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Where the fuck you been, gonzo?
3784611 I was just taking time with certain films and stuff.
Improper use of "it's". You want the possessive "its", not the abbreviation.
Shifted from past tense to present tense.
No need for a comma there, and I'm pretty sure AJ wanted to kick a tree, not a treat.
Wrong "it's" used twice in a row.
Much as we would all like to pretend Spike at Your Service never happened, it did. And even if it didn't, it would be pretty fucking cold to pretend Spike is nobody's friend. It also pulls the reader out a little when you punch a number rather than typing the word five.
Either way, that's where I stopped reading and hit the dislike button.
3785023 Thank you for your insights. Correcting now!
And yikes, don't have to be a douche about it.
That cover art!
3785080 Sorry if my comment sounded dismissive or hostile. I'm just really sick and tired of this fandom pretending he isn't part of the mane six (a bullshit term), and I have zero interest in a story that views him that way.
3787714 Honestly, this was kinda rushed and forgot a lot of things. Hence why later on, I wrote in that Spike was looking up the spell while they were trying to trap Flutterbat.
Better love story than The Twilight saga
i hate myself for putting off reading this for so long.