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Tavi n Scratch


You cannot have joy without tasting despair.

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The Sonic Rainboom didn't happen when Twilight needed it to, and thus she failed her entrance exam. Now, just minutes later, Trixie's test begins, and an unexpected explosion taps into her full potential.


I wrote this as more of a challenge to myself to go against Trixie stereotypes, and as such it will be quite short.

Chapters (7)
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Comments ( 26 )

Interesting...

I gave a thumbs up, but you gotta earn a favorite :ajsmug: keep going

I would integrate this with the next chapter. Also: "As I stand in the ruins of the ancient castle I remember the day with clarity" should be "As I stand in the ruins of the ancient castle, I remember the day with clarity".

I could point out a bunch of editing-type things that I would tweak, but-- overall-- this is a pretty good idea as well as a pretty good story so far. Good luck with everything!

2153071 Not in this one, as part of me breaking stereotypes. However I do have a Twixie fic coming soon.

2152840 Oh comma splices, my mortal enemy. :twilightangry2:

2152851 Yeah sorry about that, this is a side project and I am thus lacking an editor for this one. My own pre-reading is only so good, I apologize for errors.

A shot has been given.

I'll admit, this isn't the most original idea in the world, but I think your own personal sense of execution should make this story incredible. Good work so far!

2153234 It gets more original later on don't worry, I realize that what is posted right now is kind of generic. It gets better.

This could go places.... Will follow.

Hmm, not bad. I'm more curious than anything, Not much yet, but it has potential. :rainbowwild:

Hmmm, I really like this :D You have a few punctuation mistakes here and there, but this is pretty awesome!

I think that your chapters are a little bit too short though, but that's just my opinion~ If I were you, I would put one of those nice little italicized inserts in the middle of the chapter.

Favoriting! Can't wait for more! :D

2169838 Yeah, this is kind of a side project, I'm working on something much bigger and as such this story is on the back-burner, I don't spend as much time as I should, but it helps to keep my mind creative when I'm working on multiple projects.

I'm glad you enjoy the idea.

I seriously can't wait to see what happens next, I'm not a large fan of short chapters if I can read it in less then three minutes then i tusually won't hold my attention but this story seems to do the impossible so I'm looking forward to the next chapter with expectations.

chill.......interesting

Comment posted by Jetstream S deleted Feb 26th, 2013

Outstanding little story. Very nice take on Trixie's and Twilight's origins and backstory to the first episode of the show. :twilightsmile::moustache::pinkiehappy:

you know the first 6 chapters i found it to be very a lack luster performance but this chapter proves it to me that your a diamond in the rough

2185433 It is kind of meant to be more of a plain story, mostly to prove a point. Thank you for the compliment. Will you be doing a review of it on your page?

2185885 half way through typing it and what would that point be

2186023 There are other ways to write Trixie than her usual stereotypes.You should know that, that's kinda what your page is based on. :rainbowlaugh:

All teh feels!!! :applecry::raritycry::fluttercry:

P.S. Does Trixie remember her heroic actions?
P.S.S. Will there be more? :pinkiehappy:

2189783 All Trixie remembers is her hatred for Twilight.
I am always writing more, anything Trixie that I write will occur in this continuity.

Oh great. Please don't turn Trixie into a sun slave like Twilight. I really like Trixie.

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