Scootaloo's birthday is on the way, and Rainbow Dash has just got her the ultimate present -- the coolest new scooter in Equestria! There's only one little catch -- Rainbow must assemble the scooter herself. Simple, right?
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Pretty good for what might be your story
It's good. The writing is clean and interesting. The humor is decent, but I'm not a very great judge when it comes to humor. Personally, I'll give it 8/10, Great work!
4133984 "Might" be my story? You calling me a plagiarist? Just kidding. Thanks for the compliment!
4133998 Thanks! I've always fancied myself as a writer of comedy. Maybe that's just because there's no value I appreciate more in an author than the ability to make me laugh.
4134035 You're telling me. Take my advice -- do not attempt to fix a PS3 on your own unless you have a degree in computer engineering.
To be honest, when I read the summary I thought this would happened...
Rainbow Dash buys the scooter, tries many attempts to assemble it. She then give it to Scootaloo, but when she did, the scooter gets disassembled to all the pieces, Rainbow cries to Scootaloo for failing her, but she then watch in awe as Scootaloo assembled the scooter expertly thanks to all the teaching from Twilight ( Twilight Time )
4134757 Now why didn't I think of that? Ugh, don't you just hate it when the best ideas come to you too late?
I figured Scootaloo was going to say thanks, but that she'd already gotten one earlier in the day. Maybe she did, but Scoots was just being tactful and keeping both without saying anything.
4154541 Maybe we can consider that an alternate ending. ;)
The forum posts....MY WHOLE LIFE!!!
4161323 I think we need to introduce some variant of the death penalty for people like that -- anybody who just goes "derp, I fixed it" without bothering to explain how they did so gets their Internet privileges revoked for six months. I know that might sound a little extreme, but GODDAMMIT THIS IS IMPORTANT TO ME!
Dude, oh my god. I laughed way harder than I feel I should admit.
4190432 Hey, there's no shame in laughing. If there's one thing that's guaranteed to result in comedy, it's tipping a pony over the edge!
Lol
this is absolutely hilarious I love it!!!! Awesome job 
4218892 Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
"Passenger of the walrus must great precaution asparagus no surprise magic time magic happy."
FAVED AND LIKED!!!
4258059 Yeah, most of the garbled translations were done by running them through Google Translate a few times, but I made that particular line up myself. Thanks for faving and liking -- that's what motivates me to keep writing fics!
Next time, it could be best to give it to Twilight, she is the best in panic atacks
5348430 True, but Twi doesn't have as close a relationship to Scoots as Dash does. Besides, Dash knows how much Scootaloo looks up to her, so I figured that the fear of letting her down would be more than enough to tip her over the edge.
5350944 Even if she have no relation, Rainbow buy the scooter, Twilight only need to be the
nerdeggheadgood pony that help a friend to complete the present for a little fillyWho knew that a simple wrench could've driven somepony that crazy; then again,
anything's possible.
6323916 And lest we forget...
6323945 Eeyup.
I've read this story several times and I just noticed:
Was that a reference to the G3 special "A Very Minty Christmas"?
7202428 It sure was.
7203023 Thought so
The ending would have been more hilarious if Scootaloo said she already had an LS200, heheh.
7424824 What, and make poor Rainbow suicidal?
As someone who actually assembles things FOR A LIVING, I feel Rainbow's pain and suffering; just be glad that she didn't get a scooter that was ACTUALLY missing parts, or had parts that were broken during shipping. Then she REALLY would have lost her marbles!
7606370 And let me guess, the instructions you get are all in Engrish?
7606983 actually, the thing I assemble the most (big box store bicycles) the instructions have to stay sealed in the bag attached to the seat! But then again, most of the other stuff I build come from American companies that manufacture in China, so the instructions are already in English. (Some even come with Spanish instructions, but since most people in my area are English only, those get thrown in the trash.)
Adorable Scootalove and a funny misadventure. Love it.
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Thanks!
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Np! :3