Only one week ago, a terrifying evil more powerful than Discord, Chrysalis and Nightmare Moon combined, escaped from Tartarus. Much to the surprise of both Princess Luna and Princess Celestia, the Elements of Harmony proved inferior to the power of this monster. Twilight Sparkle and her friends, however, knew of this, but said nothing. They knew that the Elements would draw upon their own life essence and eventually kill them, all for the sake of saving Equestria.
Now that the six most famous Ponies in Equestria, apart from the princesses, are gone, the citizens of Ponyville as well as the two regal Sisters stand by their graves and give them their final farewell.
Author's Note
So... I got the idea for this fic no more than three days ago. I have a damaged wrist so the amount of writing I can do is limited, so I postponed it. Today, however, I said fuck it and sat down for three hours in a row and just wrote!
This is the end result, no editing, no proofreading, I bring to you; My raw work.
Feel free to tear it apart and give me whatever opinions you have on it, be they good or bad. I just ask of you: If you want to comment, then do so in a polite manner. I don't want to read comments like "OMG THIS SUCKS!".
And when(yes, when not if) you find any mistakes or have any suggestions as to how It could be made better.
Be. Brutally. Honest!
Cover Art is 'Bitter Sea of Regrets' in DeviantArt by Karnella
Edit - 03/04 2013
I am starting to regret writing this... It is so bad 
why, oh why, did I ever think this was a good idea?
BRAVO
BRAVO
That was beautiful!
Ahh now for my daily dose of tears
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I'm glad you liked it ^^ It's my first time writing a fanfiction so I had my doubts of how well it would be received by 'the audience'. So again, thanks
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If it brought you to tears then my job here is done
1413160 Well for your first time you've certainly done a much better job then me! It's very well wrote and i'm never brought to tears this easily!
Spike barely got any attention. Not from his crush, not from his closest fucking family. Sorry for the language, but that's bullshit. A lot of so-called bronies really seem to think his existence doesn't even matter.
OMG THIS SUCKS!
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Spike has no real importance in this story other than handing the note to Celestia, which is why he barely got any attention.
But now that you mention it, I do reckon I kinda forgot him with Twilight..
hehe... Woops
Thanks for bringing it to my attention :)
I may rewrite it in the future and give Spike some more love :>
Dang it you.......you made me cry............how dare you write such a sad, wonderful, story......good job
This is the only story that has ever brought me to tears. Bravo.
This could use a tad of editing I think. For instance, when you describe people who are dead/gone the past tense is appropriate:
Example
“And last, but not least, Twilight Sparkle, the element of magic and the protégé of my dear sister
;.once, Six yearspastago, she arrived hereonin Ponyville without the shadow of friends or even the faintest hint of what true friendship was, or felt like. It was onthisthat day that she met five other ponies, the ones that would soon be known as the other elements of harmony. Of all the ponies I have met in my long? life, sheiswas by far the truest of friends. While sheiswas the embodiment of magic, she alsoholdsheld the other aspects. She’swas honest about her feelings, as well as loyal to her friends and those shecarescaredforabout. Twilight Sparkle was a pony that wasnot onlyknown for her intelligence, but she was also incredibly kind and loving. I ask you all to remember her, not for what she did, but for who she was.”** in a couple of places i've rephrased it a tad, since it seemed a little stilted.
It just reads funny if you try and place it in the present
No story, not even My Little Dashie has brought me to tears. I'm crying. This is sadder then My Little Dashie.
You, sir, are a genius. Keep writing. Faved, Liked, and i'm tracking you. This is beautiful...the most beautiful story I ever read.
Bravo.
This story brought me the closest as Ive ever been to crying manly tears. Good show.
1413253 No real importance?? Forgive me, but in the grand scheme of things he has more importance than Sweetie Belle and the Apple family. Twilight hatched him in the same event that gave them all their cutie marks, they're his only family, and he was always Twilights link to the princess, so even if he isn't as important to the other ponies as their specific relatives, he's stil important to all six of them (quantity over quality). I'm glad you acknowledge that oversight that thousands of bronies seem to make, but how you left him out in the first place is beyond me. Does everyone else REALLY hate him that much?
