• Published 12th Oct 2012
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Earth and Sky - Metal Pony Fan



Rainbow Dash stays at Sweet Apple Acres while recovering fom a crash, but AJ's out of town.

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"Mac!" Rainbow Dash stared at the scene before her. One minute, the two had been fighting, rain falling around them from the last remnants of atmospheric magic. The next, there was a burst of purple light and both of them collapsed in a smoking heap. Applejack was there too, she witnessed the scene and rushed in to help the two collapsed fighters.

Rainbow, however, was powerless. She was contained within a magical field and could do nothing but watch and hyperventilate as her friend tried and failed to wake her lover. The confinement and helplessness were eating away at the brightly colored pegasus. She started pounding on the formless, invisible walls of her enchanted prison. "AJ!" She screamed. "GET ME OUT OF HERE!" Tears streamed down her face as she continued beating away at the energies binding her.

Applejack looked around for a moment before finding a discarded sword in the mud. She grabbed it and ran towards the spot were Rainbow was held. "Hold on, Rainbow." She tried to swing the weapon, but the foreign movement proved too much for the farmer and the sword ended up in the mud once more. Not knowing what else to do, the orange pony turned and started kicking away at the forcefield. "Don't ya worry, these things wear down." She was speaking more to herself than to her friend.

"H-how do you know that?" Rainbow pressed herself against the far end of the magical cell so she wouldn't get hit if it collapsed. No, when it collapsed. She couldn't let herself get hurt carelessly, she needs to be able to help Mac once she's freed.

"That fella was helpin' me with the trees." Applejack continued kicking, but her strength was starting to give out. "He was practicin' his magic on some a' the dead ones."

A cold, sinking realization hit Rainbow. "That's why there was an explosion. I-it's all my fault. I jumped to conclusions and Mac tried to protect me. It's all my fault!"

"No! Sugarcube, it ain't." She kicked at the cage again and lost her footing, landing in the mud. "They're alive, that means they can get better."

"How do you know?!" Rainbow didn't mean to snap at her friend, but she did, and it sent the farmer over the edge.

"Ah Don't! Ah don't know the first thing 'bout what happened, but Ah ain't gonna give up just cause Ah'm scared!" With a scream, she put the last of her strength into another kick, but it still made no difference. She turned to face her friend with tears streaming down her face. "Ah'm sorry, Ah can't- Ah'm gonna go get Twilight, she'll know what ta do." She ran off towards town. "Ah'm sorry!"

Rainbow couldn't understand why Applejack would be the one apologizing. It wasn't her fault that-

Movement!

Rainbow looked towards the two fallen fighters. It had just been for a moment and out of the corner of her eye, but there was no mistake, she saw one of them move! "Mac?!"

There was another movement. One of them started to get up. But it wasn't Mac. The strange creature he had been fighting pulled itself up to its feet and started stumbling towards the imprisoned pegasus. He collapsed near the abandoned sword and took hold of it. "Protect him." With a grunt, he threw the sword towards the prison. It passed through the barrier as if there was nothing there. There was pain in his voice as the creature struggled to speak again. "You have to want to protect him."

"I do, I love him, tell me how!"

"AAAUGH!" Purple sparks started dancing across the creatures body, causing him to writhe in agony. "Take it!" He yelled, breathing heavily. "Take the sword! Concentrate on what you want to protect and walk out!"

Without hesitation, she picked up the sword, closed her eyes, and thought about Mac, the time they spent together, and the time they will spend together. She didn't notice the purple glow forming around both the sword and her own body. With a yell, she charged forward, not knowing whether or not she would make it past the barrier.

But she did.

After she had gone several paces, she opened her eyes and spit out the sword. She was free. Now she could get Mac to the hospital. Ignoring the pain in her wing, she flew as quickly as she could to the storage shed and, after a short search, found what she was after. She flew back to the scene of the fight, cargo net in tow, and laid it on the ground next to Mac. She rolled him onto the net as gently as she could and prepared to take off.

"GAAAHH!"

Rainbow stopped at the sound of the creature's scream. She looked over just in time to see him try to get up and collapse. It was her fault that he was hurt too, she couldn't leave him. But she couldn't put him in the net with Mac, not with those sparks coming off of him.

She ran over and clamped her teeth down on the creature's shirt. Then she dragged him over to where the ropes for the cargo net lay. This was going to take everything she had, but she had no choice. She's flown carrying multiple ponies before, she can do this. She took the ropes in her hooves and started flapping her wings for all she was worth. She slowly managed to lift herself into the air, then the creature, then finally, Big Mac in the cargo net.

With no momentum to help her along, the flight to the hospital was a long and arduous battle against her own screaming muscle, every fiber burning with pain. But she made it. She lowered her cargo safely to the ground at the hospital doors and stumbled through the doorway just in time to pass out.

She woke up hours later in a darkened hospital room. Enough light came in through the window that she could see that she was alone in the room. She could also see that she was hooked up to an I.V. She ripped the needle out of her leg and ignored the protests of her aching body as moved out into the hallway to find Mac. She found him a few rooms down. The door was locked, but she could see him through the window.

