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I have a Nephew who didn't stop wetting the bed until he was 10
strange boy he is.....
Quite an intresting set up so far.
Nice to see some Scootalove.
Wait wait wait! Why did you put this fic in the Dash-Idol/Mentor/Sister group and the Non-Dash group??
>Warning: may contain bedwetting, diaper use and age regression.
>may contain bedwetting
>may
>Implying it was ever not a foregone conclusion that such would come to pass
It's, like, why even bother saying that? As if the reader couldn't figure that out from the synopsis and blinkin' picture.
Writing isn't horrible, but it's very dry and lacks style. Boring, in other words. Your formatting is wonky, with you moving from nice, evenly spaced paragraphs to a minor wall'o'text during Scootaloo and her aunt's conversation. Each speaker should get their own paragraph and the formatting needs to remain consistent.
2572906 It was intended as a pun, and a bit of world building. I'm not sure if the Ponyville schoolhouse even has a gym, but there's lots of room outside for calesthenics :)
2572121 thanks for the feedback.
I definately need to sharpen up my formatting of dialogue; I will work on getting this right in future.
I'm expecting the story to get wetter as it goes on, but I'll try and work on my prose as well.
P.S. story may also contain traces of nuts.
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You do realize you can respond to multiple people in the same comment, right?
>I'm expecting the story to get wetter as it goes on
>P.S. story may also contain traces of nuts.
I... what?
Interesting, I see you have grammar error (even how BAD I am) but not bad
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Nope, I had no idea, but that makes sense. Thanks for the tip.
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Dunno. It wasn't me who added them. Dash will be appearing in future chapters though, so someone is bound to remove it from the Non-Dash folder when that happens.
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Welcome.
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>Interesting, I see you have grammar error (even how BAD I am) but not bad
>Dat grammar
>Dat punctuation
>Dat emphasis
>Dat syntax
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'Nuff said.
2575079 well whoever added this to the Scootaloo group was retarded
2575363 I don't massively care about any of those things unless if I'm trying to impress or make a fic, then I make it as perfect I can (even if it's far from it)
This is a very cute idea, MOAR!
Cute stuff but:
Gymkhana?
MOAR!
2578207 What do I look like, a dictionary? :)
http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/gymkhana
It's a pun, so shoot me.
2580401 Haha my apologies.
2580414 no worries ^_^
I just noticed something. Unless you plan on this story having hardcore 'Adult Baby' related events, then the mature tag is not really necessary.
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It is going to feature some AB related stuff in later chapters. Not anything I'd term hardcore myself, but I'd rather forwarn people than have them complain about it later :P
Fair enough, also you earned a watch and a fave. I just realized that no one is really paying attention to the stories I fave or not
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2586004 Thanks!
We are interested in thy story. An issue many fillys and colts deal with and thou writes with great sympathy for the issue. Thou hast been favourited and We await thy next update eagerly.
Good, good,
Continue
Intresting.
Please do go on.
Good stuff. Do go on.
MOAR!
Fav, but not a like till later chapters.
link to image source plox , i know i've seen it before but i can't seem to find it anywhere now.....
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Here's the original: http://www.furaffinity.net/view/10578287/
3050016 ah much better res , thanks......
Yay another Scootaloo story.
Derp want more.... Derp
Can't wait to see what the next chapter will bring! This was a good chapter!!
Wow....AJ is a bitch
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Agreed
Major cliffhanger, can't wait for the next chap
this was a good chapter and the pacing was good.
But there was one glaring mistake in there...
Orchid is a flower, Orchard is a place full of trees that bear fruit.
3964465 Exactly. As if Rainbow Dash would flood the only place that provides the cider she likes. And now, thanks to Applejack, Scootaloo almost drowned. She's got a lot of apologizing to do.
3966304 uhh...that makes Dash sound a little self centered, it is also one of her friends home and livelyhood!
Cliffhanger man even touches padded stories... damn him.
3966348 One of the reasons why she wasn't loveable in "Bats!" Way to place cider above your friend there Rainbow Dash. I'm sure both Applejack and Fluttershy really appreciate where your loyalty really lies.
3966616 hmmm....you have an excellent point there, ignore what i said previously
Intense cliffhanger. Can't wait for more!
3965254 Whoops, thanks for pointing that out. It's fixed now. I must have been tired when I wrote that part
quick more chapters out
didn't expect scoots to have an aunt, but glad she's not all on her own.
since this isn't gonna be a scootadption fic, I've no real clue where its going, but looking forward to finding out
very nice.
please continue
what kind of an ending is that? How dare you leave us on a cliffhanger like this.
what's gonna happen to scoots? Will rainbow save her? Will she end up in hospital?
No fair. bring the next chapter out soon!
And curse you for making me sound like a whiny foal!
i wanted my first comment to be "Wow, Aj. that's a bit harsh, isn't it?"
but thanks to that cliffhanger, you can see why it wasn't this