Onward to the Equestria Games
In the Apple's 'gymnasium'
"Come on, Raindrops! How can ya think of winnin' them wrestlin' trials if ya can't manage to toss me at least once!"
(heavy pantings) "I'll get you Applejack!" (Quick steps, body clashing noise.)
"That's more lik'it!"
"Why didn't we choose Applejack for the wrestling competitions? Raindrops' been going at her for hours, and she kept being tossed around!"
"Don't know Rose. Probably because we can't have Applejack compete in everything. We must leave a chance for the other teams." (chuckles)
"Allie! Focus! Your magic grip is slipping! You still got fifty lifts left to do! Rose, finish your lunges series."
(Synchro) "Yes, Cloud Kicker!"
"No, Ditzy! I refuse to kiss your thing!"
"Come on, Vinyl. It's for good luck."
"It could be for the national treasure, it'll be the same. I kiss no pastry."
"KISS THE LUCKY MUFFIN!"
"NO! Doc'! What was my last time for the hundred meters?"
"Let me see. It was about 10. 99. Want to try again?" (Nod) "Ok then. Allons y!"
"Don't overexert yourself, Vinyl! Don't want to sprain your legs before the qualifications."
"Will do, Redheart! I'll go get them massaged by Aloe after this run." (Door opening, closing.)
"How are things going, Cloud Kicker? I hope they're going for the better!"
"They're going along nicely, Zecora! Raindrops seems to hold her ground nicely against AJ, which is no little thing."
"What about your fencing? Shouldn't you be practicing?"
"Well, I would, but I need a partner for that. Care to play that role, Coach?"
"Hum. I've never been one for fencing. Maybe my staff will do the thing?"
"That'll work."
"Hey there fellas, Applejack here. What do y'all think about the team we've assemble to represent Ponyville?"
"Hey, AJ, I just thought about something. No one told us where the games will be."
"What nonsense are ya spreadin' Vinyl? Ya were there when we got the letter from the Committee. It's in Ponyville!"
"Yeah, but where? I can't see it on the map."
"Huuuuh! Ya sure about that?"
"Well, unless Lyra tricked me with a wrong map, I'm sure of it."
"RAAAA. Give me that. How hard can it be to find where Equestria Games will be on a stupid map?"
"Well try to find them then!.... SO, Finding anything yet?"
"...no."
"(sigh) I think the readers well probably get there before us."
"Ah reckon it looks like it."
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Oh well better late than never 
you realize that only now?
2317653 hey how long have you been a brony?
I also noticed there is no colt-cuddlers either wierd right?
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discovered the show in september...
Brony since October, when I first read University days
as for the colt-cuddled part, there are lots of story with. it's not my thing though so I'm not payin' much attention to it
Okay, wow. It is 4 am for me right now, and I just spent the past SIX HOURS reading that entire series
I just started out for a short feel good, but man, you got me hooked.
I applaud you on a job well done.
Keep up the Octavia and vinyl scratch
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thanks
I'm glad you liked it
Check the sequel for more Vinyl and Octavia...and the other as well
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Eeeeyuuup
one of the cutest kiss scene I've ever seen
two down in one day, with errands and a concert interceding...
not bad, and I'm loving how well your style is progressing. I'm a bit ashamed to admit, the writing quality almost had me walk away at the start of the first story. I'm very glad I stuck with it. the improvement is tremendous.
one question though: what is your first language? I'm getting hints of a non-english grammar structure, and the curiousity's been bugging me since chapter 6 of the first fic...
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You ditched my fics for university days ?
....
Who Am I kidding? if you hadn't, you'd have been a fool
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) but before AppleScratch, my only writing experiences in english were school works exclusively. A novel and a school essay ain't really the same thing
Nothing to be ashamed of, my first story does have a big problem in its form
Maybe I'll rewrite it one day, when the third Apple Scratch is over
To answer your question : my mother tongue is french.
I'm not bad in Speaking english (thanks movies
Anyway, Glad you liked the stories so far
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hah! called it!
sorry, I've been wondering that all day
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Also, if you'd like an assistant/editor for the possible rewrite, I'd be honored to help.
