I just couldn't keep something like this to myself. I truly hope you all enjoy it.

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And here I was hoping that you would take a lesson from Cpt. Ray and demand tribute before sharing it.

Not to sound douchy, but after reading the tree I fucking called it. But that's the fun of a vote driven story, you don't get to decide. I enjoyed this, wished we had survived,

Brony on!

3084986 Da fuq!? Discord can unrape somepony?!

Oh Faust damn it! Shoulda chose the cave in!

Damn I fucked up BAD

I wouldn't have been able to guess any of that shit to save my life, my cat, my parents, Obama, The Camel, or all of the earth.

I FUCKING KNEW WE SHOULD HAVE CAUSED A CAVE IN!!!! I FUCKING KNEW IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Yes! The cave in choice. I chose that but it wasn't enough.. :/

uh... so were we almost done with the story??
fuck all you who chose to have a 3-way with Spitfire and Rainbow Dash! should have picked the bathroom!

Damn it! Celestia fucking damn it! I knew we should've caused the fucking cave in!
"But, but, we had to stay stealthy!" FUCK YOU!

3086518 Exactly.

I am surprised nobody did this yet so here i go:

Thank you EchoWolf31 for sharing!

3085718>>3085888 Ninety percent of the world are idiots, most of the remaining will choose to remain hidden rather than risk getting caught. Those of us that see how things like this work are in the minority of the ten percent.

please don't do another story tree they are realy confuseing

wow fuck

Oh man, that's crazy how close we were to the ending good times, gooood tiiimes

Its really annoying the way Ray clearly says ''Choose, or both will die'' And the some idiots vote ''Cant choose'' I mean, seriously!

3104248 I guess some people, when thrown a difficult choice, cave in thus choosing what they believe seems like an easier way out and so logic is thrown out the window it's understandable

I agree with Krazz.
P.S. I now follow TheCamel

Did cause cave-in storyline(what we didn’t choose.)
Ray sends him men to find the lost group, they become trapped by causing another cave-in on their own. All 3 of you surround Ray and stop him from taking Sombra’s horn, his wings are damaged in the fight. Ray pretends to surrender but then runs down a side tunnel, all 3 of you follow. He slips and falls down a crevice, hanging onto the side. He begs to be saved but RD stomps on his claws. He falls to his death.

I FUCKING KNEW IT. I KNEW THINGS WOULD GO RIGHT IF WE JUST TRAPPED THOSE FUCKERS DOWN THERE, BUT NOOOOOOOOOO. THE READERS HAD TO GO AND FUCK IT ALL UP. I CHOSE TO TRAP THE FUCKERS, AND YOU GUYS SAID NO. WELL GOOD FUCKING JOB GUYS. YOU FUCKED UP.

*click* Sorry, had caps on.

Well EveryPony, we never knew what was going to happen, It's not anyone's fault.

3084986 So I saw your newest profile picture... And I literally yelled "Oh, come on!"

What a way to add insult to injury.

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Heh heh heh... couldn't help myself...

Wanted to put myself up-to-date with the story.. to find out that it ended in such a tragic way ..
I knew the cave in would be a nice plan either way its too late now, still its an awesome story buddy

Hope you're getting well
P.S: Nice new prof. image
I can feel the sarcasm on that image to all the readers (?) okno

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I DON'T LIKE THIS ANYMORE!!!

It just made me mad!

Fuck this, I'm outta here!

~theviciouskiller

"The Fire in Her Eyes" and "Let Loose the Griffons of War" were awesome they were both very well written stories. they were intense, dramatic and really drew you into the story... this however was not.

this was a mistake from the start a vote to decide the story is only good for a 1 shot deal, but making it determine the story for the end of a trilogy is the worst possible idea you coulda had. it made the end too rushed and sloppy and it destroyed the quality of this in general. if i were recommending a story for people to read that fell along the lines of this story i would recommend the first 2 parts for sure and tell them to skip this part.

i dont know why you chose to do a popularity vote for the last part but im sorry you did i was lookin forward to seein how this story really ended and now i wish i had never read a griffons fate. -_-

just to clarify this isnt me bein petty cause i didnt like the ending, personally i wanted captain ray to win, and the 'tool' he used to do it, the concept was very nice but again too rushed and poorly written. im only writing this because it needed to be said regardless of if you ignore it or assume its just some whiner. im writing this because i know you can do better and its a shame you chose to do this to the final story of the trilogy. the simplest analogy i can think of to sum this up is, its like you wrote a genius novel but for the last book you let a child do it with finger paints.

sorry if this seemed harsh or whatever you see it as but its how i felt after readin the story and i knew i wouldnt be able to stop dwelling on it till i spoke my mind.

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For the love of god edit your first comment and put your other 200 in there with it.

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I'd say you may want to wait and see what my next project is...

