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Abydos


Secondary account to your first best guess!

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Upset that Rainbow Dash blew her off for what seems like the millionth time, Scootaloo devises a series of plans to get back at her. Too bad today is the day that the Wonderbolt's Inspector for new members happens to be in town to see if Rainbow Dash is good enough for the team.

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I'm assuming the fact this is labled as complete is a mistake.

Such a cute little derpy in the background :derpytongue2:

5208900 Woops, yeah. Thanks for catching that haha.

Aww, why can't you at least cover the synopsis before you post? :lyrawhy:
Nice chapter, now get that next one up so I can avoid cliffie rage :pinkiecrazy:

I was working on a Rainbow Dash and Scootaloo fic too... but mine's is completely different, and a one-shot. This was good though, I wouldn't mind seeing what vile things that Scootaloo will do to Rainbow!

Well, this looks like it's going to be interesting...

I really like this so far. I'm curious to find out what Scootaloo does. Keep up the good work! :scootangel:

Oooo, I sense a lot of funny happenings now at Dash's exspense

Hmm. Welp Abyss, you've got me hooked again!

...Scootaloo just swallowed her disappoint and smiled...

"Disappointment."

She watched breathlessly as Rainbow looped around the perimeter of the park before she touched down on the complete other side near a familiar-looking other pegasus.

This section is awkwardly phrased. Perhaps, "near another familiar-looking pegasus"?

Slowly coming to a halt, she couldn’t believe her eyes. Praying that her eyes weren’t playing tricks on her, she watched as the two pegasi took off, flying towards the west where a lot of open land lay.

Considering what comes before and after this, perhaps you mean the opposite of what is here?

Okay, you have piqued my interests. I would like to see what you can do with comedy on a large scale without relying on... risque material.

KBO.:twilightsmile:

Ima have to read this :3

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