The Doctor's eleventh regeneration has given him a new persona and pegasus wings. As his TARDIS lands in a panicked Ponyville, The Doctor must help Twilight Sparkle and her friends investigate why the sky is falling over equestria.
The first episode of an entire season of Doctor Whooves. Episodes will be posted in four chapter segments with a link to the next episode at the end of the fourth chapter.
(Do to changes in the up coming chapters the Dark and gore tags have been removed)
Chapters (5)
Twilight shook her head “No, I didn’t. I woke up during the event, and wasn’t fast enough getting outside, did you?”
Twilight is such a liar, she was reading a book.
Other than that seems good, you have my interest.
Hooray! Dr Who(oves): Equestria! xD
Love the idea, love the process, and love the delivery!
You have my interest as well!
Unicorn is the new ginger?
Allons-y!
And with that, the doctor used his sonic screwdriver to help him make a sonic drillboom.
21787 Probably was foolish of me to try and write a french word without actually looking it to see how it was spelled. Especially with a pre reader who knows about as much french as i do... which is none...
21809 do not worry! I didn't know wat it was either until I watched "Allons-y!" on youtube. I then went and lol'd. And a sonic drillboom - The doc stealing Dash's signature move? risky risky, eh?
Can't wait to read more!
MOAR!
Finally! Someone did more than make a few comic strips!
If I had a digital bottle of wine I'd christen this fanfic.
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Okay, now to put aside the fanyboy aspect of myself.
Your spelling is a bit off in places, but they seem to be more from wrongly-chosen spell check options than actual errors. Go over your story's chapters at least twice before you post it and this will cut back on those little accidents.
Also, why would they call it a 'ship' right from the get-go? Equestria is rather primitive compared to our level of technology, and what they do have seems to rely mostly on magic to keep them running. The Main Six (or, if you're a fan that spells the word 'main' as mane just because it's a part of a equine's anatomy, Mane six) characters all come from different backgrounds, but none of them save for Pinkie Pie would simply hear the word 'starship' and not demand more information right then and there. (Now of course, the Doctor being the Doctor would just brush it off until a later date, but that's another subject.)
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Just trying to be helpful. Other than those few things I really enjoyed it and can hardly wait for more.
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Honestly I Did originally have a large chunk of dialog on what a star ship was, with the doctor handing out exposition, but it also ran very close to another large chunk of dialog in the next chapter that explained what the TARDIS is. So I cut it because it made the later and vastly more important TARDIS speech repetitive.
The original draft's of the story didn't actually have Zecora surviving her encounter, and she would have been upgraded in a very chilling scene (during a pro log to chapter 2) that i really liked, but my pre readers did not, and when i got that draft of the story back it was cut to piece's. In short almost every chapter written and posted is a third draft of the actual chapter i had planned.
that brings me to the second fact of the Doctor Whooves series in the works. I am not the only person working on it, yes I am the main writer of the story, but behind the scenes there are actually three different editors. (and it's probably thanks to my dyslexia that there are incorrect words hanging around in the stories.) so although i appreciate your feed back i tend to just post it up after I read over the editor's feed back and corrections. Other wise we would see an update once a month rather then once a week.
I am an impatient person, and i know a lot of people prefer a strict schedual of updates, and so yes I am willing to cut back on editing it for a third or forth time to get it up onto the site.
27243 This is good but you didn't put in commas when you should and it made reading it hard. If you add in punctuation as you go along, then it wouldn't be so hard to read. Just think about that, please?
Also, what will become of Rainbow Dash?
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We do our best, but I will try and keep a better look on the grammar.
All I am allowed to say is that Rainbow isn't dead.
29086 Well, that's all I really wanted to know, so, thanks!
Interesting story, but what's with all the random errors in this chapter? There's like...a whole bunch of random symbols and the like scattered throughout the beginning of the chapter.
31745 They are editor comments... which i forgot to change\delete sorry about that
¡Muy caliente!
Just like a good episode of either show!
Awaiting to read more by you! :D
Oh hey, no problem. Looks like it's all cleaned up now. Much better.
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Ah, that makes sense. Thanks for clearing it up.
If you still have the transformation bit saved somewhere, you could always post it as 'deleted scenes' post like with the show on the last disc of a season.
