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This story is a sequel to The Teacher, the Sorceress, and the Wonderbolt

Far in Equestria's past, an old threat once more rears it's head, seeking revenge on the princess who thwarted it; a princess that is no more, her life claimed in the effort to destroy it. But this time is different. This time, it's come prepared. This time, it won't underestimate its enemies. This time... it can't lose.

Just an FYI, even though it says this is a sequel to TSW, it is in fact, a prequel to it. Sorry for any confusion.

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Comments ( 76 )

This was interesting and I'm looking forward to seeing more.

I'll not sure yet, but I will be tracking

You get an automatic fav and like, this is going to be epic! :rainbowdetermined2:

Will certainly follow as I've enjoyed your work in the past, but I admit I found the rampant racism distasteful, not matter how believable it was.

I'm surprised that such gross and internalised racism would be so prevalent after the first Hearth's Warming Eve. Effectively ignoring GBH and refusing a pony emergency medical treatment based on their race feels over-done for a post- (and to be honest even pre-) HWE setting.

Great illustrations wrabbit, but this just doesn't seem to be my cup of tea.:ajsleepy:
GL with it though and I'll catch you on your next one.:twilightsmile:

This goes on the top of the to-read list based on the superior quality of your past works.

I'll get to it as soon as I put The Ocean at the End of Lane to rest. Sorry man, you don't yet quite outweigh Gaiman. :twilightsheepish:

Neat, dood!

Also that rabbit thing you use as a horizontal rule has inspired me to make my own horizontal rule, dood.... I'm going to go add it to my current chapters and future chapters, dood. Ta ta!

are the descendents of twirem going to be obvious

Confused as to where this is going, but I'll be fascinated to find out.

so is this a sequel or a prequel?:rainbowhuh:

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Thank you kindly. :twilightsmile:
I hope you'll find it to your liking, despite it's distinct lack of Twilight. :twilightblush:
Well, this is my headcanon for Equestria's past. Things are going to be dinstinctly rougher around the edges, and stuff like this will crop up now and then. Also expect this story to be bloodier than my others, it being a darker time and all. The HWE play is an idealized story passed down for generations, and has been sanitized so as to not offend little ears (or the parents that are quite vocal about said ears being offended), kinda like how the Krampus no longer rides with Santa. Still haven't decided whether or not to go full-on gore or not. It won't be anything like say, a splatter movie where the gore is the main focus, but expect a few scenes that would be right at home in Kick Ass... if Kick Ass were filled with ponies, that is. :pinkiecrazy:
Aaawww... That makes me sad to hear, but I understand. I knew I wouldn't get the same draw with this one since it's an all OC story. Glad you liked the pictures, though. Maybe you'll come back for the others. :pinkiehappy:
There's no shame in following Gaiman. :yay:
Good luck on making an ASCII Prinny, dude. :trollestia:
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Actually, this occurs before the TSW series. This is a prequel. Probably should have mentioned that in the author's notes. I'll fix that now. :facehoof:

3883399 also alter the front page of the story so it says prequel rather than sequel. otherwise you're just going to get a ship load of confused readers when the others start pouring in.:twilightsmile:

Well, I did what I could, but since I can't mark something as a prequel, only that it is a sequel to something,, this is the best I can do. Hopefully, that warning in the description will help to clear up any confusion.:twilightsheepish:

3883399 Aaaand tracked.

Your way with words more than makes up for the lack of prior connections to these new characters. Looking forward to seeing where this goes.

Edit for: accidentally part of an entire word.

Awesomeshine is new best pony. Seriously. Awesome. Many awesome faces for you.

This promises to be incredibly good, a unique view into the time before the Equestria we know. Gonna be interesting to see how these characters relate to the TSW series.

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Cool! This was only the first chapter of the prelude to introduce the main characters. :raritywink:
So glad you liked her. She wasn't all the popular with my test audience (of one). :twilightsmile:
Thank you kindly. :ajsmug:

Well seeing as this is a prequel I'm starting to enjoy it more, you should probably change the description on the title page to say its a prequel to TTSW

umm... where's the earth pony rune mage?:twilightoops:

Very good story. The illustrations are a nice addition.

nice idea for the Aganippe, honestly when i saw them on the show i first thought Amdusia's from Final Fantasy minus the hornimg3.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20130516060240/finalfantasy/images/d/d2/Amdusias.png

Already done. :rainbowwild:
She can't. She's just not built that way. :pinkiecrazy:
The first few chapters or so are just to introduce the audience to the main cast. She will return soonish. I'm glad she left such a lasting impression. :twilightsmile:
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Thank you kindly. :ajsmug:
Neat. Don't think I've seen those before. Which one were they from? Like I said in the notes, I didn't want to use stuff from published works, and preferred to keep it mythological. Also, I just loved the line, "the Mare who destroys mercifully."