Right now Spike is probably standing at the funeral completely dumbfounded by the fact that he wasn't acknowledged by his friends in their final words from the afterlife. Next, he will suffer crippling depression from seeing they never truly cared he was part of their lives, and he will lose any will to make friends. And the sad part is: anyone thinking completely objectively and logically can see that that is most likely what will happen.
Well, congrats Kapuchu...you made me cry, darn it! But, good work. One thing I noticed...The sun gad gone down (I believe you meant The sun had gone down) But again...oh screw it... *Goes and gets a mop to get my tears...* Thank you...You reminded me to feel.
Thumb up for you, this was a nice story to read.
Very well done Brony. Good job.
While this was a touching and heartfelt story, not to mention well handled, I believe some more editing could turn this into a truly amazing story.
Its a story i'll have to read later i cant seem to dp it right now
The concept is not bad... But seriously, you need to have someone look over your stories next time before you hit the submit button. There are some parts where the grammar made me want to pound my head against a wall.
Many manly tears have been shed today and to this story
that is how my face evolved while reading the story
amazing job
1413253 but to be fair, in the show, Spike was kissed by Rarity, His own Crush 2 times in the same episode (Secret of My Excess) and Twi is his closest family.
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While I appreciate comments and enjoy getting feedback, yours is one of the comments I feel tempted to delete. Not because you criticise me, heck I would be a hypocrite if I deleted comments because I was criticized, I ask for it, but because your comment is utter useless. I KNOW that I make mistakes; My native language is not English, and while that is not an excuse it is enough to justify errors.
The main reason why I honestly feel tempted to delete your comment is, as I metioned before, because it is useless. You point out the fact that I have some errors, but not what kind or where they are. That would help me, your comments does nothing but whack me in the head.
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WHAT THE HELL IS WRONG WITH YOU!!!?
Heh, kidding :P But seriously... How the BUCK did my third grade story make you cry, when a first grade story like My Little Dashie did not? O_O
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You're most welcome ^^
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It could indeed, which is why I plan to look through it in the next couple of days. I also need to add spike to the speeches... I kinda forgot him xD (Major bummer
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I have had that problem with past and present tense in 'speaking' for quite some time, and I can't seem to get rid of it. I just want to ask; Was the paragraph you quoted the only one? Or are there more. Feel free to point out if there's anything else, I really do want to become better and what better way than getting my mistakes shoved into my face 
Thank you kindly
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I don't hate spike
It's just that I simply forgot about him... Completely... utterly... forgot about him xD
Don't worry, I'm in the middle of rewriting right now; fixing both grammar issues and the Spike issue
1416575
You don't have to do it right now... You can always do it later
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I'm still sad that you killed them off, but that's how the story goes. 
The whole stars thing is pretty, if a little odd. I think you might be able to use this as a starting point for another story if you wanted too -- this would be hard on both princesses.
I didn't look too deeply, I just highlighted the example I saw first. There could be more or not, no idea.
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I am having trouble with extended stories... I'm currently trying my luck with both a Vinyl&Octavia sad/romance & a Human-story.
But yeah... That's how the story goes :P
And I did go through the entire story and fixed what I found, added some more too even. You may want to re-read to find it
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I have to ask though...
Why do you think the stars thing is odd?
I had planned on making Luna create six new stars, but to be it seemed better for them, not Luna, to leave something behind for people to remember them by.
I cannot state how much I loved this. It is just long enough and doesn't run on. I never cry as an odd personality trait but you got me close and so I congratulate you and drawing out the feelings in your words. Good show my friend.
I believe this song is appropriate...
This was very nice, and yet very saddening. I did feel my eyes gloss over, even if I didn't necessarily cry. Nonetheless, I really liked it. The writing was very nice and added to the somber feel of the funeral and the entire story. However, I do feel like I need to say something.