Maybe even have the characters comment on it as it goes along like an Actor-Commentary
Feels like there's plot holes in the fic.
Why would twilight go get each of her friends over a simple meteor falling? I can picture her checking it out right away, it's just a meteor, even if it was in everfree she's there alone before.
There's also the sudden idea of destroying the ship. These ponies aren't really accustomed to violence, you'd think the doctor would have to recommend it or something. (or perhaps not tell them and sabotage the ship to blow, and make everyone run for cover, the main 6 probably calling him psychotic for doing it) You'd also think they'd freak a bit more over the head of anything falling off. (Rarity fainting anypony?
I'll say the fic is fun to read, but sometimes the characters actions feel a bit unjustified, or even out of character on occasion.
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While the mane 6 are not accustomed to violence at the point where destroying the ship comes up they have already had their lives threatened twice, and have already had one of their friends go missing, and another playing distraction and being chased. I will admit i probably could have played around a little with reactions, but the idea of destroying a ship that will only harm all of Equestria seems a little more then justified. At least that's my opinion.
I could have had rarity faint, but again a lot was cut from the second part of the chapter, and a lot was supposed to be different (Zecora's house was burned down in the orginal draft... i swear i do not hate zebra's but everything bad happened to her in that first draft) chapter 2 is not my favorite chapter for that reason.
As for gathering all of her friends to go into the forest, I will admit that's a shameless plot device so I can gather the mane 6, but hay sometimes it's just goes that way.
At the end of the day I wrote this to entertain, and I am greatful that you found it fun to read ^^
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With all that was cut from chapter 2, I might end up releasing a commentary on it, but not for a couple of weeks. Luna's Republic comes first, and before that I have a bit of exams i need to get done.
31794 Hmm... Plot device? Shameless? Pfft... If something crashed out behind my house, I'd think "ALIENS!" Grab my phone, text, call, etc. all my friends, and get them to film me as I checked it out. 'Course, I'm also just that kinda guy.
That. Was. AWESOME!
Woohoo...
: I think that I detect some Neigh-sayers...
I've never been this excited! Well, except for that one time...
Muuuufiiinns....
Golly...
I want it now!
ed, heinous plot they fix next!
In the words of
And as for the next episode, I'll try to wait but
I can't wait to see what
more please
37726 More is on its way as i mentioned in the fan fic the next episode would be coming out on the 28th. We are proud to announce that we are running on time for that.
This is fantastic! Excited for the next episode.
Zecora's last line. It doesn't rhyme.
Oh man i can'y wait for the new ones!
Right then, Alonzi!
Umm, it's allons-y!
oh crap, it's a cyberman, er...cyberpony...i wonder if it is actually an "upgraded" zecora....
silly cybercolts. dragons and timelords cant be upgraded. well neither can i, im a yautja. but i am currently stuck in a holding cell in canterlot. no helps from/for me...at least my modified cloaking device desguises me as a pony. at least, untilit broke...now i am temporarily a permanent unicorn of midnight blue fur with a dark cyan mane/tail, and lavnder eyes.
no, but ironically you just did...partially.
wow, for a second, it seemed like the doctor actually was giving up...then twi went all "the embodiment of all magic in equestria" mode. that.was.AWSOME! it felt like a true doctor who episode. thumbs up, fav'd and here, have a muffin.
you,my friend, are a very good writer.in all the other fan fictions,or at least most of them,i have read,and they where TERRIBLE AWFUL they never stuck to the ponies personalities and they usallly make it unbelievable. I appreciate you stuck to the ponies personalities and wrote down in a good way.
please keep writing other stories!
that reminds me,how do you post a fanfiction on here?i would like to post my own
PLEASE!!I love my little pony-too old for it-but still!i tell pople I LOVE my little pony with NO REGRET.
my favorite is Twilight Sparkle.im very happy she became an alicorn1
so please help me post my fanfiction!PLZ
hehe
2825119 You're a what now?
Random moustache!
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lol that comment was from a while ago! At the time, My profile was of a Yautja (Predator) named Dachande. I also decided to make an Alt. version of my OC. He's usually a Unicorn (Looks like my avatar) but the alt. is a pegasus.
There is a small grammar error
Should be
Missing a comma.
errr (faceplant) hoooowww
how are you so good youre awsome at this