This story is a sequel to Ori And The Dragon In The Blind Forest
Taking place months after Spike was called by the Spirit tree to save the forest of Nibel, Spike has been becoming quite used to his new life. But he still feels worried as he has now become a hybrid of a dragon and Spirit guardian, and he feels afraid that he may lose himself. His fears of losing himself may come to be. because after he, Ori and they're new little sister Ku go on a flight, they are separated from him from a storm. Spike and Ori awaken in a new land called Niwen and they go on a journey to find Ku and save this new land from a terrifying threat.
Meanwhile the main 6 and two dragons, Garble and Smolder are sent to Nibel to try to find they're missing friend, while Garble is seeking to make up for what he did, with his sister Smolder seeking to help as well. but this may all come down when they see that Spike and Ori are out in a new dangerous place and they fear they all may never get they're chance to see him again...
Good start on this sequel & glad you had Spike go though his molt before the adventure started!
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Have you played this game and if so what do you think of it?
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Sadly I haven't played it yet, gonna have to pick it up.
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you should it's only 30 bucks but it is amazing as a game
Once more into the breach for Spike/Ori it seems, not a fan of Spike's new wings getting damaged so early on though, hope that changes soon!
On the Equestria side I really hope they can get to where Spike is soon & that the dragon sibs can get to meet him & maybe Garble/Spike bury the hatchet.
Spike could try and redeem Shriek like he did Kuro, or maybe ku could start a friendship with her those are always missed opportunities with fanfic writers.
Loving this so far!
As for when Garble/Smolder should meet with Spike maybe just before they find Ku, more claws on board for the upcoming perils would be nice.
Are you finishing the other story before this? Because it's fine if you are.
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yeah it's only a few more chapters before facing Drek, i'll be done by the end of the week, then i'll get back on this, i just think it's best i focus on one at a time without burning myself out you know?
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Ok, just asking.
Ooh, that sounds like an interesting story for Spike's next adventure. Go for it!
Just to let you know, Ku is a girl.
Are you continuing this?
yes i am, i'm just busy with my ninja turtles story, i'll update it when i can okay?
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Hey Dragonfan, glad to hear you're feeling better & sweet chapter today! Also it seems Smolder & CO are getting closer to our heroes, nice!
update?
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I'm really busy with my TMNT story, but i promise i'll update when i can until it's complete.
Dang that hit me in the feels!
Also I didn't think of the possibility of Spike not been able to understand Equestrian speech anymore, at least he found a way around that cause Smolder's gonna need some help after this!
Oh man
I didn't expect Garble to sacrifice himself like that.
Smolder is gonna need alot of comfort
She lost a brother and possibly her only family left is gone now
Is there a way the Garble can be brought back to life like Spike did in the last story?
Hoping Garble can be brought back to life, for Smolder's sake! Also that this isn't the last time we see her in this story & that she can help out Spike/Ori during the rest of this tale!
Hi! I really liked your fanfiction... But I'm a Shriek fan. And I have often seen how many people miss important details in it and I want you to understand this antagonist correctly. I'm just giving a fact-based critique and just want to make your story better.
So. Where did you go wrong?
Start...
1. Hearing Shriek. In chapter 10, it is very striking that the Scream seems to be deaf. Namely, our heroes have been chatting since the very entrance to her forest. They talk when they entered the forest, to the very end... And most importantly, when they sneak past Shriek! In the game, Ori and Ku were silent, but Shriek noticed them with just movements and small noises. And in the desert, she also reacted to the slightest fluctuations. As in reality, owls have excellent hearing, so much so that even blind owls can feed. That is, considering how attentive Shriek is and hears well in the game and how she rushes to every sound in her forest, she should have cut off our chatterers in the second minute of the conversation, and hear them a kilometer away. Her rustle is alarming, and her chatter should automatically give away all our heroes and their location. And Spike and the others didn't even whisper, but talked almost at the top of their voices. Let them henceforth, for example, communicate by signs or gestures of the claw next to the Shriek. But it's really strange that Shriek, who attacks a mosquito because of the noise, and generally hears perfectly, does not hear how five voices chatter not far from her.
