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Rainbow Dash is Pinkie Pie's best friend, they tell each other everything, and they know everything about each other. Or so Rainbow thought.
One night, while stargazing together, Pinkie Pie reveals a big secret she has been keeping for most of her life to her best friend.

[NOT a shipping story]

Inspired by this picture.

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Comments ( 112 )

This story made me quite numb. That is neither bad nor good...Just powerful... it makes me wish to beet her dad senselessly with no restraint of his crys for help or pain. It makes me wants to chain him to a wall and force him to never sleep. Never have anything. To have his daughter, pinkie, come into his room (Him still chained) and fly around the rooms tortuously close to him.

Comment posted by SilencedWhisper deleted Apr 5th, 2014

4186838 This makes me happy :pinkiecrazy:

Oh my god I'm crying!:fluttershbad::fluttercry::fluttershbad: Make it stop!!:fluttershbad::fluttershbad::applecry:

I read the first five stanzas so far, and something tells me Pinkie had wings, but lost them for some reason.

And now I'm sad. :fluttercry:

:applecry::fluttercry::fluttershbad::raritycry::raritydespair: I JUST KEEP CRYING!!!!!!!!

:pinkiegasp::fluttercry:::applecry::twilightangry2::yay:My expressions throughout the story... QWERTYUIOPASDFGHJKLZXCVBNM

...and that, boys and girls, is why Pinkamena makes cupcakes.

No... No, no no! I knew it was going to happen, yet I cried.
Oh no, Pinkie, I'm sorry... I'm sorry...

Not gonna waste time with words.


Could have been very powerful, but it was way too rushed.

HES DEAD! EVERYONE GRAB YOUR PITCHFORKS!:pinkiecrazy: On a serious note you sir are freakin brilliant i mean i am glad i am not the only one who thought Pinkie is half pegasus or has pegasus blood in their headcanon.


I just don't know what to say, wonderfully written, and so sad. I want to beat Ingeous senseless with his own rocks.

4187609 I actually found this headcanon randomly on the internet and thought it made a lot of sense. :twilightsmile:
Also, thank you! :pinkiehappy:

You are more then welcome! :scootangel:

the story doesn't make much sense. A sister as devoted (and powerful) as Maud would rush Pinkie Pie right out of that house as soon as possible.Who keeps the picture of the individual that mutilated her? I like the idea of Pinkie Pie secretly having hidden pegasus powers but this story isn't realistic.

A few errors I spotted:

"Yeah... I'm not buying it. You're hiding something, aren't you?"
"What? No I don't.

This doesn't make sense. Should be: "What? No I'm not."



you wouldn't

You won't

very known in their area.

Very well known in their area

They're rock farm

Their rock farm

Four years. It's been four years since Igneous and Cloudy came home with a winged daughter in their hands.

It had been
in their hooves

Parents would

parents would (no capital letter needed)

igneous and Cloudy weren't like most parents.

Igneous (capital letter needed here)





She has gone too far.

She had gone too far.

she'll never fly again, that she'll never upset Igneous again



needs a space

sestion braought

session brought

Pinkie Smiled

no capital needed for "smiled"

bouncing happyily


she's been waiting for Pinkie to arrive.



in front

Pinkie's thoughts need some sort of formatting, like italics or singular quotation marks.



she has never been huged

she had never been hugged





backig away


b efore




has become

had become

It has been three years since Pinkie flew.

had been

,as her father forced her to do.

, which her father forced her to do



After two hours

:rainbowhuh: what happened here? looks like there's a line missing.

on the floor

onto the ground
to the ground

denyied of her as well


The docotors


heared from my parents since.


I can't belive this

believe. Remember, the best part of "believe" is the "lie".

Errors aside, this was a powerful and moving fic, and when the errors are fixed it will be more so. :twilightsheepish:

4187035 and why she used Dash specifically. Did you see how many wings there were?

4187744 I ususally do my best to avoid making the "they're-their" mistake. I can't believe That happened. I feel so ashamed :ajsleepy:

4187783 it's all right, I assume you were in a rush and forgot to proofread or spellcheck properly.

4187744 :ajbemused: I'm not the one who wrote this story, but if it were me, I would find it difficult to find every single one of those things, especially the ones like

Pinkie smiled

You'd need to be a lot more specific. And yeah, just a few errors huh?

Comment posted by Nevermind1 deleted May 13th, 2014

4187925 Well yes I know, (and the bottom part wasn't for me, it was for someone else) But I was just pointing it out when I saw the comment. :trixieshiftright:

4187946 Oh, well alright than.
I didn't really have a problem with finding and fixing the errors, so no problem I guess? :scootangel:

4187787 Yeah, I'm a pretty impatient person :twilightsheepish:

4187827 I'll edit the quotes to include some more context when I get up, I'm about to go to bed.

4188079 No, it's fine. I already fixed it. :pinkiehappy:

That was sad.

But the "earth pony was secretly a Pegasus who got her wings removed" story plot had been done before with Apple Bloom. And the "Pinkie's parents/father were/was abusive" plot had been done already multiple times.

This story felt like it was trying really hard to make someone cry (it seems to have worked, given the comments) but it just feels a bit off to me. (Note: I did tear up a bit.) Why does everyone portray Pinkie's parents as screwed up? It just seems odd.

Also, it should probably have the "other" tag for pinkie's parents.

I feel really sad now.:applecry:

Wow, first Unicorn Pinkie, only not this sad.
This, I will admit to crying during.

I'd be lying if I said I didn't shed a few tears. I really like this story. Keep writing.

You're a terrible person for writing this.

You are terrible for writing this...

...and I couldn't be more excited to see what else you write.

The canon names for her parents fit into this story. remarkably well. Igneous sounds pretty close to Ignoramus, and there are too many imperfections to see a good image through Cloudy Quartz.

Somehow this was one of the first things I noticed.

Did anypony tell the authorities about what the Pies did? I'm not sure if Pinkie would have, but maybe Grandma Pie? Giggle at the Ghosties sounds like nothing that Pinkie Pie's immediate family would endorse. Maud, or maybe Rainbow Dash?

There should be a Epilogue to this (I remember there was a story related to this except it was AppleBloom instead. But Twilight cast a spell recreating her wings. And in the end, AppleBloom was writing journal entry's to herself)

Pacing was good, and you really can sympathize with Pinkie thanks to it. The sheer anger and frustration I felt, as the reader, towards the father was genuine. I commend you on able to induce an emotional response (although for me it isn't that hard, I get easily carried away with a story).

As a fair word of warning, you've done marvelously so far. If you do venture to add another chapter, please keep to your rhythm. It would be a waste to spoil just a decent story but betraying your abilities in the previous chapter. Just my $0.02.

4190810 I have this story in my 'Read later' list.
You just sort of spoiled it for me... Guess that's what I get for having it there for so long and not reading it... :applejackunsure:


do you happen to know the name of that story? i really want to read another story like this!

4191727 well the only thing in common was realizing a earth pony was really a Pegasus. The story is called Apple Pedals.


second thought

can you send me a link please i keep typing it into google but can't find it:fluttershyouch:

Whelp. . . . .(Grabs giant knife) time to climb into the story and beat the living shit out of her father, mother, and Limestone for being racist emotionless peices of whorse shit. :ajbemused:

wow this is a good story

Great story man! Better than what I do!

4192898 Wow, really? :pinkiegasp:
Thank you so much. :pinkiehappy:
Though I honestly think your story's a bit better.

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