Rainbow Dash has been enduring odd aches and pains all over her body for the past few days, and she isn't sure why - though it may be because of everypony's strange behavior around the town lately.
Third place winner of the Rainbow Dash contest.
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Seen this idea written before--but this is by far one of the best incarnations.
...I think "Slice of Life" is a little misleading...
This gets a down vote till I see a dark and tragedy tag added, because come on!
You're missing a few tags on this one. Dark, maybe Sad?
WHY WOULD YOU POST SOMETHING LIKE THAT?
Just when I promised myself I'd start avoiding super depressing stories, a super depressing story comes up in a Slice of Life disguise.
Worst of all, it was fantastic.
Goshdarn it.
I.... I don't really know what to say about this story, Nicely written but I'm not sure about the ending. Well you are the author, and it's your story. Still a good story, just not really my type.
I do not see a derpy pony.
I see Derpy, a pony.
One day I will figure out how to get a sig on Fimfiction.
Hmm.. I know your trying to not give it away, but honestly, you need to tag properly. Even if it's cliche, a good effort.
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Yea I thought the ending was out of place. It also seem like a open end while it says complete.
I feel insanely sad now. Good writing but damn I'm going to be sad for a few days. Lightning dust is a murderer now.
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You mean being in a insane asylum, strapped down and being haunted by apparitions the rest of your days isn't complete? I don't think she can do anything.
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Technically she can. She can call for Luna for help for example, since she is able to go into other ponies minds. Also throwing one of the mane six in asylum kind of fics also seem off with me. Since they have high status and I think they would get better treatment. Also if they are able to reform the spirit of choas I think they can cure a little hallucinations.
3395508 You're right, I guess it is misleading. I don't think I was in the right mind yesterday. I changed the tags, thanks for your input.
I was not expecting that ending nor was I expecting her tea to turn into coffee when she put it down either
*Frothing rage*
This bugs me every time I see it. I just want one good Dash-fic where I don't have to hear about her sexual preferences. And yes, I know it's petty. It's just a trope that bothered me since it showed up (Not digging at anyone, just venting because I feel like this shows up every single time).
*Frothing rage ceases*
--SPOILERS BEYOND THIS POINT--
Well written over all. Even though I called it about a quarter of the way in it did still give me the feels.
I'm not really sure I agree with the ending, personally. RD obviously remembers what happened and I feel like she's more stable than this. Would I be 'stable' if most of the people I cared about died? No, but this just feels like it's trying too hard. I feel like someone with RD's attitude would become depressed or perhaps even go into denial, but outright crazy-bonkers just feels too far. It was good, it gave me feels, the grammar's fine, but I don't usually dig the crazy ending unless something truly extraordinary happens (E.G. Cthulu or something).
I will say you did an okay job of describing someone with brain trauma, although I doubt she'd be let out of the hospital so early.
... This is so sad... but it had a pshychotic touch in the end. (Or so it looked..)
I started crying 3/4ths of the way through it. At first I thought she was a schizophrenic, but then the turns for a different mind disease/dissorder.
I seriously loved it- AND ALL THE STUPID PEOPLE WHO GAVE A DOWNVOTE TO THIS DESERVES A F***ING BEATING FROM ME!!!!!!!
Anyway, I was disappointed on how it ended. Other than that, I loved everything about this. Very well done.
3413334 Thank you very much for your input
I do agree the ending was a little abrupt but I'd had the idea in my mind for a while now. Thanks for commenting!
3413461 Sure thing. I've never read any of your stories before, this one is a first by you.
3413562 Well thanks for giving it a shot!
3413880Yes- I enjoyed it! I might go read another one...
I don't think I've cried this much... ever
D:
3527147 I feel bad you cried, but I'm glad I was able to provoke some emotions. Thank you for reading, and I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Okay, I finally got around to reading this one for the competition judging. I must say that this captivated me and held my attention throughout. Very well done!
~SolidFire
3664073 Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it
You are a horible horible person and you should feel bad for doing that to Dashie
But good story
3709783 um, thanks?
This story was amazing, I loved the gripping curiosity of wondering what was going on in the beginning of the story, then finding out what was happening only compelled me to carry on and see how she would react to it all. An amazing story to favorite and read again at some point in the future~
...dood...DOOD.. this was...FUCKING AMAISING :D 11/10
wait I'm confused. So she blacked out and her friends are blaming her
Aww this is so sad
While this was a good story, and well-written enough for me to give this a fave, but it should really be labeled with the AU tag.
Dude, someone has to make a sequel to this, NOW!!!!!!!!!