Rainbow Dash has always wanted to stay ahead of everyone. The only problem is when everypony grabs hold of her too bring her back down to speed. How will Rainbow react when her more hidden feelings come out to play.
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Sweet mother of Celestia my first chapter got split into two parts!
Oh well I hope to have part two out soon
*Skims* Wall of text! Wall of text!
Mate, believe me when I say that a story is infinitely easier to read when every character speaks on a different line. Just in case it helps.
Shadow Scyer Thanks. I am still new to this so I will try to fix it. any suggestions on improving are always appreciated
There see if that is better.
Ahh, wall of text, we meet again. But the premise is sound, I have an edited version (so I could read it properly), if you want it just say.
Do you have an editor? If not I will help.
2476191 Oh if you would that would be the best thing ever!
The wall of text I seem to have a problem with, along with calling Twilight the lavender unicorn
got to stop saying that
2477554 Lavender Unicorn Syndrome (LUS) is very, very common, only really picky people get annoyed by it really. Also, I'll send the edit to you now.
Also, you have a tendency to miss out certain letters from say: Rarity and Twilight, with you using 'Raity' and 'Twilght'. Also, remember to capitalise all names, Rainbow springs to mind after the edit, even things like Tic-Tac-Toe and place names.
Chapter 2 out! Comment posted now working on chapter 3. Oh pony Fan fics. how I can waste time on you
Oh dash, you dun goofed.
Finally done with chapter 3. This took a little while because I am working on another story, which should be out by the end of the week.
2661597 Oh yes, Dash has goofed hard.
This Should have romance tag, why no romance tag?
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I didn't do the tags. My friend did them. I will add it though.
life, do something wrong it comes back to hit you later on THAT'S KARMA BITCHES!
Didn't comment on the edit much, so tired after trying to fix my sleeping pattern. So I'll comment on one thing.
I missed adding comma after gasped. Add this and I will be redeemed.
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You have now been redeemed, my good sir.
Aahhh I missed something!
Should be staring, and also missed an end quotation mark on the last line.
Honestly, I probably missed more.
*cough *cough blind *cough *cough
Adorei