2. How could Garbel's fire in 10 parts cause Shriek pain if it was aimed at the leg? Shriek has her crutches made of stone, and even if there was flesh under the stone, it is precisely that Shriek's stilts are completely closed and as thick as possible. And the stone does not heat up well at the same time. Garbel had to either shoot fire where in the eyes or neck so that he would somehow cause discomfort to the scream, or fry the scream leg for 2 hours so that it would heat up, given how poorly the stone heats up. Otherwise, she wouldn't have noticed the fire at the stilt. She just has them all made of stone. It is also strange if having an iron prosthetic arm, someone felt the pain of the prosthesis if it was damaged.
3. For the future and in general. The strength of the Shriek armor.
Many underestimate the strength of the Shriek. The fact is that she was defeated only by Ori due to the fact that he only hit her open face where the armor cracked. That is, apart from the open area, Shriek did not have a moment when something could penetrate her armor except for the powerful light of the tree.
In more detail. Shriek can break through stone and obstacles with her body, the guardians of the forest cannot cope with her, and Ori himself is helpless in front of her while Shriek's armor is intact. Nothing could harm her. And the main thing is the moment in the desert. Shriek's armor was able to save her from being hit by the light of the Forest tree. In the first part, the light of the tree could simply burn Kuro in a second, despite the fact that it is quite strong. And here Shriek survived the stroke of light and did not die. She did not even receive severe wounds and quickly recovered. That is, she experiences a force capable of killing ordinary, durable owls instantly. After all, the armor on his head was broken, but Shriek's head itself was not injured. And if you compare the tree of the forest and the tree of harmony roughly... Then Shriek can even survive the use of harmony elements against her.
I mean, if she has to fight ponies and others, then the magic of simple unicorns won't do anything to her. And the magic of the Alicorns is simple, it will just tingle a little, and the most powerful spells will be more like a slap in the face for her. Plus, even without the Shriek armor, as the owl of the universe, Ori is strong.
And also, because of the nature of innate decline, she is probably very resistant to magic. That is, if you use transformation magic or age change magic against her, then it will not work. It just really seems to me that ponies will appear in this story later...
3. Shriek's abilities. In addition to petrification, she also has a laser from her mouth, a deafening scream and much more.
4. Shriek does not know how or does not want to speak. This is logical. She always grew up between the dead and the ashes. No one taught her how to speak. And even if she can, she loves silence so much that she won't open her mouth. I mean, she will never talk except for a certain moment when she is just maral broken. I just want to say that she is unlikely to chatter or shout threatening words. She was even always silent in the game and only howled.
5. Shriek is a smart huntress, not a dumb monster. In the game, she constantly attacked, but realizing that she would not succeed, she retreated and waited for the moment to strike again. A striking example is when the soul of a tree hit her hard in the desert, but she did not climb the gap, but retreated and then struck at the light of the tree as the main threat. I just don't want her to be made into a simple monster. She is fierce but a hunter and at least understands who is threatening her and can retreat for a new blow.
6. The character of Shriek. Alas, if anything, talking about friendship won't help her. The fact is that Shriek even denies Ori's mercy. She was born among corpses, and everyone around her turned away from her. She does not know how to trust others and simply does not understand such concepts as friendship and kindness. It's just that you can't lure her to the light with conversations and songs. She has had a severe mental trauma since childhood.
Well. I just wanted to clarify important details about Shriek. I'm adoring this owl. And as for me, she can even beat Twilight with friends and alicorns. And to withstand the power of the elements, given that the elements are not omnipotent. In the comics, for example, they didn't work against Discord when he became the epitome of order.
I personally think it will work out even so:
The ponies release a ray of harmony from the elements in a scream, but the Scream shoots towards the ray of elements with a laser from the mouth and the laser scream cuts the ray of elements, scattering it and hits the ponies, turning them into stone ...
What do you think about my criticism and opinion?
Good luck with this piece!
Another rollercoaster of emotions on these recent chapters, hope we get to see how Smolder's holding up soon!
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