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Midnight Shadows
Been a member since 2012, never realized there was a bio line until the end of 2018, I TAKE WRITING COMMISSIONS! :D lol. I don't do roleplays.
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I really liked this Midnight Shadows. Rainbow Dash is a very difficult pony to put into diapers and I personally think you nailed it. 10/10.
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Oh, well, thank you very much.
It's not that good. 
It's simply a re-write of my submission though. Like I said in the thread, If I had made the original longer and spent more time on it, it would have been better, and this is my proof.
I thought it was a very nice story.
I've seen quite a few different ways that the Wonderbolt Academy stuff could go through instead of the way it's shown in the actual show but this is the more interesting ones that I have seen. Your descriptions were pretty good and I liked how you characterized Spitifre in this.
Well done, excellent job as always.
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Thank you. I try.
Another great story by the talented Midnight Shadow!
Great job Midnight. I'd go back and re-edit my contest submission and just post as a regular fic but I think I'll leave it as it is so I know what not to do when next I write any sort of fanfiction.
Pretty good. Spitfire's characterization as the stern, yet understanding CO is a characterization I especially like. Love the flashback with the doctor.
You may want to give the grammar a once over because there are some oddly capitalized words and mispellings. And you have the habit of ending speech with periods instead of commas.
- You may wanna fix this because you are repeating yourself.
All in all, aside from some grammatical and mechanical gaffes, the plot and characterization are pretty good.
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>Pattycakes
Fluttershy had no problem doing it
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Thank you!
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Thanks, I try, I had to pull in the factors that spitfire has been shown both as a friendly, um... friend... (Well that's redundant, lol) To Rainbow Dash, and as a CO that's, well... not so much. I found that actually quite hard to do, so that means a lot.
I can't believe I missed that redundancy...
Thank you for catching that.
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This is my new favorite comment.
1943336 Well that was because she did after she had Rainbow Dash pinned down.
1943336 Fluttershy also drugged Rainbow Dash
Not bad. You've certainly got the story telling part down better. There's still some bumps in mechanics, and some hiccups here and there, but certainly much better. One thing about commas and speech;
"You put a comma here like this," I said.
"But what about when there's a question?" you asked.
"Just like that," I said. "But one more thing."
"What's that?"
"You only use a comma when they 'say' something." I turn to look at you. "Use a period when the spoken sentence isn't followed by how they 'said' it, see?" With a nod, I then show you that you capatalize the new sentence of the next sentence if there's a question, as long as it isn't 'they asked.'
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That's the first time someone has explained that to me in a way I can comprehend what they are trying to say.
Points for being clear with what you are trying to explain.
Its just everything I have learned about writing, I learned a few years ago from other people when I was in those teenage 'brain absorbs everything' years... I'm not longer in those years, so its harder for me to remember these things. But I will certainly try now that someone has explained it clearly. (Might have to explain that one to those who taught me.)
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Glad to be of service. It's best to teach by example, after all. Really, if someone would bother to help out inexperienced writers like yourself even a little bit, we'd have a lot less cruddy stories sitting around. I make sure to provide a little bit of help when I can, if I can't comb through every little mistake.
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I like to pretend I'm not inexperienced
And I completely agree with what you said.
1960563
Heh, heh, you certainly aren't to have taken that comment in stride. You'll keep getting better, so don't quit, please.
There's something about this that is oddly adorable, loved it.
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Thank you.
OK, I officially love this!
But, wait! ... I see no second chapter!? This very much deserves a second chapter. And a third and fourth, if you're not too busy...
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Lol... welllllll I'm a very busy pony and wasn't really planning on adding to this, it was a contest submission that I revamped into a story... and it was really only meant to be a one shot. I have debated doing a sequel to this, not really another chapter more of a... kinda following a similar story arch but at a later time. Not sure tho. If I do that, it will most likely be another one shot, just based on this story for a back story.
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Haha, no worries... sequels are totally not madatory.
Seriously, though, thanks for putting this fic out for everyone to enjoy!
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You're welcome.
Really enjoyed it
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Thanks!
2990307No problem
I know this story says complete, but a good story like this deserves a sequel story or another chapter. Please? :-D
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Heh, well I'm in the middle of writing a commission story for someone, however when that is done maybe I'll come back to this.
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Hope u do. Good luck
The ending was a bit rushed, but apart from that, I would love it if you would keep writing this.
Please?
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Well, the ending was a bit rushed to meet the end of a deadline for the contest I entered it in, that's most likely why it didn't win, lol.
I do have plans to continue this but most likely not anytime soon, I've legit not updated a story in a year, lol... a story that was meant to be only for the holidays last year.
Update the story I want it to be longer because even thought I like the story I just feel like it too short
I agree 3147711 . Not too much needed, just a little sequel would be great. This is a cute little story
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I have ideas for move of this story, but unfortunately they are only ideas. I don't have enough to make anymore really. I've thought about it, and tried between the last time someone said I should continue it and now, but I just don't have a story arc to go with.
People please do not advertise other authors in my comment section.
Have you considered a continuing of this story? Cause I have a couple of ideas on how this can be done correctly. good story by the way
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Considered it? Yes, plans to do so, not at this moment. I have a lot, and I mean A LOT of unfinished stories. I'd rather attempt to finish them before starting another project. Between what I already have and To Be Different over on Secret_Shadow's account, I'm all busy, lol.
5191229 Well its okay, this is a nice story feels rushed but nice
5191262 This was actually a contest entry, it was shorter in the actual contest, this is an extended version surprisingly, this was written before I really understood how to write properly that's why its so short, if I were to re-write this now it'd be upwards of 5-6k words.
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So you do have an idea on Expanding it possibly right?
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A bit of an idea yeah, but like I said, probably not for a while, re-writing an already successful story isn't exactly high on my to do list, I have a few projects that most people don't even know about in the works :P
5207845 I wasn't saying rewrite i was saying possible Sequel. if like I can help with some ideas on how the story can continue like this
5208064 I know how I would continue it, I don't really need that much help, thank you though. :)
5211588 Okay, I'm sorry if i'm bugging you. Can't wait to see it when its done