4027512 I think they were in a couple but first time I really remember seeing them was in FF9

A full update in itallics is pushing it a bit, I think :pinkiecrazy:
Good update, Wrabbit, thanks. I do like the pictures, but I'm here for the story and I admit that delays between postings make it hard for me to keep characters in my head.

Thanks for catching that. It also brought to my attention several other mistakes, so it's all good now. Even fixed the hyperlink near the end for the song.

I'm fine with waiting for the pictures, I like what it adds to the story. I wouldn't delay a chapter for more than three days though, but that's just my thoughts.

I'm with Randomstring. The pictures are nice, and add to the story, but I'm here because you've proven time and time again to be a fantastic story teller, and I want to see what new tale you have in store for me.

I'm more then happy with the pics


That actually makes me rather cross, that I ended up missing the posting of this. Shoot, I would still be ignorant of its existence if I had not seen your blog where you asked readers if they liked having the pictures in the chapters. Anyway, off to a really really good start. Loving the characters and loving the world building, and this is only the first chapter. I'll leave a more detailed impression once I've caught up a bit.

I'd suggest, Wrabbit, that you forgo the pictures in favor of (perhaps) more swift updates, BUT: work on the pictures in your spare time, and include them in a chapter or two all their own at the end of the story.

Well, as things stand now, without pics, I'd be updating around once a week, and the pics double that time, so yeah. :twilightsheepish:
Well I'm just glad to have people enjoying my words at all. :twilightblush:
Glad you're enjoying them, then. :pinkiehappy:
Notifications have been a little wonky of late, ever since Knighty last updated the site. If we all make a big enough fuss, I'm sure he'll fix it, though. I've come across replies to comments of which I was never notified. I'm leaning more towards dropping the pics entirely unless there's something that I feel simply must be drawn. We'll see how it goes, though. Glad you're enjoying this one so far in any case. :twilightsmile:

Without the pictures would be my preference, do them in when you can and work your way thought the chapters adding them but get the chapters out. With so many Oc's two weeks it just too long for me to remember who is who and what they do.

Finally found time to catch up on this, read chapters 2-4 in one sitting.

This seems like a really promising story and I really like the characters you've introduced so far. Keep up the great work, man.

As to the pictures, I like them. If you choose to just do pics for the important moments for times sake that would be cool. Would be sad to see them disappear entirely.

I'm liking this Knightengale character, dood.

Hooray for frequent updates! I liked the art, but I won't complain about more story. You write engaging characters.

Wow, don't know how I missed this. All OC stories usually don't appeal to me at all, but given your past efforts I decided to give it a read, especially since it ties to your other stories. I was not disappointed. This is well written an holds my interests with believable characters and settings. I am anxious and curious as to what you plan to do, based on your cover art I am guessing this is the first group of EOH bearers. Now I have to read the rest of what you have here so I can wait impatiently for you to finish the story. :pinkiehappy:

Glad you liked it. There's three more now, so catch up! :yay:
I'm glad you liked her so much. She's actually the one I've been most worried about being too bland. :twilightsheepish:
Yeah, it's a bit tough to make that a big reveal, given the setting and build up, but I hope there will be a few surprises and twists coming. :ajsmug:
Quick! Catch it before it gets away! :twilightoops:
Not quite the reference I meant. :derpytongue2:

This story deserves more comments and more views.

It's a shame people are probably brushing it off because no Mane6/the usual fandom popular background pones.

You keep writing, I'll keep reading, Wrabbit. Been reading since about halfway through TSW, don't see much reason to stop now.

I think I've put my finger on why I haven't been getting into this story. And I feel bad about not getting into it. It's not just the OC cast. I've liked a bunch of all OC stories. And it's certainly not the writing or the characterization or the story. It's just that there's not enough that's familiar. With a large number of new characters in an unrecognizable early Equestria, it's been too difficult to follow, especially reading as it updates. I suspect that I'll have less trouble if I wait 'till you finish it and read it in one go. I've just been having too many instances of "Wait, who's that again? Where are we now? What's going on?" when I'm waiting between chapters.

So, I think I'm going to wait 'till you're done so I can really enjoy this as I ought to enjoy a Wrabbit story. Keep on keepin' on, dude.

Ah, well. Not much I can do about that. While it is discouraging (especially since I think I might have a future in writing), I'll soldier on for as long as I can with this story. :ajsmug:
I guess I'll see you when it's done, then. :twilightsheepish:

I'd say things are really heating up but that may just be the loss of the ice dragon I've been disliking from the get-go. Excited to see how this all ends!

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