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:rainbowlaugh: This is good! you should make a sequel or something :pinkiehappy:

genious ending :rainbowlaugh:

Loved this, but it doesn't warrant a sequel because that would ruin its splendor :pinkiesmile: The only thing I found wrong with it was the
Oh god the grammar, it burns, BUUUURNS!
If you want, I could fix some obvious mistakes in the grammar, but it might be a waste of time considering it hasn't gained enough popularity to make the front page...shame :trixieshiftleft:

Needs a bit of touching up in places:

"Yes you highness?"

"Yes, your Highness?"

and also

Well have tried?

Well have you tried?

and one more

But then I heard stories you know.

You can put y'know if you want...

But then I heard stories y'know?

Don't get me wrong, I liked it and have given a like :rainbowkiss:

Pretty decent, I almost couldn't get the story but it was good enough to entertain me... :ajsmug:



the guy was just standing around while he watched the wedding rehearsal.

You can take yourself and your fanscy grammar to the dungion!

What terrible thoughts one must think just to keep a straight face.

1535089 Don't you use yer fancy mathematics to mudder the issue :ajbemused:

The position of the guard is a particularly unfortunate one in fantasy literature - it's mostly to look intimidating and then die fighting either the villain or the hero, depending on who you work for.

There is a group made by me called The Royal Guards where you can show off great stories like this.

Found two smaller mistakes while reading.
"There so many stories.of mares" A little period have sneaked itself in here
"So much.much hate." And here

It needs some proofreading (which I would be happy to do), but it was a good story.

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