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She's looking at you. Yes you. And she is judging you with her eyes. There is no escape.

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Scootaloo and her fellow Crusaders come up with a foolproof plan that will allow Scootaloo to fly.

To bad the plan is not Crusader proof.

Nothing is ever Crusader proof.

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Comments ( 32 )

Is it just me, or does Scootaloo seem incredibly constipated?

Comment posted by TSM99 deleted Apr 27th, 2014

At first i was with spike and at the end i was with rainbow
my reaction was in this sequence.
:rainbowhuh::derpyderp2::rainbowlaugh::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:
:derpytongue2:
wait you said that scoot broke both her legs? she has 4 legs.

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Whoops, hind legs.

No children for you ;)

Please make a sequel.

I'd so like to see more of this.

That said, Scootaloo, why didn't you glide?! You could have used that to land uh...less crasherifically. Actually, safely if she could glide, since she could do a series of banking arcs to slow herself into a safe stall! Maybe. Depends on her whatever potential.

4299951 With her tiny wings that's like asking you to jump off a cliff and glide with your hands. :trixieshiftleft:

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She never let go of the scooter.

Same reason why she didn't land in the clouds.

And no, Scootaloo has no capicity to glide, so it doesn't matter. :scootangel:

Good job! Thank you for not giving her an easy out. I was wondering what you were going to do since they made a takeoff ramp but no landing one.

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Scootaloo was going to fly... She had no plans to land. :scootangel:

I just hope all the breaks heal cleanly.

Also, now Scoot has an interesting story to tell her special somepony.

In any case, an excellent, if painful, slice of life. You'll get there some day, kid. :scootangel:

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She can hover for a few seconds, suggesting she might be able to gain glide powers.

Basically, the moral here is she needed a parachute


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Panic solves every narrative problem! :rainbowlaugh:

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Panic solves every narrative problem! :rainbowlaugh:

Words of wisdom indeed, I shall heed them. :twilightsmile:

This was beautiful. Please write some more of these. What's Rainbow complaining about? She's probably done crazier things than Scoots here. I do wonder how Spike got roped into this.

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Really, she just needs to hit Bulk Biceps up for some of his steroids.

Good story, though I do feel sorry for Scoots when the pain killers wear off. Also, I know have the Air Force song stuck in my head thanks to the chapter title.

next up, going down a hill and blasting across the surface of a lake with a hydrofoil.

what was that saying? "any crash where you survive from, is a good crash"?

:pinkiesick:

Well... feel a bit sorry for Scootaloo; find it a bit unlikely that three fillies and Spike could gather the materials and make the ramp without anyone noticing... I'm not sure what to say, hope Scootaloo gets better.

Might need to spellcheck Rainbow's shout. It loses a little something when she's not technically making any sense.

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In the show... They buy an impossible contraption for pet grooming.

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Currently:
“WHAT WHERE YOU THINKING?” Rainbow Dash shouted.

Spellchecked version:
“WHAT WERE YOU THINKING?” Rainbow Dash shouted.

While "where" is a word, it does not make sense in the original sentence.

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... Point taken.

Overall it comes down to if you're trying to make a story with fairy tale logic or real-world logic. (The first story I did, Storm of Secrets, for the first ten chapters or so I tried making a serious/ dark story with MLP show logic and those chapters didn't turn out that good.)


4424439 Loved the story! :rainbowkiss: So although it was short and everything. I was wondering if you could think of a sequel? :twilightsheepish: A number of things could happen with what she broke and how you mentioned it changed her filly bits... I suppose I'm just curious of what could happen next. :unsuresweetie:

You really do love beating on characters, don't you?

I had this playing during the story.

From name of the chapter i thought it was about Scoots going into poison joke.

Shattered pelvis.
Damn.
Six ribs?
Damn.
Bothhh hind legs?
Dammit scoots I can't afford this.

Guess she'll be called Crashaloo from now on...

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