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What will happen to Scootaloo, will Rainbow kill her, find out here.
This is the story of what happens after Rainbow Factory, of what happens to Rainbow Dash, and the way the horrors Scootaloo experienced, changed her.
The original story RAINBOW FACTORY is not mine, this sequel is unofficial, All credit for the story this is sequeling goes to Aurora Dawn.

Chapters (5)
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Comments ( 82 )

More to come to this, hopefully I will make it darker and gorier:pinkiecrazy:

Not bad! People are always sequeling MLD and Cupcakes so this is a nice change of pace!

the type of story everypony wants it to be but since this is first you have a good deed today my friend keep up the good work.

This is definitely interesting, just a reminder to work on grammar and such.
:twilightsheepish: its good to say that it held up the grammar aspect just well enough as I was reading for me to continue, but for future reference please take the time to correct before uploading.
For instance the phrase "I will" can be made into "I'll" which greatly reduces need to reread said sentence to understand it :trixieshiftright:

Thanks for the praise guys, one of the reasons I wasn't very good with the grammar was because I wrote this at midnight, and being 15, that isn't good, next one will either be out later or tomorrow, and I'll make sure to check the grammar.
I'm glad you like it, I'm planning on taking it down a darker route, but who knows what will happen :pinkiecrazy:

I'm not complaining that much, and yes I am tracking this. :scootangel:
Trust me when I say this a welcomed change from reading clopfiction all the time, I swear its the only thing that ever consistently updates :trollestia:


I know what you mean, I only joined recently and most stories were human world equestria crossowvers and My Little Dashi rip offs, seriously, they ruined that story for me.

Well you also have to remember the fandom's origins start with 4chan and you know how many of them are really trolls :trollestia:

HEy joeman this story is
No just kidding its really awesome i always enjoyed dark bloody stories


You might be next for this tale isnt always suger and spice and everthing nice :pinkiecrazy:


Thanks :twilightblush: wanted to make a dark story and only now have I found the chance, already working on the next chapter, it will most likely be out tomorrow though, and yes, I plan for more blood in this then before :pinkiecrazy:

Yay i need my daily fix on death and blood so i look at this chapter but require more blood
GIVE ME BLOOD :flutterrage:

*Still epic in everway


Oh you'll get blood my friend, maybe even horrific tortue, or maybe not tortue, I haven't fully decided yet on anything :pinkiegasp:

Wow, interesting reversal of Scootaloo and Rainbow Dash.



This was not blood and gore
Ashamed of you


Actually, yeah, I only just realized that.........
How could I not even notice that and I wrote it......

Um, it is only second chapter in, and I kind of set it up for gore in beginning of next chapter, hey, I might even through in a few disembowlments for you, no promises though.

good show mate(not Australian lol)
a few errors in the grammar but this is a good story keep up the writing :pinkiehappy:
and one more thing

Indeed. A few grammar and spelling mistakes, but overall this story is shaping up to be a good one.

I can't really help with grammar, being 15 and close to leaving compulsory education means I'm surprised I can do this well :3

Don't worry, next chapter starts ith a bit of blood :3

I like this! It's very creepy! Really draws you in!

Thanks, although I won't be submitting my next one till tomorrow evening, mainly as I have started my own original story, but also I'm suffering from a tiny bit of writes block, I have ideas, but I just can't connect them together.

this is good but you might want to read it there are some words that are missing letters but other then that really good

this is good but you might want to read it there are some words that are missing letters but other then that really good

The suspense is killing me! I want to know what the mane 6 are doing!

You... need some serious help with spell checking and grammar, as well as story flow.

That's all I'm going to say.

Getting creeeeepier :pinkiecrazy: Lovin' it!

There, used Word to spell check it all.

I'm afraid it will be a few days till the next chapter is release, I'm going up to London with my dad and I would rather spend tme with someone I rarly see then be writeing :D

Just to let you know, going to be starting a new chapter tomorrow

No. Thats not how stuff works pinkie! :unsuresweetie:

That face, tis strangly alluring :pinkiecrazy:

This is interesting. I can say that this does credit to Dark Fics as far as I can tell. I don't really care about grammar as much as most people because I suffer in that area of my writing as well. :twilightsheepish:

I have improved gramma as much as possible by pating into word processor, then pasting back in :rainbowkiss:

Does anyone have the link for the original Rainbow Factory? Please and thank you.

I really underestimated this things popularity.

Oh Pinkie when will you understand the meaning of no, especially when someone yells out NO!:facehoof:

Wait a sec good story and all but how do you scab overdeep wounds?

Please elaborate, I havent been able to write so I cant remember what your talking about?

Please Please Please Please continue this story i love the whole story and i NEED to know what happens next.

Sidenote:you did an amazing job and i really love the darkness of these types of stories for their realism because everypony has their dark side and i love to find a fic that expresses those darkest of emotions whether it be hate,fear,jealousy or insanity i love it all :pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

Your enthuasiasm pleases me, yes, I will continue this story, I am busy, but I will try my best, unfortunetly, I am also working on a second story, and I must write another chapter for that first.

313264 I will be sure to check it out sir/madame

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