Prologue
A Change of Heart
Prologue
Written by Seven81493
Edited by Miss Dark Angel
Waking up after a nightmare is one thing. But waking up after a nightmare and realizing you’re in a mysterious forest? That was on a whole other level of crazy. But for a changeling named Kishin, that was life. He had just woken up in what he quickly recognized as a forest. But where it was in relation to the hive, he had no idea of. What he did have an idea of was to explore the forest, and see if he couldn’t find his way out.
Before he started his journey though, he noticed that his disguise was gone, and instead replaced by his normal form, that of a chitin covered changeling. He let out a sigh upon looking at his back.
“Still no wings...” he thought to himself, “at least I have my magic...”
Unlike every other changeling he had seen, he lacked a pair of wings. The lack of flight had increased his magical capacity though, and he was grateful for that. But he had had enough pondering, and quickly brought up his disguise. Aqua coat, bright yellow mane, and a unicorn horn. There was one problem though. He was a mare, and that was all he could transform into. Letting out another sigh, he started his journey forwards.
But as luck would have it, he came to a clearing almost instantly. On the other side, he could see a lifesaver. A village, though small, had a variety of odd buildings. One looked like a carousel, another a gingerbread house, and yet another looked like it was built into a tree. He decided to stop by the treehome first, as it looked the most promising. So he began making his way across the clearing, but after a few moments noticed a pony coming his way.
She was lavender in color, and it eventually went off in his mind. He was looking at Twilight Sparkle, the Element of Magic, and she was staring right back at him with intensity in her eyes.
“Hello.”
The word startled him, and he realized that while he had been thinking, she had closed the gap between them.
“Um, hi,” was the only response he could think of at the moment.
“What’re you doing out here, miss? It’s dangerous.”
“I, um... it looked like fun? What about you?”
“I was just going to my friend’s hut.”
He watched as Twilight tilted her head in confusion, and her mouth fell wide open upon noticing his tail, which he had forgotten to disguise.
“Don’t come any closer, changeling...”
The last word shocked him, and he turned around, trying to high-tail it away from the smart mare. Eventually, he reached the edge of the forest and ran inside, not caring about the dangers that lurked deep within.
Kishin kept up his pace and eventually he couldn’t hear her hoof-steps anymore, so he decided to stop and take a look at his surroundings. All he could see was a bunch of trees, and a small cave to the east.
Against his better judgement, he made his way to the cave and, upon entering, realized it was much larger than the entrance made it seem. But hey, he wasn’t complaining. He had a place to sleep for a while, and it was warm, too. But there was one thing that threw him off. Where was that blue glow coming from?
After a few seconds, he found this out in the form of a claw swatting him into the wall of the cave. He quickly realized that he was in the cave of an Ursa Minor, and that meant trouble. Another swat sent him flying to the other side of the cave, and it made his disguise dissipate entirely. He quickly made his way to his hooves, though, and fired off a bolt of magic at the enraged minor.
The bolt hit its target, but all it did was tick the creature off further. Instead of attempting to hurt it again, Kishin simply hauled his flank to the exit of the cave. As he reached it and tried to squirm through, he noticed a familiar blob galloping towards him. He was having trouble getting free though, and it seemed he was done for. But within seconds, the pony reached him, and grabbing his hoof, pulled him out just as a large blue paw swiped at the entrance. The mare let go of him, and he fell to the ground in exhaustion.
As he slowly breathed away his panic attack, the lavender mare spoke up, saying, “So this is where you galloped off to.”
“I... thought... the cave... was... empty...” replied the out of breath Kishin.
To his surprise, the pony he had despised for so long held out her hoof to him. He grabbing it obligingly, and she helped pull him up.
“My name is Twilight Sparkle. What’s yours?”
“Kishin,” came the dejected response. “But why did you follow me in here? If it’s so dangerous, why not let me go in and die? I am your enemy after all.”
“Well first, I just wanted to see why a changeling would be lurking near Ponyville by itself.”
Kishin nodded, “I was flung here by your brother and his bride.”
“That’s what I figured, but I wanted to be sure. But then I came here and saw you injured, and felt kind of bad.”
