An adolescent and starving Changeling Queen-To-Be has captured Princess-to-be Cadence , and on the night she was supposed to start foalsitting, too. Cadence refuses to feed her love until the job is done. Chrysalis knows what she needs to do.
After being left behind in the badlands after her expedition is attacked by a dangerous monster, Twilight Sparkle must survive a hostile, alien environment. Lucky for her, she has some help from one of the natives: A curious changeling named Thorax.
Introducing Hero's Day! A day where Equestria's worst villains dress up as their favorite heroes and go door to door demanding treats. Treats or death, that is.
What? You're leaving Chrysalis' mandatory punishment body to my imagination? But my imagination sucks at these things... Ugh... Chryssi must be Button Mash for two months.
4927840 I haven't and I really don't want to since it's most likely that it won't be accepted. I've heard from a lot of different people that the mods there are assholes and if that's really the case then my story won't be accepted due to me putting a comma in the wrong place.
It was okay. The only thing that got to me was that the relationship between Twilight and Chrysalis was like a mother and child. Kinda weird. I mean, isn't one of them a queen and all? I'm all right for Chrysie being a roommate, but that didn't feel quite right.
Not bad, overall pretty well written.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
The end felt rushed but other than that it was well written. LOVED IT!
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Yeah, I had to rush it because I the due date was today and I had to finish it. Sorry about that.
Funny!
Twi just bosses Cryssi around like she's a little toddler, and I freakin' love it.
Not bad, not bad at all.
What? You're leaving Chrysalis' mandatory punishment body to my imagination? But my imagination sucks at these things... Ugh... Chryssi must be Button Mash for two months.
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I haven't and I really don't want to since it's most likely that it won't be accepted. I've heard from a lot of different people that the mods there are assholes and if that's really the case then my story won't be accepted due to me putting a comma in the wrong place.
Some cute moments
It was okay. The only thing that got to me was that the relationship between Twilight and Chrysalis was like a mother and child. Kinda weird. I mean, isn't one of them a queen and all? I'm all right for Chrysie being a roommate, but that didn't feel quite right.