Once more, tears escaped her eyes as she placed a hoof against the glass. "You're safe."

"Rainbow!" The colorful pegasus turned to see Twilight walking down the hall towards her. The purple unicorn had a look of concern on her face. "Aren't you supposed to be resting? What are you doing out of- Rainbow! You're bleeding!"

Rainbow looked down to see that she was indeed bleeding from the place where she pulled out the I.V. line. "It's nothing." She wiped the tears from her eyes. "How's Mac?"

"He's fine, it was just a magical overload. He's just sleeping. It's a defense mechanism that all ponies have. He'll wake up when the excess extrakinetic charge wears off." She looked through the window. "I'm more worried about Dragon, as far as I can tell, he doesn't have the same defense mechanism. And on top of that, his body is still adjusting to the presence of magic." She sighed. "It's probably a good thing that this happened early, while his body is adjusting, but we can't be sure."

"And it's all my fault."

Twilight put a hoof on her friend's shoulder in an unsuccessful attempt to comfort her. "Rainbow, I heard what happened, and I can assure you, no one thinks that."

Rainbow let her head fall forward to the glass in front of her. "They should." She turned and started walking away.

"And where d'ya think yer goin'?"

"Granny." Rainbow turned to face the newest addition to the hallway. "I'm sorry, I never meant for-"

"Shut yer trap, little missy." The pale green apple matriarch walked over to Rainbow and delivered a solid whack to her head. "That colt protected ya, didn't he? Then what happened was his own choice. Now think about how he's gonna feel if he wakes up and yer not there."

"But, Granny-"

Rainbow's objections were silenced by another whack to the head. "The only but 'round these parts betta be yers walkin' inta that room with a git well soon card." Granny stormed off with one final statement. "Ya've got five minutes ta get one."

Five minutes later found Rainbow in the room at Mac's bedside. She had been unable to find a card, but walking back to the hospital, she found something that would do the job just as well, a vibrant, rainbow-hued assortment of flowers. The florist was even able to find a light blue vase to put them in. Rainbow made sure to set them up so that Mac would be able to see them should he wake up after visiting hours ended.

"I'm sorry," Rainbow said to the sleeping workhorse, taking a seat by his side, "I was going to leave, Mac. I didn't stop to think about how you felt and I was just going to leave." She laid her head down on his chest, listening to the steady rise and fall of his breath. "I thought you would be upset. Actually, I thought you should be upset. Granny beat some sense into me though. I thought about what she said and I've decided that I'm going to wait until you can tell me yourself. And I want you to know that I'm going to wait right here until they kick me out." She sighed. "I know you can't hear me, buI also want you to know, that you don't have to wait the year. Whenever you ask me, the answer's yes."

Rainbow suddenly felt a weight on the back of her neck.

"Ah'll keep that in mind."

Comments ( 40 )

This fic may be over, but the events surrounding Ponyville and are not. Why was Twilight called away? What did Fluttershy mean by complicated? What's going to happen to Wishy Washy? How did Pete lose the ability to fly? All that and more once I finish the rewrites of my fics.

Are you gonna make biscuits? Are you gonna make biscuits? Are you gonna make biscuits???:pinkiecrazy:

Loved this story. Looking forward to reading the other stories, and really looking forward to reading the sequel when you get around to it.

1592466. There are about a hundred chapters already written, I'm just editing and rewriting before posting.

1608083Fluttershy explains her actions in a later chapter. I'm sorry you didn't like the story, but thank you for letting me know why.

1593239 A hundred chapters???? Are they going to be one story, or multiple ones??

Either way, more please!!!!

And now, on to the side story!!!

1667620

Multiple stories, two universes with storylines for each of the mane six and other characters, one was even a pinkie clone story that I wrote three months ago. I guess I was a little slow on the upload.

1667750 So two sets of stories? It might be helpful if you put links to the follow ups in the description, just so we know which ones follow on, or
it could just get very confusing very quickly!!!! :twilightsheepish::twilightsheepish:

1667763Everything I am posting now takes place in the same "universe", I'll put a "2" in front of the titles when I get to the second set. Good idea about the links.

There's a one shot awaiting approval that takes place the day after the preview chapter.

Not bad. Clean, well written, and downright amusing.

You please scootaloo. :scootangel:

1729133Glad you like it.

On a side note, thank you for the first use of a spike 'stache in my comments section. I just had my first regidar comment war on another fic. It's almost like a right of passage or something. An extremely silly one, but one nonetheless.

1732204

Like it? Nono. LOVE it! I look forward to any continuing progressions of this =)

hehe. no problem! I like the stache! I call it my seal of approval :pinkiehappy:
So...here's another!
:moustache:

1736936Then be sure to read spiced cider.:ajsmug::rainbowlaugh:

1736977

can't comment. on my way to read it. :rainbowlaugh:

ok. I was very skeptical when i read that this was a (macindash, bigdash, rainbowtosh?) fic. I would never have thought that they would go even slightly good together. but you....... you are amazing. You took a story that would never have happened in a million years and MADE it happen. Bravo. you are being stalke... i mean watched.

the last 2 chapters confused the hell out of me. i was looking forward to more but ...what the helll is going on? :rainbowhuh: i loved the story up until that. i'm still very confused and i hate time skips

1902354The last chapter is a preview of the sequel, and the one before that is a random prose piece about a trip to the dentist's office. They aren't actually part of the story.