“But why feel bad?” questioned Kishin, “Why not just leave me here?”
“Because leaving a hurt pony to die is wrong, no matter what that pony has done to you.”
For the first time in a long time, Kishin was able to manage a small smile.
“Thank you for your assistance.”
“You can thank me after Fluttershy is done fixing you up.”
Before he could protest, she grabbed his hoof and started dragging him towards the town. Too weak to put up his disguise, all he could think of was what everypony would think when they saw him.
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Heh. This will be interesting....
1838254
geze that's a fast post...
story seems interesting, tracking now
1838258 Yours wasn't even a minute after his
1838254 I hope you'll enjoy it, seeing as the character is named after you
1838284
P3rro should hurry up with all those people he's going to recommend this story to...
1838284
well I originally wasn't going to comment (figured it was the author, aka you) until I saw it was indeed someone else. If this was a western showdown, it would be like he killed everyone in the blink of an eye
1838294 Yeah, but he's offline on here and the Xbox, so I'll have to wait till tomorrow for him to do it. I didn't even have to ask, it's great!
1838296
I did what now?
1838309
you never seen a "old west" movie before?
1838294>>1838299
What was that now? Me hurry??? I'm a goddamn stoner and you expect me to be fast?
Naw, just kidding. It's up now, just I'm being damn sleepy.
1838411
This should be an interesting read.
Tracking now.
Wait a second. If Fluttershy is going to fix him up, going toward the town is counterproductive -- unless at that moment they're on the opposite side of town. Or did she finally get an office in town?
But pay no attention to me. I'm too intrigued by the idea of a changeling with severe limitations on changing. (Why can't I think up stuff like that?)
1838473 Hehe, well she's not at her house right now, she's at someone elses
1838461 Thank you, good sir!
1838498 NP, your idea of a changeling that has issues changing is an uncommon one. And from what I've seen they tend to become decently popular. And the character is named after one of my favorite authors.
1838513 Well him and I are friends, so I asked and he said it was fine
1838517 Ah, that explains that. Well I look forward to the next chapter. And I greatly hope that you get featured.
1838254 Agreed. That it will, Epic Santa hat-Wearing Changeling...That it will.
1838522 Thanks, man!
short, but i see promise in this.
also, stick with the short chapters, it means more frequent updates
1838571 Heh, well the max any chapter of mine has ever been was 3000 words. Only reason I hit higher was by combining chapters
1838496
I knew there had to be a logical explanation.
Wow.....normally I really hate OC fics because they are done very, very bad but this was really very impressive and I always had a lot of respect for changlings so I will follow this and stalk (cough, cough) I mean Watch you, though remember that it's always a capatial (spelled that wrong) e and m in Element of Magic or even other of the five even more so for Elements of Harmony.
I like this, though even though I don't mind Twi being with an OC as opossted (DAMN IT!) to Rarity or Rainbow Dash, I'm really hoping for a new romance, maybe Fluttershy this time if you will?
Long as this does not have any Spike/Rarity in it (DESPISE THAT PAIRING) sorry but it's true, then I'll stick around, I enjoy where this is going
1838744 Hehe, your comment was amazing! Also, for some reason, I go in and out with capitalizing Element of Magic. Dunno why, I just do. Thanks, and I hope you enjoy the pairing I pick
1838411 A smoking Rarity, Ham? I hate Rarity personally but I approve of the smoking on your pic
1838753 You... hate her?
She's so misunderstood...
1838750 I'm just a fan bro, nothing special
And it happens, no worries
I'm really hoping I do as well, let me know if you need any help, ideas or advice, I got your back
1838756 She used her little sister and her friend as slaves to carry her shit around the woods, granted Trixie did the same to Snips and Snails but she's a villian so that's understandable.
1838828 If you had people willing to carry a fuckload of stuff for you, wouldn't you let them?
1838832 Sweetie did not have much of a choice though, it was forced on her and Scoots just wanted something to keep her away from the nightmares for a while, and not if I was treated as a slave bro, also awesome pic of Sweets (my personal favorite of the CMC
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And I'm hoping you'll like my stories if you ever have the chance to look over them
1838841 Look at the blog I just posted
I am waiting for this story to be great………
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…because it's going to be awesome…
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…I lied… it's already super-ultra-extreme-awesomazing.
