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Mist Shaker
Hi, I'm Mist, just your average American guy, but I live out many of my psychotic fantasies in my works. So... now you know about me... let's know more about you.
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can't really say anything for now, gotta wait for more chapters. so far everything is OOC. ponies doesnt use violence, doesn't have guns, and in no fricking way would celestia let anypony experiment on element users.
1959083 This is an alternate reality in which the elements were never made. Also Celestia is a high ranking official not a goddess and will do anything to protect her people so she does allow it. Should have put that in description sorry.
This is definitely interesting so I'll watch to see what happens.
I am intrigued as to where this will go. I'll be watching this with interest...
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Stupid question: Is Alex Mercer going to play a part in this fic?
2289860 A little cameo moment in the next chapter and the final chapter (last one may not occur so be warned.)
Interesting. Not the best and not the worst prototype crossover I have read, but it is definitively interesting. I will wait for more.
2557314 I still have school but over summer I will try to produce more chapters
2557326 So probably for now.
Not horrible. MAKE MOAR!!!!
2557329 seriously man, i think if you could have kept it going it would have been great, tell you what, I will gladly step in as your co-writer and help you finish this. just send me the details and what you had planned for each chapter and the number of chapters desired. if it doesn't work out, then we could try a different approach, besides being a co-writer could help me get some practice.
3419968 Cool man thanks.
3419977 any time just let me know where you left off and give me the details, that is if you want me as a co-writer
3419981 I sent you a PM that should answer your question.
Huh.....
3424351 I'm confused as to the purpose of this comment.
3424351 basically what this part of this story is doing is it's running along the lines of the first prototype game. I should know because ive played it. Alex Mercer's first action was to attempt to evade detection but we added our own little twist to it.
3424607 if this is true and we begin to get more we will need to get chapter 4 out soon. I believe that the way we worked together last night would be more efficient since we would be able to share our ideas and work at the same time instead of sending the work back and forth.
3425225 it's a way of saying he's confused, befuddled, or any term In the middle that would describe confused.
Spike grew spikes..... bahahahaha!
A great chapter. While I was only able to play prototype 2 along with a small portion of the first one, I was still able to understand the story for the most part although the fight scene in the open supermarket store was hard to keep up with simply because reading it felt fast-paced and I felt like reading it as such. However a re-read over it helped me to understand what happened. I would recommend putting more detail into the fight scenes simply because one that just describes the simple actions can leave the reader feeling unsatisfied and feeling like the fighter were flailing about, no matter how awesome the scene seems. There were one or two very confusing parts such as
where it could have easily been expanded upon to give the story a richer feeling to it but it also restates an already known fact in a way that just seems silly. For example you two could have written something like "Just then a repeated clicking demanded my attention as the weapon I had been using ran out of ammunition, and no sooner had this happened when I was brought to the floor in a pile as well as the others. still don't quite understand what happened at the pile part but oh well.
Haha I think this is the first time I've seriously commented on a story. Anyway, you've done a great job so far you two so I look forward to more great chapters or maybe some other collab stories in the future.
Oh and sorry if this comment is really long, I just got a bit carried away.
perfect.
needs editing though...some of the text is redundant or hard to follow
3430016 Would you like to edit?
Good job
although as Night_Moon said some of it is redundant. 
3430634 saddly, i do not have the time...
3431100 Okay.
I am going to find a Proofreader though.
3425225 I know, I've finished both of them
3424607 There is no purpose!!
3432395 My friend, there is always purpose, when you do something whether you think it has no purpose, it is there, hidden from plain sight, hidden from the mind. You just have to seek it out.
3428876 Hey, thanks for dropping the comment on that, it was the best thing I could think of but as co-author I have no real rule over how the story plays out. In the end, I just try to make the ideas flow while still giving my own to the owner of this story, and most of them successful in adding to the excitement, the fighting did however progress in detail and will continue to do so.
1959083 While in a story that is not crossed with a video game, such as [PROTOTYPE], a very awesome game, that would be true, but in this, the relationship is flipped upside down whereas the relationship between the elements is still intact. This is just our version of [PROTOTYPE], so we have our own ideas and we manage to make them fit as we expect them to, but I understand what you are saying.
3437127 Fuck that, I do shit without reason all the time.
epic still
3437347 I respect this.
good chapter
3666245 Really?
3666269 yeah i like prototype and like seeing this twist of it
3666323 Cool. What has been your favorite part so far?
3666332 when the ripped apart the juggernaut this is one of my favorite storys
3666367 I'm.... I'm honored to be honest. I never had a person complement me like that before,
3666375 your welcome for the complement i like encouraging people to help them do better i don't write story though i like to just read them
3666411 I know that feel.
3666423 thx for the chat i got to play a game with a friend bye
Now now, let's not forget the one that helped you get it back up off the ground.
Decent Prototype crossover. Check. Decent writing. Check. Favorite. Check.
awesome but you need to improve length of chapters just a little bit
I THINK I found a Rainbow Factory Easter egg
Sorry for the short chapter, we just got in a bit of a hurry to update it to show that we haven't forgotten about it, but thanks for reading.
4278540 Would you like to point it out?
4279092 about halfway trough chapter 7