Goodbye, I won't see you later.
“Where to, miss?”
“Does this line go out of the Equestria?”
“Close ma’am, the line ends in San Mareino.”
“One ticket there, one way.”
“That’ll be fifteen bits, train should be her in three hours.” I pulled a little pouch from my saddlebag and dropped it on the ticket counter.
“That should cover it, and keep the change, I won’t be needing it.” I took the ticket and sat down on a bench next to the edge of the station. I looked back, seeing the town I’ve known for so long. I always thought this place was perfect, that is until I met the mare of my dreams, that’s when it all changed, no matter how cliche it sounds.
She showed me how perfect this place could actually be. I’m not really certain how I was ever happy without her, I’m certainly not happy right now. Just lonely, but I’m ready to move on, and that’s exactly what I’m doing.
A buzzing sound woke me from my daydream. It took me a moment to place the familiar noise, but when I did I quickly ducked behind the back of the bench. That was certainly Scootaloo, if she saw me then there’d be no end to her chatter. Don’t get me wrong, I love the kid, it’s just, I don’t really know. I guess if she saw me here, if she knew what was going on, that I was leaving. I couldn’t do that to her. She was always my biggest fan, it would just crush the little filly to know she’d never see me again. That’s just one conversation I would like to avoid, if possible.
I sat back up and looked towards the busy town center, all these ponies that I’ve known for such a long time. I saw Roseluck, the mayor, Miss Cherilee, Lyra, Lily... I could name all of them, and I consider all of them to be friends, so many ponies. And here I am, just up and leaving. I considered letting the whole town know, make an announcement or something, tell them I’m leaving, forever.
But no, that would help no one, they’d just want to stop me, convince me to stay. Also that’s just so uncool, getting everyone together just to give them bad news, there’s no way I’d ever do that.
This place is great, well I guess it was great. I’m just done here, no anger, no sadness, no regrets, just done. I’m moving on. My eyes felt heavy as I thought about this place, dwelling on the friends I made here. I put my head down and embraced sleep. I dreamt pleasantly of all these ponies who had a part in my life.
My peaceful sleep came to an abrupt halt due to the loud screeching and whistling of a train. I sat up and turned back to the station clock then back at my ticket. 4:00, this was my train. I slowly stood up, stretching my legs. This was it, I’m leaving, and there’s no going back once I do. Part of me wanted to turn back and just stay, but no, it is too late. I stepped onto the train and headed towards my compartment. I plopped down and inhaled sharply. I guess this is the beginning of the rest of my life.
I dropped my saddlebag on the seat next to me, in it was contained everything that I was taking with me, mementos of the past. I reached in and pulled out the first thing, a hoof buzzer, obviously to remember Pinkie Pie. This little toy is from way back when Gilda showed up. That was when I learned just how good of a friend Pinkie was. I checked the buzzer. Busted, just as I expected. I chuckled at the fun times we had together. I placed the toy on the seat next to the bag. Goodbye Pinkie Pie.
Next I pulled out a tiny jar of cinnamon apple preserves. Applejack gave this to me when I first bought a house in, well, above Ponyville. A nice housewarming gift, you untwist the jar just a bit and it can make a room smell like warm apple pie. I was often sorely tempted to just eat the contents of the delicious smelling jar, but I always had to remind myself that the preservatives would make the whole thing bitter. I opened the jar in the compartment, but it seems that the smell had dissipated over the years. I’ll miss her competition. Goodbye Applejack.
After that came a little scarf, Rarity made this after I saved her life up at the Best Young Flyers competition. She was insistent to repay me for the favor, so I just asked her to make me a scarf. I didn’t think much of it, just that it’d be nice to have in the winter. As it turned out, Rarity was determined to make the most magnificent scarf ever. She used quartz dust and arranged it in the fabric to catch the light and reflect a perfect rainbow. It was too flashy for my taste, but I’ve always cherished it. Goodbye Rarity.
I reached in again and grabbed a pair of goggles. They belonged to Fluttershy. I turned them over to see the familiar “FS” monogrammed in some frilly style. She wore this way back when Ponyville was responsible for supplying Cloudsdale with the water for that year's weather. Dear Celestia that was one big ordeal, but I’m glad it all happened like it did. Fluttershy was able to see how valued and needed she was and I really think that she herself needed that. I’ll miss you, I’ve known you the longest. Goodbye Fluttershy.
