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I shall enjoy reading this good sir!
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That was...very enjoyable, great job!
Already knew it would be a nude beach soon as I saw the title? And a nude beach as the place to relax and unwind?
This is fucking awesome! Greatest thing ever. And that FlimFlam is one sexy beast! Anyways, I hope this story leads to good things for you...
And now for what I always do:
Til next time bro!
Oh what is this.. (read description)
SEQUEL!!!! SQUEE!!!
Commence read! Best April fools day ever!
2360029 Thanks. That Link though . . . it scares me.
2360487 Yeah? Why not?
2360602 Thanks again.
2360643 Thought you'd like it.
2360674 Another grand masterpiece Mr. Warlock.
This story is SOOO going to be featured. Happy april fools day btw.
2360762 It would be nice for it to get featured.
Very nicely written. Good show!
2361008 Thank you.
2360967 Trust me IT will.
2361034 Get more to read it then. More views equal better chance of getting featured. Hell find other groups I didn't submit this story in, that should help.
honastly i dont know wether to curs the lucky bastered or pry for him
good job dude 
so insted i laph and clop
2361160 Thank you kindly.
Another masterpiece from the Warlock, nice!!
This blows that Twixie EW prank completely out of the water! What a wonderful and sensual gift for April Fools' Day, darling
And what a awesome surprise that this was the sequel to "Rest and Relaxation".
I'm glad to see that Spike's gotten over his stage fright, a wonderful twist to what happened to him. I was worried that after the events of "Rest and Relaxation", he was gonna pull a Gilda at the first beach. But then, Rarity lets him in on the secret that she's got her own beachhouse and private beach, complete with protection spell that camoflauges it so that peeping Toms and other vagrants can's tresspass, and that the entire thing was planned. I guess the fashion scene is extremely lucrative for our lovely fashionista--without even mentioning her boyfriend can find gems easily worth millions of bits on their own.
Big shoutout to FancyPants and Fleur for giving Rarity and Spike access to his second home. I really like that stallion and mare, would love to see more with those four. Hmm, how about a double date?
2362124 Thank you. I hope so as well.
2362806 What do you mean by Spike "pulling a Gilda"? And maybe I'll do some double date, but maybe not. For now though, I have other things in RL to worry about such as finals and work. Besides, I also want to do another pairing for my next story.
This was pleasantly enjoyable continuation of Rest and Relaxation. I always enjoy your work especially when you do Sparity. Keep up the good work.
2363089 Thank you.
2363066
What I mean when I say "pulling a Gilda", I am referring to the party that Pinkie Pie threw to welcome Gilda to Ponyville in the episode "Griffon the Brush-Off". Gilda was the unfortunate (relatively speaking) victim of all of Pinkie Pie's gags and pranks. In reality, the gags were set up for anypony to be set off, but the way Gilda reacted to it was most uncouth. She was all pushy, rude, and straight up douchey. Ultimately, it let to Rainbow Dash conforting her former friend on how Gilda reacted to the party.
Long story short, it's basically being a douche. It just seemed to me at first glance that Spike was being one, with how he reacted to learning that the beach Rarity took them to was a nude beach, but then re-reading it, he was just being a gentledrake.
If you have the time, re-watch that episode. You will see where my comment came from.
2361076 I'LL DO IT!
2363132 Oh, well that's not what I was going for with Spike.
2363933
Ya lost me at the "call me master" bit, but regardless was enjoyable. More Lols then clop for me but was a fun read.
Mane Medic
2371687 Still glad to know you loved it.
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2361160, Your grammar & spelling.... it is painful
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If there's one thing that any girl or doctor will tell you, it's that you never immediately go from anal to vaginal sex, especially if it's unprotected. That's just asking for her to get a nasty infection.
Anyways, I like the idea of Spike having trouble controlling himself at a nude beach, but I think you could've done better execution-wise. There was plenty of fluff at the beginning that you could've cut out; I don't think the story really needed to have started at the train ride on the night before. I also happened to notice the sentence structure getting repetitive, especially when narrating a series of actions. Don't be afraid to experiment with sentences that aren't just "Character verbed the object." (And no, replacing the character's name with a weird title is not a proper substitute.)
Lastly, the sex scenes are okay, but they lack flavor. Good sensual sex is more than just dry "He placed his manhood inside her. She moaned," sentences. Don't forget to use words that evoke senses other than sight and sound, and especially let us know what the characters think and feel during the action. Also, take your time with describing the actions; you don't have to lump it all in one or two paragraphs between dialogue.
I could go into more depth if you'd like, but I'll refrain from making a wall of text for now. It's an okay story, but you can do a lot more with it.
2372196 Good to know!
2373432 Sorry to hear you didn't like it so much. I actually was trying to spice things up a little since my previous clop fics were kind of straightforward.
2372343 sorry
Shift in narration randomly in the one line.
You tend to get repetitive once you get to the sex scenes with your word choice, and for the love of Luna stop using moist cave!
The story was good, the sex was fun, and I totally feel cheated about the last scene...
2374298 Okay. You know, I think I should consider making you my editor for when it comes to Sparity clopfics.
2374447 Maybe
2375478 I would really consider you for it. Considering how it seems how you're an Expert at clopfics.
2375510 Reading that now, it occurs to me, I should take that off my resume.
2376067 Well you are really good at doing those stories. I meant no offense.
2376114 I know; it was a joke
2377802 Oh, my bad.
Well if I plan to do one specific story that's floating around in my head, I think I'll hire you as my editor for the clop scenes. 
Damn you, Now I want to visit that beach! *shrugs* well, there are beaches like that in Europe! I smell vacation!
OOOOOH Where are we going Demon?
Just a beach in Europe.
Cool, I'll start packing! *bounces away to pack*
Does it make me evil for not telling her?
2379389 Well if she doesn't slug you or make you sleep on the couch for what you did, then I guess not. There are far worse ponies out there.
2381674 I don't think she'd hit me.... but fi she does, I'll deserve it
Deserve what?
Um, Pinkie, we are going to a nude beach in Europe. I planned on not telling you, but... *is surprised by a hug and quick kiss*
It's ok, I'm not mad. I knew about it all along hehe. You aren't the only one who read this. Besides, I have a treat for you when we get there. Hurry up Demon *walks away, brushing her tail against my nose*
.... I think I am gonna get lucky!
2383680 This is Pinkie Pie we're talking about. She can read minds.
YOU HAVE GRACED US WITH ANOTHER EXHILARATING ESCAPADE AND ADVENTURE OF SPARITY.
You Deserve 5 Mustache Spikes And 5 Pouty Rarity's(Total Of 10/10 Sparity's)
Have A Good Day,My Good Man.
2389823 Thank you very much.
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My Reaction To This Story
(Also My Reaction While Eating At Our Local Restaurant)
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2390085 DAYUM DAYUM DAYUM
I Can Only Imagine Spike Singing That When He Either See's A Gem Buffet Or Singing It In His Mind While Bucking With Rarity.....