This really is a fantastically designed AU, and it'd be a shame to see it passed by too quickly.
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I'll keep that in mind for when the times comes
But first, must finish Onward to the Equestria Games first
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No, just a pyromaniac Texan with more blades than you and your cat have fingers and toes, and a gun for each day of the week.
2523983 Yes. Because her mother is a unicorn, and her father is an Earth Pony.
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Of course
Lovely story,
I cried
Laughed
Even facepalmed
i just wish i read this story before the Equestria Games, a whole lot of sense would of been made.
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,... )
Glad you like it
(maybe I should put numbers in the fic names
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Just out of curiosity,
which scenes made you cry, laugh and facepalm?
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Hmmmmm I laughed at Pinkie's failed attempt to leave the house while AJ promised her all sorts of stuff, with twilight taking notes
Cried when Vinyl told her story about coming to the apple families and her back. Also when Mrs. Rich patronized her.
and facepalming was just my thoughts going deeper into the words than necessary.
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Good reading
Haha !
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It's phrased in a way that insinuates physical pain (wow... that sounded fancy!). May I suggest trying to re-write it a little? Perhaps have Vinyl elaborate that it doesn't hurt physically, but it hurts her emotionally? Would make it easier for the reader.
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I'll think of something a bit later
Definitely loved this story
Maybe you should make a one-shot where Applejack and Vinyl or Rarity and Octavia get their genders switched. That should be "interesting"...
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otherwise they look like regular humans
They conjure their wings when they want to. or when they want to use more powerful weather mania magic
2750596 Ah, okay, so unless Jupiterians and Titanians are actually using their tribe's magic, there's no visible physical difference from an Eponian. Got it.
Well, having gotten around to finishing it, I can say that it was a really good, fun read. Though with the track record with family members we've seen so far, what's next? Rarity's family turn out to be Titanian supremacists? Incidentally, I just think it's hilarious that Rarity's a baroness just because it means her parents are nobility. I'm trying to picture it based on how they were presented in the show, and keep laughing.
On a more serious family-related note, though, I have to say there was one thing that bugged me about the story, and that was Cornelio. Given how happy the girls in the Council were to see him when he arrived, it's obvious that they were on good terms with him, which made the sheer level of dickishness on display seem strange.
Maybe, in comparison to Blueblood, he's just better at hiding his asshole tendencies among members of his own social strata, but here he didn't even pretend to be anything less than a complete jerk, so we weren't given any context to understand why they were so fond of him before the big blow-up. And afterward, while it's understandable that they drop him like he's radioactive considering what he did, there's no discussion about how he had changed from the person they thought he was, or how they had no idea he was such a snob, or anything like that. It just felt like a puzzle with one or two pieces missing.
Wow, great story.
I truly love the way you write rainbow and pinkie. I don't find that many fics that depict them as close friends. And man, great story. Keep up the great work.
this have being one of the best worlds I have had the pleasure of reading wile not a big block buster its more like a indie film that surprises you(please understand by indie film I mean tis as a great complement because instead of going what is considered standard history for most story's you whent and made your own and it works so well
)
"No, Ditzy! I refuse to kiss your thing!"
My first thought: Dirty little Ditzy!
Dat last bit!
Next fic should be fun, this will be a good team.
You sir are the reason why I don't sleep, darn you and your awesome fanfiction!! You literary genius you!!
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Eponian and Jupitarian, you mean?
Those are actually just the name of the humanized sort of Ponies: Jupitarian for Pegasus, Eponian for Earth Pony, Titanian for Unicorn. it's explained in the prequel
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Hmm, it's not going to get re-worked like the first story, but I'll try to get some time to correct the grammar et format mistakes lying around in the story
Thats buckin awsome, great movie
5698869 so, I just am
5757227 wrong lever!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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That one is on me!
I re-wrote An Apple Scratch Toward the world long after finishing a Summer at the Farm.
In the first version, Rainbow had never witnessed the physical prowess of Vinyl beforehand. (Kinda forgot this moment )
7434872 WRONG LEVER
You can has review!