Uhhh... There isn't anywhere we can read the chapters belonging to parts we did NOT choose... Like rushing in to attack Ray, getting killed and RD and SF getting dragon-raped, or doing RD in the bathroom, or choosing to leave RD or SF with Ray, or causing the cave-in? In the first chapter of this part of the trilogy, you DID say you'd written up all the chapters beforehand to prevent yourself from cheating and changing the end to make it end a little better or something...

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I said I had written an outline to decide which decisions led to what. I was thinking of writing out everything and creating a true CYOA but I don't have the time right now.

*sees ending*

*looks at story tree and finds out what could've been*

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I understand on the time (Lord knows I've been too busy to write) but eventually will a manuscript of the good ending and neutral ending see the light of day, or is this pretty much it?

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I hope it does come to light one day... I'm personally kind of bummed that the good ending didn't get chosen.

And of course, feel free to reference this story, as long as you send me a link to it once you're done so I can read it.

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Thus far the only thing to make an appearance that is a direct referrence is Captain Ray as the head of a delegation to Canterlot, and even that is only a few cliffhanger-y paragraphs at the end of the latest chapter. He is very active in the next chapter or two, but then kind of fades to the background of the first story in the trilogy. Rest assured, though, while I'm going to try not to spoil the next books plot, he is a pretty integral character. and of course he is his usual, psychotic villain self.

I'm going to be a self promoting dick, now, and add that link below. Yay for being an asshole!

The Broken Compass

wow. just found this series, and then i get to this story and was just.. wow. That ending was just such a letdown and a bummer after all the buildup. Why did people even vote for it? especially when you said at the beginning of the story that there would be no cop outs or choices that do something different then what they say.... I feel kihd of cheated by the people who for some reason just wanted it to end there >< Still the first two were pretty enjoyable stories, though i wish i could see the story here you actually wanted to write, with all the clop and the proper ending sometime.

3343342 Oh, I see now... I was hoping, though...

maybe post the other choices for fun?

ponders........... i am definitely never giong to do a pole story. definitely never ends well and seems to make the story for the worse in some cases............. not a bad story, but i can tell you did NOT want it to end badly.

then again these gryphons are fucked in sooooo many damn ways. not only will twilight sparkle and the elments seathe with fiery rage, not only will Discord fight and have personal reasons to harm the grphons, but they got........... fluttershy. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rwp60eYuie0

let the invention of fried gryphon commence!!!!

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Oh, those griffons are going to love her... they'll give her more love than a changeling would know what to do with.

And fried griffon... sounds delicious.

3485768 as they plead for their lives as they learn why the ponies have the ability to exist when their species has more natural weapons an aggression.
....... i am actually seriuos there. if you try to think what ways ponies could use their abilties to harm other creatures, they seem a lot more dangeorus than one would normally think....... suddenly the pegasus cutely workign with clouds seems menacing when you realize they could lash out tornados and blizzards agaisnt their foes.

3485768 .......... problem is thre would be no one to buy the fried gryphon after theri race is obliterated..... maybe the diamond dogs.

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And that's where their society comes into play.

3486230 they may be peaceful but no one ever said they was pushovers. more than likely, push them, nd they will do more than push back...........

they are definitely not those cat thigns from the idw mlp comics......... poor adorable bastards were too cute adn stupid to live there were.

....actually now that i think about it, you really should have ignored those poles. no offense, but those other endings were not only better, but more...........realistic? strange isn't it that the most technically realistic outcome, or what should be, is the least realistic with all factors playing? guess that is just how the world of mlp is.

basically from the sounds of it, your plan if one of the girls was chosen was dsicord appearing, and that makes sense.............. so much so that his lack of presence in the ending that we got makes absolutely no sense really. even if they all died, discord would have massacred the gryphons for rainbow's demise anyway.

........... maybe that was a bit harsh, but i can't help but feel that what could have happened should have happened instead of what that pole selected.

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The reason I went with the polls is because YOU are are pegasus tasked with saving (or failing to save) Equestria. Most stories the hero saves the day, gets the girl, blah blah blah... but it's easy to write that kind of story. Choosing the right thing to do is hard, and I wanted to see if the fandom was smart enough to choose right. Yet even with all my hints, I was right; they weren't.

3488461 actually no it just hsows you made a very unfair choice becuase............. there is no way to distinguish which is the right choice there. they aer all basically the same with the same potential of outcome each. so no one made a bad choice, you simply made the choice of which would be bad.
if anythign the third option sounds either more like you randomly choosing than a death sentence for the characters..................

actually it reminds of the videogame darkness 2. in it your character, a mob boss with demonic powers, is restrained and forced to choose between two of your men's lives. but it is a trick. you choose either of them and both will be killed anyway. but choose neither, and the only kill one in spite because they know killing the other won't elicit the wanted reaction because you did NOT make that choice.
this could well be that situation. Ray well could ahve raped and killed both of them anyway, only wanting to hurt the character by palying mind games. so you did not provide a situation of choice because there was no choice that seemd to save anyone at all all thigns considered.