• Published 23rd Apr 2013
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Rainbow Factory Condemned - LordCarn



Five years ago, The Rainbow Factory was condemned by Princess Celestia and many questions were left unanswered as to why. Now, as a filly, starting your first year in flight school, your classmates decided to give you a test to prove your worth.

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Chapter 30

Your eyes flicker open slowly, only to see darkness beyond them. You were lying on your back. You tried to move your legs but you felt that they were restrained. You pulled at them but to no avail. You hear a small click, and a light above you begins producing a light that blinds you, forcing you to close your eyes. "You know you made it much farther than any other pony. I'm honestly very impressed. It's such a shame that all of your struggles were in vain." You open your eyes slowly to adjust them to the light. Rainbow Dash stood behind a control panel on the far end of the room working a few levers and buttons, occasionally glancing up at you.

"Now Rainbow, it's not polite to play with your prey." Discord's voice rang out from the darkness.

"But this filly isn't prey. By saying that it is, you imply it has the chance to escape." A new voice entered the conversation. It was feminine, and almost demonic.

"Oh, always so technical about your grammar. Why must everything you do be so precise. Where is the fun in everything being so strict."

"I'm not here to argue with you, I'm here because of the offer she made me."

"Will both of you SHUT UP! We've gone over this before, I need both of you to help me continue my research, and to do that, we have to keep this factory running. Discord, I'm sure being able to release some of you chaotic energy is payment enough, and Chrysalis, your getting 'food' for your subjects... I still don't understand how that works..."

A green glow erupted from the darkness, resembling two eyes. The black figure stepped into the light. "Yes well you don't have to. All that matters to you is that this entire operation is being covered up by my minions."

"And Discord, I'd like to thank you for creating a hole in the princess' spell."

"Oh well I'd do anything for one of my close friends!"

".... Don't push it."

"Ahem, don't you have something to attend to?"

"Ah, yes. Now that everyone has been acquainted with each other, let us begin. Hello you poor young filly. I'd like to be the first to thank you for volunteering for this project of mine. Oh, and I almost forgot," She pulls down on a lever. A machine slides out from a nearby wall, travelling along a metal track , and positions itself directly in front of you. A rod slides out from the middle of the machine to reveal a knife. It spins and rotates until its seems to have found an optimal entry point.

"Welcome to the Factory."

Author's Note:

Roll credits. Well, everyone, here we are. After about a year and a fourth, it is over. Oh, and Chysalis was planned from the begining. I made several nods that there was a third pony involved in this. If anything doesnt seem to make sense, point it out to me, and i'll either try to explain it, or be all like, "Woops, my bad." But to all of you who have stuck with me and this story, I'd like to thank you for doing so. If you'd like to contact me, or add me on steam or something, SEND ME A MESSAGE. dont send a friend request, i'll just deny it thinking its another person who was just on the same server or something that i'm playing on... or somethng... So yeah... Well... Take care of yourselves. - LordCarn

Comments ( 14 )

very good story all the way through :twilightsmile: though i was expecting a different ending, rather than the main character to be dead :unsuresweetie: but its still good.:twilightsmile:

4580462 Thank you so much for sticking with it all the way through, I'm glad you liked it!

Is there going to be a sequel? Because I think there should be a sequel where Celestia and Twilight learn what is happening.

Lol I started the song at the ??? chapter and then went to this chapter and the song endeed right on spot at the end of the chapter. lol.

ALTERNATE ENDING PLZTYBYE :D

4705979 Many things are possible with time.

5848569 Hm... to many people seem to believe that You are a changeling... I will have to rectify this... ALSO Thank you for the fav!

Good story enjoyed it btw also can you plz give me a hint to the code/ game thing you gave us in chapter 28 plz.
~Jade.

6206193 Capitalized letters and The elements. trying to be vague but... yeah...

I've got one question, what does the welcome to the factory line mean?

The beginning of the story reminded me of outlast or one of those games where the character goes into a shutdown place and records everything.

I have no clue what the passwords or usernames are which is a shame. 7/10 good story.

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