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Today starts the one week adventure where Twilight learns to teleport. There are several ways that one can teleport, some easy, others not so much, but one thing is for sure. They are all difficult spells with their own merits and ways of taking a pony from one place to another. That’s enough of telling what’s going to happen. Let’s get to how she learned teleportation and what shenanigans she did with it shall we?
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I don't know dude, seems very unfinished.
Too tired to look for more but here are the spelling mistakes i noticed at a glance
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Get an editor dude, it will help you lot
Can't wait to see what sort of mishaps Twilight will get herself into trying to learn how to teleport. Teleportation in general seems like the kind of thing were, if you get so much as one tiny detail wrong, it can have very big consequences.
Interesting, I'd like to see how you break down the spell into its component parts.
Needs AU Tag, and here's why:
Twilight didn't know Celestia had a sister. It was a thing that from the sounds of the show very, very, few ponies knew about. And one of them Twilight Sparkle and Co.
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A blank flanked Earth Pony, Mr. Greenhooves. That's the gardener of Celestia's Garden.
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Even for an AU fic. This was pretty cute.
With the amount of http://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Teleportation_in_fiction I'm sure that their'll be some rather interesting modes of travel young Twilight will try out. Although the show only showed Wormholes (Ala Past-Future interaction freakout. Timeswirl shenanigans, and Cake Twin shenanigans.) and Matter Transmission (Or was it Intra dimensional travel?).
5251429 There's no evidence that proves such a thing, and there's also no evidence that disproves such a thing,
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What are you talking about. If AU. I gave proof. If about a proof given, I'll debate you with it to prove my point. Although the "some ponies knew" I'll admit that's fanon / plot device in some fics. But no pony knew of Luna, Nightmare Moon as anything other than a fairy tale, and even then the tale said Unicorn. Not Alicorn.
5252903 Do you remember everything from your childhood classroom? Probably not. Even the most intelligent people probably can't remember all the details about places. Not to mention, Twilight is likely so absorbed in her studies that she wouldn't notice a potrait of Luna unless it was staring right at her and she didn't have her nose stuck in a book.
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And here's where you're wrong.
Not just anyold class room. This was Celestia's personal room. A room she visited numerous times. She entered that room without a book. Had from fillyhood, to young marehood. Spending countless days and hours in that room. Has an intensive knowledge of history. And consumes knowledge like it was a drug. There's no way that she wouldn't know about that. Or remember it. Since she was taught by Celestia, practically lived with Celestia, and was closer to her than most non-students.
Important parts of history. Luna standing out from the rest. There is no way an OCD, bibliophile wouldn't want to know everything about that room. And there's no way that Twilight would forget. If only do to repitition, being in that place for a long chunk of her life. And the writer didn't need to put Luna.
Since by awcknowledging Luna as an important part of history. So much so that she stands out. Maids would see and learn about her, majordomo's staff, and the like would know who Luna is, and Twilight would know that NMM wasn't a ghost that ate children.Or a fairy tale monster.
5253866 Do we know for certain if Twilight knows they are Luna, or if Twilight knows who Luna truly is? For all we know, she may have asked Celestia about her, and Celestia could've lied to her. Considering Twilight thought that Nightmare Moon was just an old fairytale, and is very trusting of Celestia, it is quite possible that Celestia told her a lie akin to what Obi-Wan told Luke about who Darth Vader was. A sort of half truth if you will.
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Again. This is an AU. For both that, and the gardener.
And no. She knows who Luna is. Again. IMPORTANT moments in history. If Luna in this Verse wasn't important part of historical moments. And wasn't Known by Twilight. Then it wouln't have been mentioned.
Then add onto the fact that Twilight still didn't know Celestia had a sister, or who Luna was when she was cleansed. It was a surprise. That surprise wouldn't be thre if Twilight knew her picture. Saw her face almost everyday she did her lessons or slept with Tia when she needed comfort / was scared as a little filly. Or was told aout that picture of another Alicorn when that question inevitably would arrise.
And if Celestia did lie. Twilight would've been angry and fe;t betrayed. Instead her temporary anger/cofusion came from her misreading Celestia's reply. She wouldn't be surprised by Celestia havng a sister, or Luna's appearance, or even not knowing abut that Alicorn. if that Alicorn picture wasn't there.
That and again. The Gardener of Celestia's Garden is an Earth Pony named Mr.Greenhooves. It's canon.
So yes. This is without a doubt an AU.
5254188 We have no way to know for certain that Twilight knows who Luna is. And it's quite possible that she would forget a detail as seemingly miniscule at the time as Celestia had a sister. Remember, "Luna Eclipsed" seemed to suggest that nopony outside of Celestia knew who Luna was. And as for the gardener, perhaps this is before Mr. Greenhooves was employed as the groundskeeper. We know he was groundskeeper for The Grand Galloping Gala, but we don't know for how long prior to that he was working.
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Near retirement age, probably for a while. Anyways. As I said. AU. Of course M!Verse Celestia worked on erasing every bit of knowledge of Luna from the world. But you're being willfully ignorant to say that a pony can see a picture constantly. Get to know about it. And not either put two and two together. It being noted as an important part of history = nopony InVerse knows about it. And that Celestia who i=in M!Verse went to great lengths to erase Luna and the truth of NMMfrom history. Would leave out in the open a Picture of Luna where any and everypony could see it who entered her room.
The Author could've had used anything else, not mentioned Luna. OR the gardener's race. And this would fit in FimVerse / M!Verse. But by adding those two details made this an AUtagged Fic. There's no way around that point. Without Luna pic [where Staff, Students, and rare guests could see it out in the open. Along side other moments of impotant events], and without nameing the gardener's race simply stating he was good with plants. This would've been fit with the main timeline. Those two things in the fic make it AU.