so we need to know who the heck he is. Also, the line about We are not just normal Ponies, we are the elements of Harmony and the wonderbolts is actually a turn off. No one would ever say a line like that, except in the most cheesiest or funny of instances... not in an epic nit grit contest against a Dragon by intimidating him by merely saying who you are. Why should this dragon even care.
Just some suggestions. Great Potential, bad execution.
5188254 Well then, you do know this is HER story and see can do what ever she wants with it. Even put you in it and kill you off you know.
5188254 your right Glacier your right, I'm changing it so the story is more interesting, taking out the 'meh dramatic' scene and making the story longer
5245774 Russia you right I could put her in my story and kill her off but I won't cos I'm not that kinda person. I'm thankful for you sticking for me :) thanks
5247158 Yeah you could always do a story with your oc a later time I fully understand just can't wait for the next chapter!
i think you mean course
Just re-read this chapter since you re-wrote it a little
I really liked the revealing of Spectrum. I gotta admit, i always thought your concept of the enchanted shoes hiding the fact that she's a princess to be a very creative concept
5568291 hehe ^^' thanks Calm
WHOO
You added youself! In the story, awesome!
5572118 umm thanks?
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this new first chapter a great built up for the dragon seen.
Let us have a look in the daily life of Soarin, Rainbow, and Scootaloo.
Keep it coming.
Are you gonna update
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5763862 dont worry about it, everything has been sorted out right Hatty?
5763861 I am don't worry! ^^
5764196 YAAY
5764195 sorry it's just I don't like people being said that something is not good abt them but if everything's sorted out then ok ^_^
Nice story, I really like it.
Have you thought about someone helping you out with editing? There are still quite a few mistakes. I imagine that's most of the reason you got all those dislikes.
6020233 I have thought about asking but Calm Wind (Epic Author) had offered to edit this ^^ Stupid disabilities
are you going to carry on this story
I think it's awesome 
6196173 I will but I'm kinda running out of idea's for my stories so it's taking a long time. And thanks ^^
Sorry I haven't read the story yet. The plot is interesting though. But I'm willing to help you cowrite and edit this story if you like.
What’s gonna happen next? Please update soon.