I have had little stupid ideas for short, or long, fanfics. I know my stories won't be the best, but hey, I have fun writting them. Now I do tend to stall sometimes. So please be patient. Thanks you.
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After Silver Spoon and Diamond Tiara teased Scootaloo for not being able to fly, she gets depressed and can't stop thinking about it. Rainbow Dash decides to take her to somepony that can help her. Hopefully she can help her little sister and get her out of her depression.
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All right heres the deal.
I liked this story, but didn't fave it; heres why.
1.) The way you portray Scoot's problem is really bugging me. To me, it is a big problem that she needs all the help she can get to make in through this problem she has.
2.) You make Rainbow Dash seem like she doesn't think Scoot not being able to fly isn't a big deal when, to her, flying is her life.
3.) Being bullied; phisical or verbal, is a verry big problem and both are as bad as eachother. (trust me.) To me it seems like your like, "Your being picked on? Get over it."
These are just my thoughts on it, not trying to be a dick or anything. Looking forward to more of your stories!
Grammar.
Nearly every sentence in your first paragraph starts with "She." If you're going for repetition as a rhetorical strategy, that's not the way to use it. In the first paragraph you seem to be emphasizing Scootaloo. Why?
You use "your" instead of "you're" quite often.
Capitalization isn't throughout.
Please get some editing; stories that skip fundamental grammar are not respectable for the vast majority of readers.
4455617 Thank you. I had not noticed that. It was my first fic I had ever written. I will look out for that.
Slow clap my friend. Slow clap.
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I bow to you my friend. Thank you.
5010711 Delayed reaction much?
Just kidding, and no need to thank me. It was well-deserved. 
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LOL yeah, I know it's a late reaction, but I haven't been on in a LOOOOOONG time. Your comment just made my day though. Thanks!