"Moving day. Just hearing that phrase gave me an odd feeling in my stomach. Katie had seemed so optimistic, so ready to leave. I didn’t want to leave Indiana, leave my friends, leave the middle school I was enrolled in. Life was pretty sweet here.
"The thing is, my dad got a new job. He works in medicine and was promoted to a higher rank. That’s good for him. The only bad news is that we’ll be on the road forever to get to where we’re headed." - Benjamin Johnson
This is based on a real non-brony named Ben, who actually helped me write a good chunk of this around 2011-2012. Some mild -ish language, cartoony violence, and romance.
I lol'd at your reaction to all those dislikes. But I lol'd more at my own story's dislikes (see here).
Anyway, I like this!
>>Freywa Thanks! I expected somebody to hate this, because my writing to me seems "childish", but probably because I'm writing from a kid's point of view. yay.
You should have some more words describing how things happen around the characters, and not just what the characters feel. But I'm still supportive of this.
>>Parcly Taxel
Thanks! I'm still not the greatest writer, but I could be a lot worse!
See, Lyra is my favorite pony, so her laying on some..eleven year old..oh this bitch gonna get smacked.
>> Danbo
Don't worry, it's non-sexual (gosh, don't even think about it). She's just using him as a bed on top of a bed. He's laying on his side and Lyra is too.
Ben... wait that my name! WHAT KIND OF DREAMITERISTIC CELESTIA IS THIS!?
>> frogben
Kinda funny too. Are you a shrimpy twelve-year-old?
LOL and a not-so-sexy helmet
So...was this a dream, or was everyone just getting high?
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Faved and thumbed up
>>f0xhole
I dunno lol
>>f0xhole
All of the above.
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Will Rainbow Dash be beating anybody up in this story?
4228786 It's a surprise!