I retrieved the last item from the bag, a ring box. I opened it slowly, inside sat a magnificent wedding band. The gold and platinum laced together in an intricate pattern, speckled with small diamonds. They sparkled beautiful, just like the night sky. That doesn’t matter though, it was all a waste. I worked my tail off for the most spectacular band I could find for the most spectacular mare I knew. Rarity continuously tried to give it to me as a gift, but I knew it wouldn’t be the same as if I worked for it, so I declined the offer.
Six straight months of extra shifts and overtime, just to buy this silly thing. But I knew that I would never forgive myself if I gave anything less than the best to Twilight, Celestia knows she deserves the best. I felt a tear roll down my cheek but I just wiped it away. I wasn’t crying, crying is uncool. It’s just, I don’t, or rather can’t, so many memories and lost chances. But no, no regrets.
I remember the day I walked into the Carousel Boutique with that little pouch of hundred-bit coins, the sum of all of my months of hard work.Twi and I had been together for the past ten months, and I thought now was as good a time as any to truly make her mine. It was just about dusk when I made the exchange for the ring. I felt a moment of pure ecstasy, joy that overwhelmed me. Then I felt confusion as I headed to Fluttershy’s cottage to take care of the animals.
It was the spell. That damn spell that ripped me from the love of my life, stopped me the night before I proposed. The tears were flowing more freely now, it would be pointless to try and stop them. It was my destiny to be with Twilight, but it was her destiny to go somewhere I could not follow. My only choice is to move on while she becomes a princess.
Goodbye Twilight Sparkle, love of my life.
And that’s why I’m moving out so far, out of Equestria’s sovereign, away from anything that could remind me of her. It just hurt to remember now, to think that I can never be with her. And that’s exactly why I’m trying to forget.
Only problem is that I have all of this to remind me of home. No, not home, just the place I used to live. I blinked slowly and sighed. I need to forget, and the only way to do that is to not remember. I can’t have any reminders of home. I had to suppress sobs as I placed all of the items back into the bag. I stood, my knees shaky, and opened the window. I picked up the bag and pressed it against my lips. “Goodbye, I won’t see you later.”
I threw the bag forcefully out the train car before I lost my resolve. That ends it. Rainbow Dash is dead. It’s time for me to go find a nice new place to live, maybe make new friends, but hopefully I’ll never fall in love again. I’ll find a small town and start again.
Where no one knows my name.
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Seems like it would be more in keeping with her personality to ask Twilight out even if she did become a Princess. Kind of hard to imagine the Element of Loyalty abandoning everyone she ever knew over a romance she never even gave a chance.
I can't really decide on how I feel about this story...it's nicely written and a good read but it feels somewhat incomplete to me and I can't tell why. I liked it though so you earned yourself a fav. Good job :)
I like the concept, but this is just a tad too out of character in my opinion... Although Rainbow Dash is just the bearer of the element of Loyalty and isn't forced to be loyal and so on, it really doesn't seem like her to run away from her problems at all.
Still, I like the concept, I won't go around telling people this is awful or anything
2481543 This. I just don't see this outcome happening, this is more along the lines of the 'Return of Harmony' Rainbow Dash where disloyalty comes to the forefront. If anything, it gives her and Twilight more to bond with, flying and all that. We see a very jaded view of Dash here, I'm sure Twilight's princess duties can allow her to get married, look at Cadence for example.
I like the story but I agree with some of the other comments.
I think Rainbow Dash would not have given up.
But other than that great story
Written excellently, however I agree that there doesn't seem to be a reason to let Twilight go.
Perhaps if you made a second part, where they all go to find her.
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Not all fics have happy endings.
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Yes, I know that. But the reason for the sad ending on this one doesn't make sense.
Why does being a Princess mean no relationship?
And there's no way her friends wouldn't go looking for her when she disappears.
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1st point) Lifestyle, it's one of the reasons why I personally don't see a TwiXprincess fic working. The princesses work hard daily, prioritising Equestria above their own lives and inevitably the good of many over the good of a few.
Admittedly this is looking at it from an established relationship perspective, but think about it from Rainbow's point of view. It would be incredibly daunting to go up to a princess and ask them out like that, and if Rainbow constantly sees Twilight as a princess, it could potentially build up an untouchable attribute to a relationship with her, yadda yadda philosophical words.
2nd point) If Rainbow doesn't want to be found, I can guess that she won't be. She's cut off all ties with Equestria, moving out from the kingdom itself and relocating to where no-one knows her name. If you wanted a story where they never find her but keep on searching... well that's an equal probability as to whether he continues this oneshot or not.