1838753>>1838756
You don't like Rarity huh? MFW:applejack.ponychan.net/chan/files/src/135616544638.jpg
I hate Rarity also but if she came to me with a fat, pregnant blunt...I'll probably love her in multiple ways.
On another note:25.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m708lhQkhK1rxd3zso1_1280.jpg
1839553 Really great pic of Spike, though what does MFW stand for? And eh, I guess I understand that. Nope, I don't clop
And Hay Weed seems like a great name for the good stuff as Dieased Stallion seems like a great name for cigarettes, don't you think for the land of Equestria?
You make sure to immediately establish, both in the summary and the story, that the protagonist has three peculiar qualities: He has no wings, his magic is strong, and he can only turn into females. However, we learn very little of what the protagonist is like as a person. Why has he decided on a specific transformed identity? You've given no hint of a reason for it. What does he like to do? We have no idea. Why does he hate Twilight Sparkle? He describes her as "the pony he had despised for so long", implying that this hate has existed since before the apparently-recent wedding invasion.
Why can't the protagonist transform into males? Will it be important to the story that he can't? It seems like the disability only exists to make him unique. Will there be a ton of stallions that he'll want to transform into? Is it just a way to have him take female disguises instead of male ones? Then you could just have the character be female. Will gender or the crossing of gender lines be important to the story?
Holy fuck, I just realized that Kishin is in the story!
1839553
Dammit P3rro! Why! First of all the last thing you ask me over X-box is, "If Luna just appeared in your room, would you fuck her?" The answer by the way is maybe. Second, that picture of Applejack just made my day!
1842556 Well his kind hate harmony. Also, all will be explained, it's called patience.
So... I gather the Ursa Minor isn't going to keep coming out of that cave and stomp a magic-shooting changeling into paste? (Guess the bear is really tired to keep being annoyed for very long?) The seemingly limitless compassion, or at least forgiveness, for all beings was a bit of a shocker coming from Twilight; most authors put her squarely in the "squash ;em like the bugs they are" camp. I mean, she was in Canterlot not too long ago, beating up dozens of drones, then helping Cadenza/Shining Armor set off the Love Nuke. Still, if anyone would be offering the olive branch of friendship, it would be her although Rarity would be my second choice however, the rest of the mane 6 would try to curbstomp our new changeling, flee and call the guards, or do something else equally unpleasant (Pinkey Pie is random so she doesn't count). Twilight should probably not show the strange changeling to her brother and sister-in-law, they might have a far worse reaction... To. The. MOON!
Actually, now that I think about it. The changelings didn't really do anything to Ponyville, did they? It was all in Canterlot-- until the Love Bomb blew them all to hell and shot a few drones over the town like bad fireworks. Should be interesting to see how the town ponies react to the news if all they know are here-say, rumors, and whatever propaganda is in the local newspaper (lies, bigger lies, and damned lies). Ahhhh yes, the famous Official Ponyville Welcoming Ceremony. Ponies flee for their life, slamming doors, shuttering windows, welcome mats hastily hidden, and perhaps a token tumbleweed blowing across the suddenly abandoned streets with a lone falcon screech in the distance. Makes you feel right at home, doesn't it? Heh heh.
I also could not help but notice that the story seemed to speed up faster at the end. Maybe it's just me? You started out with plenty of narrative and descriptions but when we get to the running away from Twilight, it felt so... rushed? I really don't want to tell you how to write because I'm certainly no author and the one I did write is juvenile mental masturbation to describe it in any sort of a favoring light (It was a long time ago, don't judge me! Heh)
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Go on.
DAMN IT how did you find out!!!!!!!!
Gah!!!!
Time for a new damn name.......
Oh and nice first chapter I really was stupid to not change my tail........
1928276 Haha, as soon as I saw you had this favorited, I laughed my ass off!
1928669
Summer Breeze Comedic genius
Buh bum Tiss