You never explained who Hero was :rainbowhuh:
What's his story (or what was)
Is there an actual sequel to this?
What's with the last paragraph? I had no idea what was happening, how did all that start? :rainbowderp:

1984466No! No! No! A million times NOOOOOO!!!!!

Look at my user name! Metal Pony Fan! I listen to things like Sonata Arctica, Edguy, and Nightwish, I will not write a character that listens to one direction. It is a quote from the band Anberlin.

On a side note, I didn't understand why all my friends had such a problem with One Direction until a few weeks ago, when I heard their music for the first time. I don't mind that others like it, but I don't.

That's besides the point, more music!

On a side note, I'm glad you like the story.

1985803 Yes, there is a sequel(five actually, here's one), a side story( Needs to be fixed)and a prequel(What Happened Last Night). I have a lot written, but the editting and uploading is a little slow as I am in the middle of an overloaded semester, another story(My Little Dragon), and a collaboration that I think will knock people's socks off.

And I thought it was obvious from the description of the character, but Dragon is a human. His story is one of the sequels(Even though it was written first).

OH THANK GOD :yay:
One Direction are gay cock suckers who should go kill themsleves
And do you wanna know the worst thing? My sister plays their shitty music on her surround sound on full blast :pinkiesad2: IT'S TORTURE

Oh and awesome music I LOVE metal :pinkiehappy:


Five sequels??? I want a link to all of them, send me 'em in a PM

1986162Please tone the comment down a little.:fluttershysad:Pwease?:fluttershysad: There's no need for that sort of language. They're not good, but there's no need for insults like that.

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Have thing many to apologise
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2018181If you read What Happened Last Night, you'll see it's a little bit of the other way around. (I just haven't finished rewriting it yet.)

2295049This takes place one year after the story What Happened Last Night. That story will explain the discrepancy. I tried not to overdo it, but I was thinking that her and Rainbow are old friends(almost family in my version of their backstory), and therefore more comfortable around each other(see the rainbow-gets-a-pet episode). And Mac and Pete are buddies. I've seen this a few times in college, when a couple gets wind of a friend getting in a relationship(just starting the relationship, so usually trying to keep it quiet) they tease and do whatever they can to make that friend "go public" with the relationship. I don't get it, but I've seen it happen on three different occasions and five different couples. Also something I've seen, when a shy person is within viewing range of their significant other, they can suddenly become a lot less shy. But they can also revert back as soon as the other leaves the room.

ok wtf was this it just ended im confused it was good but the last three things were...

2331861 The last three things were bonus chapters.

2566203 I should have known someone would bring that up.

I usually give authors a mulligan on the first story they posted--I've seen a lot of authors who noticeably improved between the first and last chapter of said story. However, I'm willing to give this one a solid thumbs-up based on one category: voice. Rainbow and Big Mac speak similarly, since they're characterized as similar ponies, but it's easy to tell which one is speaking, and both speak differently from the side characters.

Since this story is so old, I won't attempt detailed constructive criticism. With that said, there are a few odd structures that detract from your story. For instance, when you're trying to avoid a run-on sentence, you sometimes split information in odd ways that create awkward fragments, e.g. "The volumes weren't in order by book number, but rather by number of pages. Meaning the condensed hospital version was volume one." An easy way to split this without fragments would be to cut out "meaning," whereas a more complex fix might merge that sentence with the one after it and shuffle some information around to create a coherent whole. (This might sound nitpicky, but little shifts can make your writing much clearer and easier to understand.)

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:pinkiehappy:Hey, thanks for the comment, and the advice. It was nice to see a comment on an old story. It lets me know people are still reading them.

I think I've improved a lot sincethis story, and I hope you givemy other stories a chance too. (My Little Dragon is the best of my works so far, in my opinion.:twilightsmile:)

3312697:rainbowhuh:Huh? Were you starting to say, "It is my professional opinion?" It got cut off.

Ok. What the fuck? I just started reading this a few hours ago and I just finished all the chapters. Where do I go bow? Is there a sequel? I swear to God if this is all of it, I will stab you in the neck with a soldering iron.

6548572 First off, I have plenty of soldering irons to stab back with. Second, I'm glad you liked it. It's great to get a comment on an older story. I wrote more, originally, but rewrote this before posting, so the rest is pretty much in first draft form. I may work on it as work slows down after the Christmas season.

6715175 I certainly hope so. There's just not enough good fiction these days (mine included, a lot of it is trash).

6740068 I find that sadly to be quite true. :ajsleepy:

8070392 Means I did my job.

P.S. Holy cow! I wrote this Five years ago?! I have been writing Pony Fanfiction for five years?! What?!

8081854 It was supposed to tie in with another fic, one that is pretty low on the priority list.

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