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StripyFlash
Hey there. Friendship is Magic is a pretty cool show, eh?
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Not gonna dislike or like. I just didn't really find it to be a good read. It felt too rushed and generic.
>rape
A Twiliestia where the feeling isn't enjoyment isn't mutual, I like.
... Damn.
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dammit sapphire
very rushed, celestia felt extremely out of character without any explanation, and the structure hurts.
explain why celestia acts the way she does (in the story, not only to me in the comments) and separate your paragraphs; that would do a great deal.
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she's molestia
+ i indented paragraphs
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then heavily hint towards that in the description/story or something, until you actually give an explanation or somehow tell us that she's not "normal" right now she's still extremely out of character.
It's The Grand galloping Gala
Standing
Even Molestia calls Twilight her Most Faithful Student.
See episode 26 of season 2, Celesti's magic is white
I would believe she would be more embarrassed then having feels of alienation
And that's all
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i apologise i didn't revise on my pony lore before trying to write this epic
1518606 I'm still reading and editing my first post, and i'm only pointing out the major flaws.
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don't worry i've rectified it
now your immersion won't be spoiled
however i didn't change 'stood' to 'standing' as i've been told this is already proper grammar
oh and purple magic is sex magic i mean surely that's obvious ohohoho completely intentional
i was going to use embarrassed but alienated is a pretty word
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ironic i cut the only line that established it
mistake on my part i suppose
**i edited the line back in, now everyone is happy
interesting hope you continue or write a sequel
1518631 sorry to be like this but, Alienate: (1) To cause to become unfriendly or hostile; estrange. (2) To cause to become withdrawn or unresponsive; isolate or dissociate emotionally (the other two I found don't apply)
It's not about sounding pretty, it's about using words properly. (my editor also get on my back about this)
How about, Abashed: To make ashamed or uneasy; disconcert
not bad i enjoyed it
That is all.
a little rushed
neither going to like or dislike
I had a feeling this had Molestia in it......
But i dont know if like or dislike....
I don't get why people think it is a necessity to post what they view as complex words in their stories
1518362 [with this guy.]
Well, there were enjoyable parts, but I have to join to those, who have spoken before me, I felt i was reading something for the sixty minutes challenge, too rushed and short. But anyway, I do hope that you will continue it eventually, because I like Molestia
1518448 dito man dito
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I too agree you should rethink your strategy
I hate Molestia.
Terrible.
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i agree
this was just a test and well
there you go.
very good sir
i just read this out loud over steam voice to a friend who requested it. It was glorious, and terribly pride shattering
A dose of rape everyday keeps the doctor away... wait, I think this'll actually work.
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tell your friend he has an astute taste in literature and i approve of this
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I kinda liked it
W-what the...what the hell did I just read?!
THE HELL!!
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i'm not sure
could you describe what it was like?
I guess I should have explained myself morn...It. Was...AWESOME
The clop was fine. But the story is full of stupid. Dom Celestia is nice, but OOC Celestia is not.
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not out of character for molestia hyuk hyuk
Good story (for now) godd use of rape and good use of CLOP (IM NOT A CLOPPER) But im kind of
I dunno if i like it or not is weird but good
This is awesome!
for porn that was awesome for clop that was good but disturbing for my little pony that was just wrong
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'fraid so
Molestia so FORCEFUL
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Yes.
Yes she is.
Kill me. Kill me now. I hate it when Molestia forces Twi into sex.
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you love it really
1915400 If I didn't why would I have read it? xD Seriously though. In my brain this almost passed the line into insanity. Still amazing though.