Two months have changed Airborne's life forever. He uncovered the final fate of Rainbow Dash, who was sealed in a crystal tomb for two hundred years. Now he must journey across the Equestrian Wasteland and find out what happened to the greatest team of fliers in Equestria's history the Wonderbolts. But time is running out as a new threat looms on the horizon, Airborne must travel to the blasted ruins of one of the first cities to fall in the War that shaped Equestria's fate forever and uncover what happened to the Wonderbolts as both toxic wind and abundant enemies close in for the kill. Will Airborne be able to finally find the Wonderbolts or will they forever be lost to the Equestrian Wastes? In a race against time itself Airborne must find out the whether this mystery has an answer once and for all.
Cover art by Turtledude.
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I am really glad you like my story and the characters therein, I tried really hard to develop characters that people would like after reading Kkat's amazing story. So thank you!!!!
Also I figured that even though things are starting to return to normal in Equestria, that not every area would have recovered as fast given that for two hundred years there has been no law and order. So it would be common place to have ghouls and raiders still roaming around in those areas that have yet to return to normal, also given the effects of the War, Equestria might not ever return to normal after experiencing nuclear fallout.
But I am glad you like the story so far and I will be posting more of this story later this week so stay tuned!!!!
I think this is going to be a good side story but right now I'm reading like five other story's so I'll read this later
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What do you think of my story so far?
this is really good keep it up
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thanks, glad you like it!!!!!!
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Okay.
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If I knew how to make one I would in a heartbeat. Unfortunately my artistic skills are really poor, and I don't know anyone willing to make one for my stories.
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Do you know anyone who might make me a cover for my story?
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Have you enjoyed it?
Couple of comments on this chapter:
I think that should be hear. You don't need to call them battlefields, you can just say the 'battlefield' or "actions in battle". Battlefield would be understood to be anywhere that there was a battle.
Also, you might want to do a tad bit of formatting, having all the text lumped together is uncomfortable to read.
You probably don't need the 'saying' there and if you drop that just use a period. Sometimes you don't need a comma there. In this case, it's because you would've made a stand alone statement. It's a bit unnecessary to announce what he's about to do. I'd also recommend shorting that 'cannot' to can't. Also, I'm of the opinion, personally, that when you leave off the last letter of a word for some kind of accent you should put a ' on at the end.
Kinda of sad, the present state of affairs. I think pony intelligence has been addled, they should just have beaten it out of town once their explosives went off. Uhh, wasteland, how screwy you are.
Just some changes that seem appropriate to that sentence, below:
The issues is that you're talking about in a past tense way, but writing in a sort of present tense.
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thanks for your feedback. I made the changes you suggested on both of them. I was wondering if you know anyone who could make a cover for my stories.
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Like the new cover?
You need to start making new paragraphs whenever someone else talks it makes it easier to read.
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If you could aid in that I would be grateful.
NO THIS IS NOT THE END.....is it
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Nope, I am working on another Airborne Fanfic right now.
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GOOD!!!
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I take it that you like my stories. XD
How is this a crossover?
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I do
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Fallout Equestria which was created by Kkat is a crossover between MLP and the Fallout video game series. There are many fanfic's based on the universe she created thus they are crossovers between the MLP and Fallout.
3332520 Not really, they're more dealing with an alternate universe future of MLP, so all it really warrants is an alternate universe tag.
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Thanks regolit.
This chapter, of the errors I spotted, this one was pretty amusing.
I will be Rainbow Dash! Yes! Yay!...
Seriously, though, you need a comma in there between "be" and "Rainbow Dash". I'd also recommend inserting a comma between "Airborne" and "we" as well as contracting "cannot" to "can't". There are two statements (in this case they appear to be independent clauses) in that sentence, "Please be careful Airborne" and "We cannot afford to lose you". You could probably use a semicolon to separate them, but it might be overkill.