While this was a good story, this isn't something I haven't seen before. While it's often more of one pony dying, I've still seem something where all the ponies have died, and everyone's grieving. Actually, now that I've think about it, there are some parts that aren't unoriginal, like their ghosts acknowledging their loved ones and the citizens. That was nice, as well as explaining how they died so nobly (Hmm. Maybe showing something of what happened to them to defeat the creature would have been enticing enough to add to it, but that's not my point here). It's just the plot of the story that's been done before. However, everything was performed extraordinarily, so that isn't too bad.
I'm so not asking for you to make a masterpiece or anything, because what was given was fine enough. I gave it a thumbs up, you know; I liked it. It's simply that this isn't anything that's been read before in a small way. But otherwise, nicely done.
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Thank you for the nice comment
I know the concept of the story is kind of cliché. The entire idea started as me seeing Luna giving a speech to the Citizens of Ponyville, I build more on it as time went on. One day I simply sat down in three-four hours in a row and made this in one go.
I do plan on remaking it slightly based on some feedback I got from a few proof readers, this would hopefully get rid of a few things that doesn't fit in very much.
i cried just reading the beginning
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I'm Sorry
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two words, damn you
nice your mission is accomplish
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Okay then.
Well, to be honest, I am under the impression that the back-story here would be far more interesting to read. As it stands, this really just feels like sad-porn, especially since the details you do offer about the past aren't terribly specific, or interesting. While you do articulate a great deal about the Element's relationships in the time skip, most are fairly predictable, and not very unique. Furthermore, there is almost nothing about how the central conflict that led to their deaths shaped the ponies that are still alive, so it is hard to relate this to anything more than just the sadness of death, and even that isn't given much depth. While this is all very understandable given the situation in which you wrote the story, I would definitely try to revise the story to explore at least one aspect unique to the story you are creating. A threat that is beyond the power of the elements could be a very interesting concept, and describing this threat through the memories of those who are still alive could give the story far more dramatic weight. Additionally, the deaths of all of the Elements have many implications in the lives they affect. If there was more articulation on how their friends and family are living now, then the deaths would feel more significant. As it stands, we are only shown that the ponies are sad, and the mane cast is in attendance for much of the funeral. This means that the loss feels superficial, and it is hard to invest in the drama. Also, Celestia's few lines are very out-of-character. Even though she is completely distraught, I don't think she would be that petulant. It is not a large section, but it had a severe impact on the tone of the scene.
I am sorry to be so negative, but I hope you find something useful in my comment.
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I can see your point, and reading your arguments, I can agree. However, I would like to stress that this was my first attempt at a fanfiction. Ever.
The original idea was simply Luna holding a speech, I needed a setting, and I attempted a sadfic. It sort of felt natural.
I've had many people say that I need more background to it, and while I agree, I probably won't write a background to it. Simply because I can't. Yet, at least. I'm still practising my writing. And as far as writing goes, I feel that 'Fond Memories' exceed 'Farewell' in so many ways. Both in terms of dialogue but also prose, gramma and more. Much of that is due to my editors, whom I thank for helping me with that one.
'Farewell' didn't have any editors, I only looked through it myself, and got little to no external feedback.
All in all: I can see what you mean, and I don't take offense of you being negative. Afterall, I did ask people to be brutally honest
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I am glad to see that I did not offend.
Good luck on any future works!
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Thank you
already got a few rough ideas, just need to find, or make, one that catches my fancy enough to get a full oneshot or, perhabs, story out of.
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Thanks... I guess I didn't want to sleep anyways...
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Looking back on this story... I agree with this comment.
Without the "just kidding" <.<
I look at it and I'm tempted to delete it 'cause it's so bad xD
A few minutes ago I finished Power Surge, which got me all super excited.
but happy 
in the same time! So many feels in one evening!
This just made me all sad
It`s not easy to get me emotional during a story but near the ending I had genuine tears in my eyes.
Another fave! Awesome story, beautiful!
The emotions I was going through:
I cried from the beggining of the story and the end of the story
until equestrias end.