• Member Since 21st Nov, 2013
  • offline last seen Jan 13th, 2019

SixShooterOutlaw


Just a Whovian Pegasister who loves Anime, Gaming and Writing.

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Short Story: Cheese Sandwich wants to tell the mare he has liked since he was a colt that he likes her. But how should he? So he asks Rainbow Dash for advice.

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 21 )

That was sweet . Great job with this follow up story.

3904223 Thanks! Glad you liked it! :pinkiesmile::twilightsmile:

nice story it was great to visualize it and have the voices to use:pinkiehappy::rainbowwild:

3904288 Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for the follow!:pinkiehappy:

no prob six shooter

I need to make small notes on this one.

Overall, this would be a good story. If you didn't make the dialogue repetitive, use the word "said" too much, or make it a little bit rushed, it would be even better. Since you didn't do that, I suggest it in the future. I know you'll get progressively better.

Nien bad.. nien bad

It was nice. Very well written. :pinkiehappy:

Good fanfiction. The only thing is

where by the name of Celestia's beard are the spaces and punctuation marks

best cheesepie fic I've read so far :pinkiehappy:

4660373 Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it so much!:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

lol I hate cheesepie (and cheese sandwitch) but this brings out the good side to that guy

Dawww i LOVE cheesepie, and you captured them both perfectly

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:pinkiesmile: no prob! i mean it, i DEMAND a sequel!

6013821 I just might have to do that! :raritywink:

6040946 Awesome sauce...

YES!!!!!!!! TWO BEST SHIPS IN ONE FANFIC!!!!!! SOARINDASH AND CHEESEPIE 4EVER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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