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A pool boy by trade. A rocker at heart. A writer by soul. And not afraid to show my face.


-St. Patrick's Day Special-

Lesson learned: Accents are hard to write.

It took nearly a full day of convincing from her sister for Luna to even think about attending this year's 'Casks and Clovers Day' celebration in Ponyville. She was absolutely certain that it would not be the same as it was centuries ago, and she might even be pleasantly surprised to find out she's wrong. A friendly stranger shows her the right way to have fun.

Thanks to my friend, LightningBass94, you can find out what happened between Twilight and Rainbow afterward.

Luna Is The Best Pony Contest Entry -Dropped Out-

Proofreader/Editor : LightningBass94

To my prereaders, thank you very much! :twilightsmile:

If I missed someone, let me know. :pinkiesmile:

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Comments ( 38 )

Maybe it is just me, but poi'nt seemed a bit off. Who am I kiddin? It is fine. :coolphoto: If you are looking for a way to increase the word count, just describe the setting at the beginning a bit more.

Happy to help! :yay:

I dunno about the accent, but I love the story so far! :rainbowlaugh:

Haha! This is great so far! There are a few places where you need an emdash rather then a hyphen but otherwise I'm enjoying it so far, and didn't see any other things needing work!

I love and am jealous of the way you write! Teach me the ways of the Surry!:pinkiehappy:

Well, I saw absolutely nothing wrong really. I liked the accent, and the entire concept in general. I wonder who won the Twi vs. Rainbow drinking contest...

4148198 Thanks, Ava. :pinkiesmile:


Teach me the ways of the Surry!

Made me laugh out loud for real. :rainbowlaugh:

4149516 Lol, it's true:rainbowlaugh:


Aww, I love both of you guys! :pinkiesmile:

OMG!!!!!!!! :fluttercry: :fluttershbad: :pinkiesad2: :raritydespair: :raritycry: :heart:

This is the saddest thing ever!!!!!!! I cried when I realized he'd been a ghost. I loved it soooooo much though! :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart:

This is why we need a bittersweet tag. I hope you win the contest, bro. You deserve to. :pinkiesmile::moustache:


P.S.: I see you changed the color of his mane... :ajsmug::rainbowlaugh:

This is so sad, yet I love it! Gallen made sure Luna had one hell of a night without getting alcohol poisoning. We need bittersweet tag

I liked it, I did not expect Gallen to be a ghost. also I couldn't help thinking of this song

4148198 Isn't it obvious, they tied then went back to Twi's to have some fun, only to wake up the next morning, cuddling, nether of them remembering the night before.

If I knew the ways of the Surry... hehehehe.... *insert much-needed :evilsombra: face*
No, but seriously, that would be like teaching a Buffalo how to use Alicorn magic for me. I'm just a terrible writer. :twilightsheepish: .... evil Ava is evil... no love to feed off of though :fluttercry:

I probably should have guessed that. It's so obvious... actually, considering Rainbow almost never gets a chance to drink cider, I thought she would lose and Twilight would try to bed her in Rainbow's drunken state...
What's wrong with me?! :pinkiegasp:

4153145 I'm glad everyone got the (extremely) subtle TwiDash. :pinkiecrazy:

And don't be so hard on yourself, Ava. :fluttershysad:

4153349 Yeah, you're right. You remember twidashforever? Yeah, of course you do. He keeps telling me to remember what I once told him; if you get down on yourself, it will create a self-fulfilling prophesy and make you as bad as you think you are. But I still have no idea if I'm getting any better.

Oh well, this is your story, and like every Surry story it's awesome in some way, whether it be romance, plot (dat flank) or just plain silliness. :pinkiecrazy:

4153341 Ava, I love your story, and I can see you improving as you write it. Don't give up. :raritystarry:
4153349 Will we possibly see a side story of this twidash? I've been thinking about it all day. :rainbowkiss:


plot (dat flank)

While I'm not exactly 'proud' of those stories, I love writing them. :pinkiecrazy:

As for the self-fulfilling prophecy thing, I'm not too sure. I guess I'm always too busy writing to think about that stuff. :pinkiesad2:

Have you seen "The Amethyst" yet? :pinkiehappy:

4153409 Maybe I will, and maybe I won't. :unsuresweetie:

Maybe it's better to leave it up to your imagination. :moustache:

4153420 Check your blog. That might tell you. :raritywink:

4153430 Honestly, I was thinking of asking for your permission to write it, myself, though I don't think I'd do it any justice. :twilightsheepish:

4153409 Bassie, I'm not about to break my Pinkie Promise to never Cancel or Hiatus the story again. But thanks all the same. :twilightsmile:

4153484 Feel free to take a crack at it.

Though the first lines should be...

As Twilight walked away from the inebriated Princess Luna, she began to psyche herself up.

"Well, she seemed fine to me," she noted simply. "Now, I'm gonna take Rainbow down. There's no way she's beating me in a good, old-fashioned cider-chugging."

4153486 Bassie? AAAwww that's the cuest nickname I've got so far. :twilightblush:

I meant on writing, in general, and on improving. I can see it. Your later chapters are already worlds beyond your first chapter. If you ever start to think that there's no way you'll be as good as some one else, just remember that I only wrote this 3 months before this. Improvement will jump up and bite you in the :yay: before you realize it's there. :scootangel:

4153545 ....Yow. No offense, but I don't think I would have believed it was the same person/pony writing it if I didn't see the 'LightningBass94' right there. Hmm, maybe it's time for me to reread my own story. Maybe it's also time for me to stop being such an attention whorse in the comments section of someone else's story. :rainbowderp:

4153684 Leave as many comments as you want, Ava. :twilightsmile:

4127991 Hey guys. I just wanted to let you guys all know that I wrote a Twidash side story to this one with Surry's permission, and this is the link! :D It's still pending submission, but in the meantime, the pass is 2543. I hope you guys like it. :rainbowkiss:

4156926 sure I'll check it out!

Most enjoyable! :heart::pinkiehappy:

4157907 Glad you liked it! :twilightsmile:

Yeah that's about Irish enough for me. Whole lot of drinking and some truly unexplained shit. For more information, consult your nearest irishman. We can not shut the fuck up.

That was really good!! Oh man, I wish it was longer though.

4159869 There was a 5,000 word limit, so it couldn't have been too much longer. :applejackunsure:

It was a verry good story tho!:eeyup:

4161182 Now if everyone else would just follow my little link... :trixieshiftleft:

didn't see that coming

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