And if you say that she would be tracked down by Pinkie Sense... so help me I will murder someone...
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Well, first off, the story said she'd been dating her already, and was getting ready to propose.
To disappear after THAT, I think Twilight at least would search for quite a ways.
And a Princess relationship has to be possible, look at Cadence and Shining.
And how busy could Twilight become? Celestia and Luna already handle most of everything.
I understand that not all stories need happy endings. In fact, many turn out fantastic with depressing ones, and make more sense that way.
But if a happy ending is possible, without looking cheesy or underdeveloped, then why not?
My philosophy on that matter, is that the characters deserve a happy ending sometimes.
Granted, that philosophy came into being when I finished Mass Effect 3, (and was subsequently pissed off), but the meaning still holds.
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To quote Kurt Vonnegut: Be a Sadist. No matter how sweet and innocent your leading characters, make awful things happen to them
Also to quote the story: It was my destiny to be with Twilight, but it was her destiny to go somewhere I could not follow.
this offers some explanation to the disappearance. I'm just speculating over his headcanon here, but I think that R@T goes down the 'confident to a certain point' road with Rainbow and she has an equal probability for running away from her problems, hiding them from herself and just escaping as she's done in this fic.
In regards to the princess points... I never said that Twilight wouldn't search far and wide for Rainbow... but it's not exactly a small world, Rainbow has plausibly relocated to a small place at the end of the line, somewhere which has never had much attention in terms of the media or from the capital, and although Twilight may search, she may also never find her... which knowing R@T is a probable storyline for an extra story.
Princess relationships are possible, yes, but Cadence was already a princess when Shining was presumably dating her, in other words, they were both in stable stages, Cadence was unlikely to spontaneously change into a unicorn whereas Twilight has changed into an alicorn, probably gaining some of the respect that comes with that. In the end it's just another part of change that would probably dissuade Dash's confidence further.
As to the workload... it depends what she was put in charge of. Princess of Magic, Princess of Bookforts, Princess of the Stars or the Princess of knowledge... I'm sure that they'd each come with a pre-allocated stay in Canterlot while Twilight learnt the tricks of the trade, studying long hours and hardly seeing Dash if she was there (which she isn't, but all possible angles here) which would just add to Dash's discomfort and her doubts.
Also also... you do know R@T's stories right? There aren't many happy fics to find in that particular box of spiders and tangled plot lines.
2481543 2481574 2481737 2482200 I could've sworn I put this in the author's note, but apparently not: This was written as if the season finale was the series finale, and as such I don't see Rainbow as abandoning anyone, just moving on.
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Moving on is getting over your crush, not cutting all ties with your life.
2482945 Perspective changes everything
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Oh my, if it was already there I feel really stupid now and I apologise for that comment.
2484258 It wasn't, totally my fault.
Obligatory:
YOU GOT ME!!! Fuck you got me, I cried.
Read this in my college bio class today...my teacher had to stop class to ask why I was crying. That was one of the most embarrassing things to ever happen to me. I loved this story. I don't know if you ever will, but I would love to see a continuation of this story. Have one of her friends by the train station find her stuff and the ring. Everyone gets worried and they try to find Dash, maybe they do, maybe they don't. I can see sooooo much potential for a sequel to this. Please, give it a thought. I look forward to reading more from you in the future. Keep up the great writing!
2486614 Ha, sorry for interrupting class.
I originally had no plan for a sequel, but some friends talked me into it. Right now I have a lot on my plate, both with writing and real life. It may take a while but it will happen.
Also, when it does happen, don't expect a happy ending, I'm not good with those.
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A happy or sad ending will not matter all that much to me. I just really want to see it continued. I shall patiently wait for everything else of yours to get done. I look forward to the day that it comes out.
sad story but good written... Is this a one-shot or will you continue this?
2482270 Actually I interpreted Twi going somewhere where she couldn't follow, as death. Especially given that Rainbow had gone over to Fluttershy whenever whatever it was that happened to Twilight, happened. So, had whatever tragedy that had befallen Twilight, occurred had Rainbow been there at Twi's side then likely she would have shared the same end. That's how I interpret Rainbow considering Twi having gone to where she couldn't follow. Of course, given that we aren't given any specific details regarding what happened to Twi, then my interpretation is simply that, an interpretation, and one possibility to describe what happened to Twi. There are other possible interpretations for what happened to Twi.